Poems By AnnieDawn
Viewing comments for Chapter 44 "The Wonders Of Spring"My book of poems and stories
27 total reviews
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Annie. this is beautiful poetry and is worthy of six golden stars, but alas, I have none left for this week. My favorite is spring because of the rebirth ofd everything including my short-lived beautiful lilacs. Mmmmm.
"My favorite time of year is Spring
red Robins sing their song.
Gray morning Doves are apt to bring
their mournful, cries along."
Bravo! Great job.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2016
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Hi, Annie. this is beautiful poetry and is worthy of six golden stars, but alas, I have none left for this week. My favorite is spring because of the rebirth ofd everything including my short-lived beautiful lilacs. Mmmmm.
"My favorite time of year is Spring
red Robins sing their song.
Gray morning Doves are apt to bring
their mournful, cries along."
Bravo! Great job.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2016
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So sorry that lilacs are so short lived as they are my absolute favorite, favorite flower. Thanks for reviewing. Have a safe and happy weekend.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello,
I like Gynt' s poem form. Spring is a beautiful season. I love spring and fall because I don't like hot weather.
Good job.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2016
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Hello,
I like Gynt' s poem form. Spring is a beautiful season. I love spring and fall because I don't like hot weather.
Good job.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2016
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Thank you so much for your review and kind words. Have a great weekend.
Comment from Pantygynt
You have written a lovely pantygynt here rather than an awdl gynt because you have missed all the cross rhymes. They are shown on the original diagram but we now have a thread there which gives a colour chart to make it easier. If you want to rework it I would be happy to rereview and upgrade because once all the rules are met you have an excellent [poem here.
Second review. The easiest way to do this is for me to reprint the whole of your poem here and I will check it line by line. We are very nearly there. One recurring error which is not really your fault although in the original rhyme scheme it is marked correctly. See below for details. And one additional error in the last line of all. Sort these and I will upgrade. There is no point in leaving it because when the committee check for compliance they will DQ if it doesn't comply.
The snows of winter quickly melt. check
Small creeks soon belt out sound. check
Warm rays of sun are often felt check
while Springtime's clock is wound. The second syllable (Spring) should rhyme with felt in the previous line. Unfortunately this rhyme was accidentally omitted from the colour coding.
The butterfly and buzzing bee check
will soon be flitting tree to tree; check
their quest, a pollinating spree. check
To watch keeps me spell bound. check
My favorite time of year is Spring check
red Robins sing their song. check
Gray morning Doves are apt to bring check
their mournful, cries along. Same problem here mourn to rhyme with bring.
The Crocus and the Tulip shy check
push through the snow and by and by check
their vibrant colors catch the eye check
and nature's sigh is strong. check
How beautifully the seasons pass check
They never sass or rest. check
Each season has a touch of class check
enchanting man with zest. and again chant/class
While every person likes to cruise check
their favorite season's wondrous hues check
no matter whether browns or blues check
I still choose Springtime's best. Spring here needs to rhyme with blues. You got thid right in the previous cycles.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2016
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You have written a lovely pantygynt here rather than an awdl gynt because you have missed all the cross rhymes. They are shown on the original diagram but we now have a thread there which gives a colour chart to make it easier. If you want to rework it I would be happy to rereview and upgrade because once all the rules are met you have an excellent [poem here.
Second review. The easiest way to do this is for me to reprint the whole of your poem here and I will check it line by line. We are very nearly there. One recurring error which is not really your fault although in the original rhyme scheme it is marked correctly. See below for details. And one additional error in the last line of all. Sort these and I will upgrade. There is no point in leaving it because when the committee check for compliance they will DQ if it doesn't comply.
The snows of winter quickly melt. check
Small creeks soon belt out sound. check
Warm rays of sun are often felt check
while Springtime's clock is wound. The second syllable (Spring) should rhyme with felt in the previous line. Unfortunately this rhyme was accidentally omitted from the colour coding.
The butterfly and buzzing bee check
will soon be flitting tree to tree; check
their quest, a pollinating spree. check
To watch keeps me spell bound. check
My favorite time of year is Spring check
red Robins sing their song. check
Gray morning Doves are apt to bring check
their mournful, cries along. Same problem here mourn to rhyme with bring.
