George Carlin and Ivory Soap
practicing for the big leagues40 total reviews
Comment from forestport12
Oh so funny. I wished I read and voted. I don't see how I could have voted for anyone else. Congratulation! You have managed to avoid letting all those little red lines get you that say you have a spag. Way to go. Stan
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
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Oh so funny. I wished I read and voted. I don't see how I could have voted for anyone else. Congratulation! You have managed to avoid letting all those little red lines get you that say you have a spag. Way to go. Stan
Comment Written 08-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
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Stan, I'm so glad whenever you get a chance to read any of my stuff. You always make me feel good and like I've written something not too bad. Thank you for your kind review and your comments that always make me smile.
Thank you!
Karyn :>)
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Oh, I was only blushing, nah, you make me smile. You have a good big heart. That is why I don't mind when you honestly critique me. You go girl! Stan
Comment from vickib
Oh man, how super funny and cute is this? I came to say congrats!!! and got to read this wonderfully written story. You touched on many memories with this one with 3 brothers and growing up at the baseball field then, the soap...I know what that taste like. I used to like it when they would scrape it across your teath so it would stay and stay and stay. GEORGE CARLIN!!!!! He was my favorite. And the ending was just so so cute to what a kid would say. Gosh I just love this whole story. I could go on and on but you get the idea how much I liked it. I never ever did the soap treatment to my kids. :) XOXOXOX Vicki Wish I had a six too!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
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Oh man, how super funny and cute is this? I came to say congrats!!! and got to read this wonderfully written story. You touched on many memories with this one with 3 brothers and growing up at the baseball field then, the soap...I know what that taste like. I used to like it when they would scrape it across your teath so it would stay and stay and stay. GEORGE CARLIN!!!!! He was my favorite. And the ending was just so so cute to what a kid would say. Gosh I just love this whole story. I could go on and on but you get the idea how much I liked it. I never ever did the soap treatment to my kids. :) XOXOXOX Vicki Wish I had a six too!
Comment Written 08-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
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Hello Vick! I love this review! Thank you for taking the time to read my story and for your wonderful review and comments. I had fun writing about Joey again and I'm pleased you enjoyed it. I never used the soap punishment on my kids but I do remember the taste of Ivory. LOL I've loved George Carlin since the first time I heard his skit on the seven dirty words in the early 70's. I saw him in Chicago a few months before he died. Thank you, my friend for liking my story.
Karyn :>)
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OMG you lucky woman getting to see George. LOL the 7 dirty words...there won't ever be another one of him. I even cried when he died. I love that you used his name to describe Joey. I cracked up! :)
Comment from rawahymis
What wit! Excellent viewpoint story. The little brat should have had more respctful fear for her mom, but we'll overlook it today!
I suppose at a tender, early age excitement can get the best of us and make one do and say out of line things. It's like being slightly intoxicated.
Well done and congratulations!!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
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What wit! Excellent viewpoint story. The little brat should have had more respctful fear for her mom, but we'll overlook it today!
I suppose at a tender, early age excitement can get the best of us and make one do and say out of line things. It's like being slightly intoxicated.
Well done and congratulations!!
Comment Written 08-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
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Thank you so much, rawahymis, for taking the time to read and comment on my story. I appreciate your kind review, your congratulations, and for liking my story.
Smiles,
Indy :>)
Comment from starkat
D-lightful story as the soxless-Sox win the game all because of Joey and his compassionate Mom, who spared him the Ivory Soap and made him sit down and eat that delicious spaghetti covered with her special sauce. If Joey's dad heard the 'titties in a twist' line, poor Joey would probably be still rinsing out his mouth from the Ivory soap. Actually, Joey was just smart-alecky enough with his last question that his mom did chase him up the stairs, and then Joey locked himself in the bathroom. "Open the door right now, mister", I can hear his mom say.
Congratulations on winning the contest, IvoryIndy! You did a fabulous job creating this scene and adding just the right amount of colorful dialogue. This is such a wonderfully told story from the eyes of a child. This realistic scene is a delicious, tasty morsel with humor resonating all over the ball park. Joey is a fun character - little guy about 8 or 9yrs old. About that age I remember my mom threatening me with the Ivory soap-mouth wash-out. Now that I think about it, the soap didn't really taste that bad.
Again, congratulations on this home run of a story! Loved it! ... ;0) KoachKat
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
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D-lightful story as the soxless-Sox win the game all because of Joey and his compassionate Mom, who spared him the Ivory Soap and made him sit down and eat that delicious spaghetti covered with her special sauce. If Joey's dad heard the 'titties in a twist' line, poor Joey would probably be still rinsing out his mouth from the Ivory soap. Actually, Joey was just smart-alecky enough with his last question that his mom did chase him up the stairs, and then Joey locked himself in the bathroom. "Open the door right now, mister", I can hear his mom say.
