Comment from Siouxsun

Excellent

great opening sentence. Fourth line seems strained trying to rhyme with second line. It rhymes but flow is is off. Wonderfully expressed conclusion.

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014

Thank you so much for your suggestion. I will work on it. This is the learning experience. Thanks.

Comment from sandy lotto

Excellent

I realy like this poem..there are a couple of things I would tweak...line 8 I would add as I stand in the rain it has a better flow...and line 11 I would say just lean on me..once again it has better flow...that's just my opinion hope I didn't discourage you...you did a great job

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014

No discouragement at all. I appreciate feedback and will try the suggestions you have given. Thanks so very much.

Comment from lakeport

Excellent

When I fail, indeed that's a very emotional expressed poem,
nice rhyming, God luck at the contest, God bless you. Hugs!lakeport....

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014

Thank you very much for your review and comments.

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

Nicely flowing poem with powerful message and imagery. You have used good choice of words and rhyme and is effective. Your illustration was very fitting.

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014

Thank you very much for your review and comments.

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

I have been there I have felt despair, I have felt I did not want to live, I had lost faith in almost everything in my life. I did not understand why. When I learned why, it made all the difference, I live my life with joy and enthusiasm, I am disabled, but life has improved immensely. I found my best friend ME I am kind and loving to my best friend and I get it back a hundredfold.
Everybody finds peace and contentment from different sources, I found mine within. Mary

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014

Thank you so very much for your reviews and comments. They are all appreciated.

Comment from Dklrdmcches

Excellent

A very thoughtful piece that speaks of anguish only to end with Hope. Your soft-whispering tone set the table for a great read which went well with your choice of imagery and words. Great Job and the best of luck in your writing...dark lord

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014

Thank you so very much for your reviews and comments. They are all appreciated.

Comment from Jean Lutz

Excellent

I wish I had a six star rating left to adorn on this one. I do send you my best wishes in the contest. This echoes one that I have written for the contest, once I review enough to post it. I will visit your portfolio for more samplings of your writing.

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014

Thank you so very much for your reviews and comments. They are all appreciated.

Comment from Ben Colder

Excellent

I call it praying through. You explain it well in poetry . My compliments for a nice flowing poem. He is there all the time. Blessings to you.

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014

Thank you so very much for your reviews and comments. They are all appreciated.

Comment from padumachitta

Excellent

Hello agood poem about your faith in god.
The poem reads well and flows evenly. It is short but not simple. Life can be hard, faith is a hlep.
May you be well.

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014

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Comment from B. Diehl

Excellent

"My load seems too heavy. How long can I bear

The heartache, the suffering, and pain?

Life isn't worth living. The sunshine is gone.

My tears fall. I stand in the rain."




^ You've done a great job here with portraying strong emotion in such simple language. This is a profound piece.

-B<3<3

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014

Thank you so very much for your reviews and comments. They are all appreciated.