Poems By AnnieDawn
Viewing comments for Chapter 54 "A Simple Wish"My book of poems and stories
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Comment from tuscer02
This seems to me to be someone who is in their later years regretting things not done in years gone by. Makes one think about whether I have done the same.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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This seems to me to be someone who is in their later years regretting things not done in years gone by. Makes one think about whether I have done the same.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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Thank you for your kind comments and review.
Comment from indianjack
The loneliness of old age, of friends passing, of forgotten joys of youth; how sad the prospect as we near the end. Rhyming is very well done.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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The loneliness of old age, of friends passing, of forgotten joys of youth; how sad the prospect as we near the end. Rhyming is very well done.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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Thank you for your kind comments and review.
Comment from richie m
Twilight,wish!--ever notice
hardly no one ever wishes upon
a sunrise.--not just anymore
but for EVER and ever.
forget the amen--ever like ever!
Pretty final man.
there must be a message there
good job --though.--dm
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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Twilight,wish!--ever notice
hardly no one ever wishes upon
a sunrise.--not just anymore
but for EVER and ever.
forget the amen--ever like ever!
Pretty final man.
there must be a message there
good job --though.--dm
Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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Thank you for your kind comments and review.
Comment from DonandVicki
I like the though provoking verse here. You have composed this poetic verse very well and the use of rhyme is very skillful. Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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I like the though provoking verse here. You have composed this poetic verse very well and the use of rhyme is very skillful. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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Thank you for your kind comments and review.
Comment from wilkswrites
I like the way your poem expresses the aging process. Lately, I've been thinking a lot of that subject as I notice changes in my face and body. Although it is a normal every day process, it is, indeed, a difficult one.
You do a great job of depicting that aging process. A job well-done.
Thank you
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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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I like the way your poem expresses the aging process. Lately, I've been thinking a lot of that subject as I notice changes in my face and body. Although it is a normal every day process, it is, indeed, a difficult one.
You do a great job of depicting that aging process. A job well-done.
Thank you
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Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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Thank you for your review. I always appreciate comments from other poets.
Comment from Lynne M-S
A brief well-filled!
The metre is well sustained, as is the rhyme pattern. The repeated phrase is well placed within each stanza.
(A query: in this line...
"The struggles of the soul twist night and day"
did you mean the struggles twist night and day around, or
the struggles twixt (from 'betwixt and between') night and day?
Just a thought... Well done
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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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A brief well-filled!
The metre is well sustained, as is the rhyme pattern. The repeated phrase is well placed within each stanza.
(A query: in this line...
"The struggles of the soul twist night and day"
did you mean the struggles twist night and day around, or
the struggles twixt (from 'betwixt and between') night and day?
Just a thought... Well done
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Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016
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Thanks so much for your review. I played around with the word 'twist' and the word 'spin' to get the right effect for that sentence. I may change it. Thanks for your thoughts. They are really on the mark.