Free Verse Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "The Dancers"A collection of free verse poems
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Comment from James Chaima Phiri
I may not have understood the meaning of the poem. However, in my country, Zambia, and other African countries there are some dances which do not require the sound of drums. All you need is the sound of your feet and the clapping of the hands. Spice that with melodious voices of women and you have a very interesting night full of entertainment.
This poem sounds as if the three girls were frighten and they ran away. Their feet produced some sound as they were running. When they reached home, they discovered that they were afraid of nothing and started laughing. Such situations are common to youths this part of the world. Whatever the real meaning, I love the poem because it reminds me of the days of my youths.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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I may not have understood the meaning of the poem. However, in my country, Zambia, and other African countries there are some dances which do not require the sound of drums. All you need is the sound of your feet and the clapping of the hands. Spice that with melodious voices of women and you have a very interesting night full of entertainment.
This poem sounds as if the three girls were frighten and they ran away. Their feet produced some sound as they were running. When they reached home, they discovered that they were afraid of nothing and started laughing. Such situations are common to youths this part of the world. Whatever the real meaning, I love the poem because it reminds me of the days of my youths.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Very many thanks, James, for your review. Much appreciated! I found your comments most interesting.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, tfawcus, i enjoyed reading this lively dance of words that follows the dance of the girls that show their glee in living life. i enjoyed reading it and love the picture that inspired it
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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this is very well written, tfawcus, i enjoyed reading this lively dance of words that follows the dance of the girls that show their glee in living life. i enjoyed reading it and love the picture that inspired it
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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So glad you enjoyed this one, Sweetwoodjax, and thank you so much for your lovely review.
Comment from Irish Rain
I absolutely loved this! And I did sense the quiet, then motion, then quiet! Beautiful, especially the concept of dancing to the wind...I am out of six stars, so instead, I send you blessings tonight!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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I absolutely loved this! And I did sense the quiet, then motion, then quiet! Beautiful, especially the concept of dancing to the wind...I am out of six stars, so instead, I send you blessings tonight!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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So glad you enjoyed this one, Jo, and thank you so much for your lovely review.
Comment from Dom G Robles
The poem, I suppose, is trying to achieve some kind of experiment that deviates from the usual characteristics of
a poem that follows regular beats and rhythm. And it discusses about three dancers going home at dusk with great coordination. And the picture is illustrative of the poem. However, I can't see anything more than that. It is a great poem but, I think, there should be something more to it
that should give a message to the readers.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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The poem, I suppose, is trying to achieve some kind of experiment that deviates from the usual characteristics of
a poem that follows regular beats and rhythm. And it discusses about three dancers going home at dusk with great coordination. And the picture is illustrative of the poem. However, I can't see anything more than that. It is a great poem but, I think, there should be something more to it
that should give a message to the readers.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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Thank you for your review, Dom. The intended message in the last stanza was that people are sometimes able to find happiness despite the hardships they endure.
Comment from victor 66
At what point in the aging process do we lose this ability to be spontaneous and to express freely. Maybe a few of us can recall that wonder of being young and the appreciation of joy. I remember as a child breaking out in some kind of song with my friends and it was a great time. Thank you for the poem and the memories.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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At what point in the aging process do we lose this ability to be spontaneous and to express freely. Maybe a few of us can recall that wonder of being young and the appreciation of joy. I remember as a child breaking out in some kind of song with my friends and it was a great time. Thank you for the poem and the memories.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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So glad that this one struck a chord with you, Victor. Thank you so much for your reflective review.
Comment from Angel Blessings
I loved the free form, great presentation. I actually could picture these girls doing their dance. Great imagery.Thank you for sharing. Angel Blessings
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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I loved the free form, great presentation. I actually could picture these girls doing their dance. Great imagery.Thank you for sharing. Angel Blessings
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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So glad you enjoyed this one, Angel, and thank you so much for your lovely review.
Comment from kiwijenny
This is simply great...............I love the free form because it follows the spontaneity of the dancers. If you had written a formulaic poem it would have been as out of place as if these three had danced a waltz...I LOVED THE IMAGERY most of all . I love the joyousness of it.
Well done I wish I had a six.
God bless
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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This is simply great...............I love the free form because it follows the spontaneity of the dancers. If you had written a formulaic poem it would have been as out of place as if these three had danced a waltz...I LOVED THE IMAGERY most of all . I love the joyousness of it.
Well done I wish I had a six.
God bless
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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So glad you enjoyed this one, Jenny, and thank you so much for your lovely review.
Comment from springrain
Your poem Tony, and your daughter s photo, adds up to a lovely piece of art! I think you have succeeded with your attempt to create a crescendo that, in a way, through the girls dance and their laughter, unites them into something that is greater than themselves, as individuals.
To me, that is in explicitly hinted in the first stanza, with the lines "With their arms wrapped together / As one"
And more explicitly said and confirmed in the two last stanzas.
This was an excellent write with a dynamic pulse going through it, where the carrying wave reaches the beach in a mood of joy.
All the best Olof
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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Your poem Tony, and your daughter s photo, adds up to a lovely piece of art! I think you have succeeded with your attempt to create a crescendo that, in a way, through the girls dance and their laughter, unites them into something that is greater than themselves, as individuals.
To me, that is in explicitly hinted in the first stanza, with the lines "With their arms wrapped together / As one"
And more explicitly said and confirmed in the two last stanzas.
This was an excellent write with a dynamic pulse going through it, where the carrying wave reaches the beach in a mood of joy.
All the best Olof
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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So glad you enjoyed this one, Olaf, and thank you so much for your perceptive review.
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You are welcome Tony.
Comment from MM lives on :)
tfawcus what a fun and playful poem this was indeed and I simply loved the use of imagery and thank you for the notes that was kind of your daughter to take the picture.. Thank you ever much for sharing a pleasure it was..
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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tfawcus what a fun and playful poem this was indeed and I simply loved the use of imagery and thank you for the notes that was kind of your daughter to take the picture.. Thank you ever much for sharing a pleasure it was..
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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So glad you enjoyed this one, Christopher, and thank you so much for your review.
Comment from allborn66
This is a wonderful poem. You communicate exuberance, youth and a love for life. The word choice paints a vivid picture. Barbara
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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This is a wonderful poem. You communicate exuberance, youth and a love for life. The word choice paints a vivid picture. Barbara
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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So glad you enjoyed this one, Barbara, and thank you so much for your lovely review.