The English Assignment
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "A nightmare come true."The author tells a tale how he tried to better him
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Comment from keondae
This is so amazing. I was really impressed by your story. The natural flowing and smooth writing. It is nearly a novel-look. I especially enjoyed reading the last part which is a poem-form called Twisted Faces. I'm sorry I ran out of six stars. Your work is exceptional. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2012
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This is so amazing. I was really impressed by your story. The natural flowing and smooth writing. It is nearly a novel-look. I especially enjoyed reading the last part which is a poem-form called Twisted Faces. I'm sorry I ran out of six stars. Your work is exceptional. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2012
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thanks im glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from kkmbetts
The beginning of the story caught my attention because it brought back some of my past. However with that being said, I disliked the part of her moving out of her home because of her mothers new husband who doesn't like kids. I think maybe have the mother loose custody of the child because of being an unfit mother would be more believable.
The story is good I like your idea, would like for the main character to be older and have a group of kids to bury the one kid to make the story more believable. I would read the story and have others to read it as well because it is a good story plot. Just need to be more suspenseful.
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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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The beginning of the story caught my attention because it brought back some of my past. However with that being said, I disliked the part of her moving out of her home because of her mothers new husband who doesn't like kids. I think maybe have the mother loose custody of the child because of being an unfit mother would be more believable.
The story is good I like your idea, would like for the main character to be older and have a group of kids to bury the one kid to make the story more believable. I would read the story and have others to read it as well because it is a good story plot. Just need to be more suspenseful.
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Comment Written 31-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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ssory but the story is true and factual. That is indeed what happened. And my mother left me because she met a man who didn't want kids. didnt I list this as non fiction auto biographical. Well thanks for taking the time to read it and for your comments.
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i don't think this review you gave was ver y fair could you consider revising it?
Comment from Misrael
That must have been just awful to have gone through all that. I can't imagine how horrible that must have been for you. May God help you.
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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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That must have been just awful to have gone through all that. I can't imagine how horrible that must have been for you. May God help you.
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Comment Written 31-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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thanks for reading and reviewing.