I Feel You Near
pure desire -free verse20 total reviews
Comment from emrpoems
Good use of personification-
as the fingertips of nature
brushed my hair against my cheek
Beautifully penned free evoking the emotions of love and loneliness brought about by the memories of a loved lost one
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Good use of personification-
as the fingertips of nature
brushed my hair against my cheek
Beautifully penned free evoking the emotions of love and loneliness brought about by the memories of a loved lost one
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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thank you
Comment from words
Such a lovely poem of longing and remembrance.
You have captured the physical reality of memories. They do come back to us through all of our senses.
I was right there with you .
Hugs, d
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Such a lovely poem of longing and remembrance.
You have captured the physical reality of memories. They do come back to us through all of our senses.
I was right there with you .
Hugs, d
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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thank you
Comment from Spitfire
You should have entered this in the contest. It's not the usual sappy stuff. Wonderful simile in stanza four. Nice word pairing with "cushioned voice".
Use of personification in: the fingertips of nature
brushed my hair against my cheek.
I feel the joy and loneliness too.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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You should have entered this in the contest. It's not the usual sappy stuff. Wonderful simile in stanza four. Nice word pairing with "cushioned voice".
Use of personification in: the fingertips of nature
brushed my hair against my cheek.
I feel the joy and loneliness too.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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thank you. what contest?
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The love poem contest.
Comment from NadineM
There's a sadness in this poem, though many words chosen are pleasant and not hinting at sadness at all. Perhaps it's just my interpretation or feelings evoked by reading this piece. Vivid imagery and ample opportunity for imagination and dreamy thoughts. Many romantic words which are of course, my favorite, yet the sadness remains. Always love your free verse writings... thanks for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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There's a sadness in this poem, though many words chosen are pleasant and not hinting at sadness at all. Perhaps it's just my interpretation or feelings evoked by reading this piece. Vivid imagery and ample opportunity for imagination and dreamy thoughts. Many romantic words which are of course, my favorite, yet the sadness remains. Always love your free verse writings... thanks for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Yes, he needs to show up....
Comment from Kingsland
You haven't lost your taste for the romantic side of poetically speaking. This is a well written poetic voice that flows within its message very smoothly. I enjoyed reading and writing this response for it... John
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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You haven't lost your taste for the romantic side of poetically speaking. This is a well written poetic voice that flows within its message very smoothly. I enjoyed reading and writing this response for it... John
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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thank you John!
Comment from Gungalo
The whispers of dawn
wakened me with the nuance of you.
I long for your return
until again,
I will experience you.
Excellent free verse!! A wonderful message to your love to express how you felt. Awesome indeed.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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The whispers of dawn
wakened me with the nuance of you.
I long for your return
until again,
I will experience you.
Excellent free verse!! A wonderful message to your love to express how you felt. Awesome indeed.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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thank you my friend.
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Smile
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Jewel, This is a lovely work, which for the last review of the night was delicious to read. And opened up my eyes some as well, sometimes it takes a bit for things to sink in, but I eventually get it. :)
Exceptional work here in all its way it impacted me.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Dear Jewel, This is a lovely work, which for the last review of the night was delicious to read. And opened up my eyes some as well, sometimes it takes a bit for things to sink in, but I eventually get it. :)
Exceptional work here in all its way it impacted me.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Aw thanks so much sweet Maureen!
Comment from Tonulak
This powerful love poem evoked a wistful, spiritual connection. Yes, passion and desire are spiritual things when it is transcendant of greedy, self-seeking lust. Lovely lyrical lines which is your hallmark in romantic poetry. Nice to read your writing again--Ted
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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This powerful love poem evoked a wistful, spiritual connection. Yes, passion and desire are spiritual things when it is transcendant of greedy, self-seeking lust. Lovely lyrical lines which is your hallmark in romantic poetry. Nice to read your writing again--Ted
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thanks Dearest Ted!
Comment from WLHall
How romantic is this? Very nice. This was just dripping with romance and desire. Excellent flow form of a free verse.
Wanda
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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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How romantic is this? Very nice. This was just dripping with romance and desire. Excellent flow form of a free verse.
Wanda
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Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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thank you WL
Comment from DonandVicki
A very well composed free verse love poem and essay about desire. True love and deep desire will brighten any dark day. Don
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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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A very well composed free verse love poem and essay about desire. True love and deep desire will brighten any dark day. Don
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Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thanks!