Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Haydon, who ran with scissors..."A collection of my children's poems
25 total reviews
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. I love the poem. Now that is warning a young boy will take. Even a very young boy would not want to hurt that part,Some people need a good reason to take the warning seriously.Great work.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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I love the picture. I love the poem. Now that is warning a young boy will take. Even a very young boy would not want to hurt that part,Some people need a good reason to take the warning seriously.Great work.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Laugh,laugh,laugh,laugh,chuckle,checkle, oh my what a story. I do hope it was not true. I thought he killed the cat till the last line told for sure. My child was running with a knitting needle in his mouth. And fell
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Laugh,laugh,laugh,laugh,chuckle,checkle, oh my what a story. I do hope it was not true. I thought he killed the cat till the last line told for sure. My child was running with a knitting needle in his mouth. And fell
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thanks, barb.
Steve
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A very funny read with great lyrical flow to this poem.You have certainly covered the 'laughter' subject with some very amusingncedotes throughout.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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A very funny read with great lyrical flow to this poem.You have certainly covered the 'laughter' subject with some very amusingncedotes throughout.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thanks, Pearl.
Steve
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this poem with a moral to the story, i enjoyed reading this one. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this poem with a moral to the story, i enjoyed reading this one. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from cvcopac
What a laugh! I think there's not a hitch one in this perfectly crafted verse, or story. Just an incredible and intertaining story from start to finish. The message is clear: "By God take care of Willy." Kenny
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What a laugh! I think there's not a hitch one in this perfectly crafted verse, or story. Just an incredible and intertaining story from start to finish. The message is clear: "By God take care of Willy." Kenny
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much for the kind words an the six stars.
Steve
Comment from Black_Oxygen
This is a fun read. The rhymes are nicely placed and
it flows smoothly. The attached illustration is a
mirror that reflects the message. Thank You for your
creation.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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This is a fun read. The rhymes are nicely placed and
it flows smoothly. The attached illustration is a
mirror that reflects the message. Thank You for your
creation.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from Matthew M.
I was really enjoying this and then I read about Aunt Sue's mustache and that was the clincher for the six stars. The ending was hilarious. I will definitely walk when carrying scissors.
One small edit:
oftentimes needs a space between the two words.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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I was really enjoying this and then I read about Aunt Sue's mustache and that was the clincher for the six stars. The ending was hilarious. I will definitely walk when carrying scissors.
One small edit:
oftentimes needs a space between the two words.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thnaks for the great review and the six stars.
Nope 'oftentimes' as an alternative to 'often' is a word in its own right...
Steve
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I am sorry. You are correct. Oftentimes is a word. I just learned something new. Can I give you seven stars? :)
Comment from warbler
I loved your poem/story. It certainly has a good moral.
It was very humorous. My favorite was that he even kissed his Auntie Sue! The ending was quite tragic.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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I loved your poem/story. It certainly has a good moral.
It was very humorous. My favorite was that he even kissed his Auntie Sue! The ending was quite tragic.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from Craigitar
This is funny--a cautionary tale that should be ignored by none. This was the same sage advise I received when a lad but I always imagined loosing an eye or two. Well written and engaging. Good job and luck with the contest.
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This is funny--a cautionary tale that should be ignored by none. This was the same sage advise I received when a lad but I always imagined loosing an eye or two. Well written and engaging. Good job and luck with the contest.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from BeasPeas
It took some thought to come up with the humorous lines in this poem--like: '(Despite the thick moustache she grew.)' and the last line is priceless. Got a kick out of this line, 'Oh, what a rumpus! What a ruction!'
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It took some thought to come up with the humorous lines in this poem--like: '(Despite the thick moustache she grew.)' and the last line is priceless. Got a kick out of this line, 'Oh, what a rumpus! What a ruction!'
Comment Written 20-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind words.
Steve