Leslie Ann's Exploits
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Has Leslie Ann nabbed Jonathan?"A spoiled young lady who learns the hard way
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Comment from angelmagnet
The plot thickens! Everyone seems to have something evil on their minds. This is becoming a playground for predators. Just think it started out so sweetly and with the innocence that harmless flirtation promises. Good job, keep going
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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The plot thickens! Everyone seems to have something evil on their minds. This is becoming a playground for predators. Just think it started out so sweetly and with the innocence that harmless flirtation promises. Good job, keep going
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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I'm so happy you're enjoying this one. I sincerely appreciate your encouragement!!
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Dossie,
This is a good continuation to the story. Leslie Ann has conjured up a concoction to make Mary Ann sick. Is that all she intends to do? It is a suspenseful read.
Curtis
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Dossie,
This is a good continuation to the story. Leslie Ann has conjured up a concoction to make Mary Ann sick. Is that all she intends to do? It is a suspenseful read.
Curtis
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much. Leslie Ann wants her rival out of the way. She believes she has a poisonous concoction that will do the job.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes my friend this is very well written I admire you for being able to rhyme this story so well it takes so much hard work and this shows in the quality of the poem well done I enjoyed regards Jill
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Yes my friend this is very well written I admire you for being able to rhyme this story so well it takes so much hard work and this shows in the quality of the poem well done I enjoyed regards Jill
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Thanks. It's becoming a bit tedious to get the message across and rhyme it, but I'm loving the challenge.
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Why don't you turn this into prose?
It seems to be a story that is building flames and needs a little more oxygen to reach it's full potential.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Why don't you turn this into prose?
It seems to be a story that is building flames and needs a little more oxygen to reach it's full potential.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Thanks. I'll consider doing that. I never meant to take it this far, but once I gave Leslie Ann free rein, she took off - LOL.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
What a bad situation. I can almost feel sorry for the men in the story.She is toying with trouble in the lab. I was afraid she was going to throw acid in Mary Ann's face. Things will erupt soon and it won't be pretty. Nancy
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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What a bad situation. I can almost feel sorry for the men in the story.She is toying with trouble in the lab. I was afraid she was going to throw acid in Mary Ann's face. Things will erupt soon and it won't be pretty. Nancy
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much, Nancy! No it's not going to be pretty. I appreciate your support of this one; I appreciate it!
Comment from steevie
oooooohhhhh, this is getting juicier by the minute! So Leslie has become proficient with the chemicals and so Mary Ann is in for a 'treat' of sorts. But Mary Ann may have a little something up her sleeve for Leslie Ann.
If there is one thing in life that I've learned, never toy with a woman's emotions, because it ain't pretty, sister. LOL
Great job on this, Dossie. I'm looking forward to the next installment!! :o)
hugs
steve
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2013
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oooooohhhhh, this is getting juicier by the minute! So Leslie has become proficient with the chemicals and so Mary Ann is in for a 'treat' of sorts. But Mary Ann may have a little something up her sleeve for Leslie Ann.
If there is one thing in life that I've learned, never toy with a woman's emotions, because it ain't pretty, sister. LOL
Great job on this, Dossie. I'm looking forward to the next installment!! :o)
hugs
steve
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2013
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You got that right, steevie. Things are about to get real crazy and mixed up. I hope you like the twist my somewhat twisted mind is taking me - LOL.
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Yes, I love this story so much. I like the fact that I never know what the evil/delightful Leslie is up to!!
Great job, Dossie
hugs
steve
Comment from Enrique28
Passion with murder in mind! A very well written chapter of narrative with some clever depictions, as in "the effect of arsenic over Parmesan cheese", and "the ardor of their pornographic mating". Very interesting indeed.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2013
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Passion with murder in mind! A very well written chapter of narrative with some clever depictions, as in "the effect of arsenic over Parmesan cheese", and "the ardor of their pornographic mating". Very interesting indeed.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2013
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Thanks, Enrique28! I LOVE this encouraging review. Thanks so much!
Comment from EmberSnowcat
Wow. A bit frightening. An interesting tale though. Very easy to be hooked and your wording does encourage the reader to want more. I'm not a fan of the font chosen, but that is only because I have a hard time reading that type of print. Other than that excellent job and good story line for this chapter.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2013
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Wow. A bit frightening. An interesting tale though. Very easy to be hooked and your wording does encourage the reader to want more. I'm not a fan of the font chosen, but that is only because I have a hard time reading that type of print. Other than that excellent job and good story line for this chapter.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2013
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I will use a larger font with the next installment, EmberSnowcat. Thanks for this great review,I appreciate it!
Comment from Gungalo
Mary Ann was all charm as she fixed Jonathan's dinner,
Sighing deeply as he pulled her close for a sensual hug.
She thought of Leslie Ann and her soft heart hardened,
In a day or two, the little sexy siren wouldn't be so smug.
Oh Titan you are teasing the heck out of us girl. Both of them have a plan but we don't know either of them. LOL.
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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Mary Ann was all charm as she fixed Jonathan's dinner,
Sighing deeply as he pulled her close for a sensual hug.
She thought of Leslie Ann and her soft heart hardened,
In a day or two, the little sexy siren wouldn't be so smug.
Oh Titan you are teasing the heck out of us girl. Both of them have a plan but we don't know either of them. LOL.
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Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Thanks, Gungalo! I appreciate your review and generous rating! These are two headstrong women who are equally determined to win.
Comment from barkingdog
The revenge she has planned for Leslie Ann doesn't sound like a good one. Ex-lax and various chemicals will make her think she has a disease. You have lots of things going on in your story, making it interesting.
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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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The revenge she has planned for Leslie Ann doesn't sound like a good one. Ex-lax and various chemicals will make her think she has a disease. You have lots of things going on in your story, making it interesting.
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Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Thanks, barking dog, for this encouraging review. I appreciate your encouragement and reading my post. Be blessed!