Poems By AnnieDawn
Viewing comments for Chapter 77 "Fear of Aging"My book of poems and stories
29 total reviews
Comment from Judvan2
Very good. I'm with you, as I get older I hope to stay healthy and not lose all the wonderful senses I've been given. Your poem reads nicely, gets across your idea. I like it and especially the part about memory's eye!
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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Very good. I'm with you, as I get older I hope to stay healthy and not lose all the wonderful senses I've been given. Your poem reads nicely, gets across your idea. I like it and especially the part about memory's eye!
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much for your review time and I appreciate your kind comments. It makes me happy to know that others enjoy what I write.
Comment from NJK62
I enjoyed this reflective poem which tells us of the value of memories. The idea is conveyed effectively through the judicious use of a range of poetic devices. Rhyme is used successfully to add to the rhythm of the poem that drives it to its powerful final line, but equally importantly it also gives emphasis to the key words that drive the poem's meaning ('die', 'cry' 'fear', 'dear' 'eye'). Assonance (e.g. 'i' sound) and consonance ('s' sound) also contribute to the rhythm of the poem and give it a sense of coherence and completeness. Well done.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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I enjoyed this reflective poem which tells us of the value of memories. The idea is conveyed effectively through the judicious use of a range of poetic devices. Rhyme is used successfully to add to the rhythm of the poem that drives it to its powerful final line, but equally importantly it also gives emphasis to the key words that drive the poem's meaning ('die', 'cry' 'fear', 'dear' 'eye'). Assonance (e.g. 'i' sound) and consonance ('s' sound) also contribute to the rhythm of the poem and give it a sense of coherence and completeness. Well done.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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I do thank you for your review and kind comments. It makes me happy when others can 'see' what I 'see' when I write.
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Pleasure.
Comment from twinklepoems
The older I get the more I both like and fear poems on aging. I like your psyche prompting "don't cry" and I love that all the things that are important do remain within you. My only concern is that I am not clear what emotion you are trying to write about. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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The older I get the more I both like and fear poems on aging. I like your psyche prompting "don't cry" and I love that all the things that are important do remain within you. My only concern is that I am not clear what emotion you are trying to write about. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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Again I do thank you for the honor of the stars. It makes me happy that someone can enjoy what I write as that is part of the whole process. Writing it all out to get those thoughts and emotions onto paper and then sharing.
Comment from Texasbelle1021
Beautifully said. We all wish for the yesterday's. All the what ifs. Would we make the same decisions. Flowed perfectly. Good Luck.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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Beautifully said. We all wish for the yesterday's. All the what ifs. Would we make the same decisions. Flowed perfectly. Good Luck.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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It makes me happy that someone can enjoy what I write as that is part of the whole process. Writing it all out to get those thoughts and emotions onto paper and then sharing. Thanks for your review.
Comment from LanceHill
Very well written. I think there are a lot of people that feel the same as you have scribed. Though our sight, hearing, or other senses may leave we do have our memories. Thanks for sharing. God bless.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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Very well written. I think there are a lot of people that feel the same as you have scribed. Though our sight, hearing, or other senses may leave we do have our memories. Thanks for sharing. God bless.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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It makes me happy that someone can enjoy what I write as that is part of the whole process. Writing it all out to get those thoughts and emotions onto paper and then sharing. Thanks for your review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello :)
Nice poem about aging. I am getting older, like everybody is, and my youth is gone. It is hard because inside I still feel young but my body is not what it used to be. The poem is well written and has solid rhyme. Good job!
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Hello :)
Nice poem about aging. I am getting older, like everybody is, and my youth is gone. It is hard because inside I still feel young but my body is not what it used to be. The poem is well written and has solid rhyme. Good job!
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Thank you so much for your review of my poetry entry. I appreciate your time.
Comment from ann marie mazz
hello poet
your entry is most elegant
your words are gently stated
and yes
words of truth
well done
you have met the challenge and emotion
thank you for sharing
best of luck with the contest
ann marie
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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hello poet
your entry is most elegant
your words are gently stated
and yes
words of truth
well done
you have met the challenge and emotion
thank you for sharing
best of luck with the contest
ann marie
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Thank you so much for your review and kind words. I appreciate the time it takes to review. Have a good day.
Comment from mvbrooks
Nice, compact, sweet poem that can be relate-able to many readers. The change in format from the first part to the second -- the shortening of the lines--is effective in the poem's pacing, but also seems to subliminally suggest that time is also shortening.
Appreciate the upbeat ending that the "memory's eye" stays intact.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Nice, compact, sweet poem that can be relate-able to many readers. The change in format from the first part to the second -- the shortening of the lines--is effective in the poem's pacing, but also seems to subliminally suggest that time is also shortening.
Appreciate the upbeat ending that the "memory's eye" stays intact.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Thank you so much for your review and kind words. I appreciate the time it takes to review. Have a good day.
Comment from Unspoken94
A wonderful poem that depicts the concerns of us who are indeed aging. (I'm 70)
But the irony in your poem is the last line. I think the most anxiety we have is losing our memory. But you have captured the essence of aging which is fear. It can be immobilizing. All the best in the contest. -Bill
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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A wonderful poem that depicts the concerns of us who are indeed aging. (I'm 70)
But the irony in your poem is the last line. I think the most anxiety we have is losing our memory. But you have captured the essence of aging which is fear. It can be immobilizing. All the best in the contest. -Bill
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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I thank you so much for your time and it does take time to review and comment. It is appreciated. I am always thrilled when someone likes what I have written. I am always open for suggestions for improvement.
Comment from robyn corum
This is a great poem with a fabulous message and a wonderful reminder that God provides all we need whether we realize it or not. Thanks!
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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This is a great poem with a fabulous message and a wonderful reminder that God provides all we need whether we realize it or not. Thanks!
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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I thank you so much for your time and it does take time to review and comment. It is appreciated. I am always thrilled when someone likes what I have written. I am always open for suggestions for improvement.