Leslie Ann's Exploits
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Comment from steevie
So finally the big confrontation. Leslie has met her match. Seems that Mary Ann is cute as a bugs ear and this infuriates Leslie, even though Leslie tried to put Mary Ann down.
Great job, Dossie. Your storyline is compelling and keeps me coming back for more.
I look forward to the next segment.
:o)
steve
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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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So finally the big confrontation. Leslie has met her match. Seems that Mary Ann is cute as a bugs ear and this infuriates Leslie, even though Leslie tried to put Mary Ann down.
Great job, Dossie. Your storyline is compelling and keeps me coming back for more.
I look forward to the next segment.
:o)
steve
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Comment Written 18-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much, Steevie!!
You're welcome, Dossie
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steve
Comment from Hareem.S
A wonderful tale of a manipulaive woman and a man trapped. I liked how vividly you have penned it down. It was a pleasure to read it.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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A wonderful tale of a manipulaive woman and a man trapped. I liked how vividly you have penned it down. It was a pleasure to read it.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much, Hareem S!!
Comment from Jade Lawson
Very interesting reading, kept me interested to know more about the following events. Indeed, I think many people will be interested to read due to the story itself and how articulated and enjoyable to read it is produced by the author.
Enjoyed x
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Very interesting reading, kept me interested to know more about the following events. Indeed, I think many people will be interested to read due to the story itself and how articulated and enjoyable to read it is produced by the author.
Enjoyed x
Comment Written 18-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much AngelLawson!!
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you are welcome
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Oh yes it had to happen my friend the two rivals meet and you covered it so well in this story poem I enjoyed again this is well written and reads very well regards Jill
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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Oh yes it had to happen my friend the two rivals meet and you covered it so well in this story poem I enjoyed again this is well written and reads very well regards Jill
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Comment Written 18-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much, Jill!
Comment from yeen
When writing a story, it needs to comes across believable and the storyline is certainly believable, yet the writing indicates it may be by a writer at the beginning of their career so practice writing scenes with sensory detail that has affected your own or others you know first and then study and watch and write some more.
There is potential.
Don't give up, we all were a beginner at one time.
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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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When writing a story, it needs to comes across believable and the storyline is certainly believable, yet the writing indicates it may be by a writer at the beginning of their career so practice writing scenes with sensory detail that has affected your own or others you know first and then study and watch and write some more.
There is potential.
Don't give up, we all were a beginner at one time.
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Comment Written 18-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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I'm not a beginner and this chapter does exactly what I want it to do.