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Independence

Acrostic

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Comment from adewpearl
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Debbie, I'm working to see the dark font on the dark background. Reading it is doable but not easy.
This is a solid acrostic for the word Indpendence.
You capture the essence of the concept with well-chosen words like individuality, self-sufficiency, personal choice - a thoughtful observation. Brooke

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2011


reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
    I did change the font color. Thanks for letting me know!!! Debbie
Comment from barkingdog
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Great poem. Love your acrostic. Try a WHITE font, it'll pop off the blue background. Independence should not fade. Make it POP.
I will suggest some punctuation below:

Independence

Individuality and
Need for self-sufficiency
Desiring freedom and
Equality, valuing
Personal choice.
Enthusiastically meeting
Needs by working to
Develop strength and
Encourage self to
Never give up ... being able to
Cope with challenges and
Everything life brings.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2011


reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
    I did change the font and changed some punctuation I don't usually use periods. Thanks for your review and suggestions. Have a great evening!!! Debbie
reply by barkingdog on 26-Jun-2011
    I saw you on the front page. Congrats! I think the periods must be optional. I should check that. Another thing to learn.LOL:)BD
Comment from Janie King
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Independence is important...it's hard to give up any of it but I guess my prayer is that the part I have to give up is in the area of letting someone else mop my floor, go to the store for me, etc. I am praying for you. God bless.

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2011


reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
    Thank you for your kind review!!! Debbie
Comment from Maureen's Pen
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You have unknowingly wrote about my independence too. After losing so much to MS, then trying to build a new life and accept the changes and also push the boundaries of change....well done...A painful memory of who I was before, so I can relate.
May all your health return.
Maureen

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2011


reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
    I know I am not alone in this and I should be grateful. Right now I know I will get used to it, but am feeling resentful. Thanke you and my best to you! Debbie
reply by Maureen's Pen on 25-Jun-2011
    It's like a "to do list"...first you have to feel resentful and know what that truly is, bringing awareness to it and finally releasing it and moving onto the next one.
    Hope that helps my friend.
    Maureen
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
    Thanks so much!!! Debbie
Comment from Jean Lutz
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Normally when we think of Independence we think of it as national. Your words show the need for individual independence. I like that you have so much red, white and blue in your art and color. Best wishes for your goals.

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2011


reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
    Thank you for your kind review!!! Debbie
Comment from amarherig14
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I enjoyed this poem very much.Indendence should be valued.In your case at least you know how you would use it.You are using your writing as your way to express it.To me it seems that you never give up because you are coping with everything that comes your way.This is inspiring.
This will encourage others.Good Luck.

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2011


reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
    Thank you so much for your kind words and encouragement-and the 6 stars too~Debbie
Comment from nanna
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I like the setting and illustration just as well as I enjoyed your poem. You took an very long word and managed to make a poem according to the rules. Not just a poem, but a very good poem which could be a lesson to all of us.
I hope that you are now better and able to reach for this independence you crave Nanna

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2011


reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
    Thank you for your kind words and encouragement!!! Debbie
Comment from bluerose675
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This has been well thought out and a reminder to all of us about something we take for granted. Like everything, we miss it when we don't have it anymore. I hope you get better soon.
Cheers,
Norma

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 Comment Written 24-Jun-2011


reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
    Thank you for your kind words and review!!! Debbie