Congratulations on winning the contest, IvoryIndy! You did a fabulous job creating this scene and adding just the right amount of colorful dialogue. This is such a wonderfully told story from the eyes of a child. This realistic scene is a delicious, tasty morsel with humor resonating all over the ball park. Joey is a fun character - little guy about 8 or 9yrs old. About that age I remember my mom threatening me with the Ivory soap-mouth wash-out. Now that I think about it, the soap didn't really taste that bad.
Again, congratulations on this home run of a story! Loved it! ... ;0) KoachKat
Comment Written 08-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
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KoachKat, your review for my story is awesome! Thanks for taking the time to read about Joey and I'm so glad you liked the lil bugger. I've used him several times in stories and he's kinda a mixture of my brother, my son, and my nephews.
Thank you for the incredible rating, your always encouraging comments, and for being such a die-hard fan.
Smiles always,
IvoryIndy :>)
Comment from sherrygreywolf
Well, I'd have to say you hit a home-run with this one! Your characters are believable and the dialogue, while not what you generally hear from a 2nd grader, is totally in character for a young man who's been fed the line that Joey obviously has. I gotta love Mom's attitude and solution, though it never worked with MY Joseph. I wouldn't change a thing!
have a great week & good luck with the contest - sherry
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Well, I'd have to say you hit a home-run with this one! Your characters are believable and the dialogue, while not what you generally hear from a 2nd grader, is totally in character for a young man who's been fed the line that Joey obviously has. I gotta love Mom's attitude and solution, though it never worked with MY Joseph. I wouldn't change a thing!
have a great week & good luck with the contest - sherry
Comment Written 07-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Thanks for this wonderful review, Sherry. I appreciate your great comments and thank you for selecting my story to read and for your best wishes in the contest. Thanks!
Comment from ScarletClearwater
Ok, I told myself not to cringe, because a lot of people write stories to be funny, but they aren't. Humor has a brand, but mostly it should appeal to everyone. I am shocked you took the risk of adding such language into a child's vocabulary, but man, I was cracking up by the end. I actually shed a tear! It was an innocent story in an ironic way.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Ok, I told myself not to cringe, because a lot of people write stories to be funny, but they aren't. Humor has a brand, but mostly it should appeal to everyone. I am shocked you took the risk of adding such language into a child's vocabulary, but man, I was cracking up by the end. I actually shed a tear! It was an innocent story in an ironic way.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Thank you for this wonderful review, ScarletClearwater. I'm so glad you read past the words to get to the humor of the story. To have a reader laugh is the best compliment this story could receive. Thank you!
Comment from RebelRose
This is priceless. It goes under the heading of "Kids say the darndest things". I remember my brothers getting their mouths washed out when we were kids. Great story.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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This is priceless. It goes under the heading of "Kids say the darndest things". I remember my brothers getting their mouths washed out when we were kids. Great story.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Thank you, rebelrose, for this great review and kind comments for my story. Yeah, my brother did, too. I appreciate your taking he time to read.
Comment from Minglement
This is such a clever entry for the 'Through The Eyes of a Child' contest. I do hate that language, but I find George Carlin to be hysterical in spite of it. I can see him like this as a child LOL. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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This is such a clever entry for the 'Through The Eyes of a Child' contest. I do hate that language, but I find George Carlin to be hysterical in spite of it. I can see him like this as a child LOL. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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It's wonderful to hear from you, Minglement, and I appreciate your kind review and great comments. Thank you so much for reading and your best wishes.
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You are welcome, mystery writer :) When it's over, I'll know who you are... Marcia
Comment from MJTexasRose
ROFLMAO!!! I don't know what to say except that I raised that kid! I remember the time he called his sister a "bitch". I grabbed him and shoved him against the wall (he was a pretty big kid by them) I kept trying to make him tell her he was sorry. Finally he did and I let go of him. He got to the door and looked back at her and said "I'm sorry your sorry, BITCH". If I could have caught him he wouldn't have lived to give me grandkids.
No errors that I found. Well written and sounds just like kids.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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ROFLMAO!!! I don't know what to say except that I raised that kid! I remember the time he called his sister a "bitch". I grabbed him and shoved him against the wall (he was a pretty big kid by them) I kept trying to make him tell her he was sorry. Finally he did and I let go of him. He got to the door and looked back at her and said "I'm sorry your sorry, BITCH". If I could have caught him he wouldn't have lived to give me grandkids.
No errors that I found. Well written and sounds just like kids.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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What a wonderful review for my story, MJTexasRose. Thank you for selecting my story to read and for your kind review. I loved your son's story and thanks for sharing it. I'm delighted it gave you a smile,and your ROTFLMAO is the best compliment.
Comment from Spiritual Echo
No they may not, but none the less this is a brilliant entry, capturing the pathos, innocence and irony of trying to emulate and aspir to being a "real" man.
Great understanding and even better articulation of a boys destiny and dreams,
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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No they may not, but none the less this is a brilliant entry, capturing the pathos, innocence and irony of trying to emulate and aspir to being a "real" man.
Great understanding and even better articulation of a boys destiny and dreams,
Comment Written 07-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Thank you, Spiritual Echo, for your great review and for taking the time to read and comment on my story. I appreciate your feedback.