Comment from pharp

Excellent

Excellent job in the writing of this beautifully penned poem. It has a very smooth flow; excellent rhyming and meter and read like a lovely story. I found this to be a most enjoyable read and the best entry as well. You have my vote. Blessings and best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015

Thank you so much for your review and comments. I had fun writing this one.

Comment from seaglass

Exceptional

This is an amazing poem written under the restrictions of required words. If only I could have dreams like that. My are much more dismal. The rhyme and meter here are faultless.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2015

Thank you so much for the amazing review you just gave me. You have made my day. I again thank you so very much and you can't begin to know how much fun I had writing this little poem.

Comment from Benjamin Valencia

Excellent

Hi, You painted soothing imagery of a world beyond a door. When you capitalized ME...the intonation means that the lilac tried to make you drink not someone else..you're the only one in the poem...So, I think the intonation should be on DRINK to make it sound as if the flower didn't try to make you do anything else, not smell, not pick, but drink..Cheers.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2015

Thanks so much for reviewing my poem and for your comments. I will check out your suggestion. I hadn't thought of stressing drink. Thanks.

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

I LOVE the dreamy whimsy in this one, AnnieDawn - LITERALLY from the fun ending. ;-)

Excellent flow and rhymes throughout.

Wonderful vivid imagery.

TOP poem.

Best wishes, Ray xx

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2015

Thanks so much for your review and comments. I had fun writing this one.

Comment from Linda Engel

Excellent

Nothing like an adventure to explore a new place, a garden. Good use of all the words given to tell a story on rhyme. I liked how you gave the trees and flowers personalities. Good entry for the contest.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2015

Thanks so much for your review and comments. I had fun writing this one.

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

I like the way you have used the required words to write this poem in a child's voice, that was having a dream. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.

Well done
Mary

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2015

Thanks so much for your review. I had fun writing this one.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

This is such a fun poem! I've read soooo many poems before about 'the secret garden' that at first I thought 'blah....' and then -- you enchanted! *smile*

One note:
1.) A silver bucket sat nearby and they wanted a drink.
--> suggest: A silver bucket sat nearby and they (desired) a drink.
to help with your cadence???

Favorite lines:

The garden was so spacious, where did the end begin?

A lilac tried to make ME drink and grabbed the dipper cup.
I must have screamed a little bit cause that's when I woke up.

Thanks for sharing! This was fun!

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2015

Thanks so much for reviewing and sharing. I will use your suggestion. I really wrote this one in a hurry.

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

A very enjoyable poem with great presentation. Your rhyming couplets are charming and progress your story poem. As a gardener myself, secret/lost gardens are an exceptional find.

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2015

Thanks so much for your review. I had fun writing this one.

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

I loved the book "The Secret Garden" and your poem had that hint of mystery about it, too. Excellent use of the chosen words and rhyming. Most enjoyable. faye

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2015

Thanks so much for your time reviewing my poem. Fun trying to put something together at the last minute with working someone else's word choices in. I enjoyed it.

Comment from meg119

Excellent

What a lovely little poem. I am so thrilled that you chose my Photo to enhance your work. Good luck in your contest. I hope you win :)

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2015

Thanks so much for your time reviewing my poem. Fun trying to put something together at the last minute with working someone else's word choices in. I enjoyed it. I love the picture and am a novice at photography too. Great picture, I love it and thanks for the lending of it. You are so kind.