The Crocus and the Tulip shy check
push through the snow and by and by check
their vibrant colors catch the eye check
and nature's sigh is strong. check
How beautifully the seasons pass check
They never sass or rest. check
Each season has a touch of class check
enchanting man with zest. and again chant/class
While every person likes to cruise check
their favorite season's wondrous hues check
no matter whether browns or blues check
I still choose Springtime's best. Spring here needs to rhyme with blues. You got thid right in the previous cycles.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2016
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Thank you so much for the heads up. I did not pick up on the cross rhymes at all. Must be the left over anesthesia from surgery. Just kidding but it did a number on me. I now have a challenge which makes life worth it and that is what this is all about anyway. I love this site! Thanks for not just passing me by, but pointing me in the right direction. I learn this way and it is so exciting.
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At your leisure please re-review just for the sake of my knowing I got it right. Thanks. What is another style that would be a challenge that you could suggest. You seem well informed and I would love suggestions.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Awdl Gynt poem. Spring is always welcomed after a cold and icy winter. The sun shines warmer and the snow melts quickly. A season of color and new life starts.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2016
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A very well-written Awdl Gynt poem. Spring is always welcomed after a cold and icy winter. The sun shines warmer and the snow melts quickly. A season of color and new life starts.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2016
I always enjoy what you write whether review or poetry. You just have a way with words. Have a blessed weekend.
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Thank you for this beautiful compliment. I am humbly honored.
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You are so very welcome.
Comment from LIJ Red
Getting late. I'm sleepy. Here's a work, some quatrains and tercets and stray lines, with a form name I can't pronounce. Do it rhyme? Aye.
Got sound images? Uh-huh. Spags? Nah, not that I can tell. Fivers.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2016
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Getting late. I'm sleepy. Here's a work, some quatrains and tercets and stray lines, with a form name I can't pronounce. Do it rhyme? Aye.
Got sound images? Uh-huh. Spags? Nah, not that I can tell. Fivers.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2016
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Thanks for reviewing. You must keep some late hours. Have a blessed weekend and stay safe if you are traveling.
Comment from Irish Rain
I truly wish I had a six for you, because I just love this. I've never seen this form before, and you've chosen the loveliest topic! Good luck, and blessings....
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2016
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I truly wish I had a six for you, because I just love this. I've never seen this form before, and you've chosen the loveliest topic! Good luck, and blessings....
Comment Written 30-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2016
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I do thank you for your kindness in your review. Have a great weekend and stay safe if you are traveling.
Comment from nancyjam
This looks like a difficult form and you have succeeded in
writing a beautiful Awdl Gynt.
Lovely images of Spring throughout.
Nice rhyming keeping to the rhyme scheme.
Strong meter for smooth flow.
A pleasure to read. Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2016
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This looks like a difficult form and you have succeeded in
writing a beautiful Awdl Gynt.
Lovely images of Spring throughout.
Nice rhyming keeping to the rhyme scheme.
Strong meter for smooth flow.
A pleasure to read. Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
Comment Written 30-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2016
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I do thank you for your kindness in your review. Have a great weekend and stay safe if you are traveling.
Comment from Mary Wakeford
I would have to agree with you on the season favorite. Your poem touches on the new life and buzzing of anticipation of the renewal Spring brings. Your rhyming choices are excellent and remind us all of the wonder of Spring, especially in some regions, following a hard freeze. Life returns...Well done.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2016
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I would have to agree with you on the season favorite. Your poem touches on the new life and buzzing of anticipation of the renewal Spring brings. Your rhyming choices are excellent and remind us all of the wonder of Spring, especially in some regions, following a hard freeze. Life returns...Well done.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2016
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I do thank you for your kindness in your review. Have a great weekend and stay safe if you are traveling.
Comment from artisart4u
Spring is refreshing- new life, new hope and the thought of winter behind us.
Your poem rhymes well.
Good luck with your poem.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Spring is refreshing- new life, new hope and the thought of winter behind us.
Your poem rhymes well.
Good luck with your poem.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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I am having the time of my life writing to all of the poetry styles that I never knew existed. Thanks for the review and the stars, Have a blessed weekend.
Comment from RoostyNester
I loved your poem! Felt it as I read it! Bouncy with rhyme as it told of your love for spring with all its wonders. I especially liked the last verse with the special rhyme of the colors of spring. Very well written.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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I loved your poem! Felt it as I read it! Bouncy with rhyme as it told of your love for spring with all its wonders. I especially liked the last verse with the special rhyme of the colors of spring. Very well written.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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I am having the time of my life writing poetry to these new styles. I had not realized there were so many and each one is a challenge. Thanks for your review and kind words. Have a blessed weekend.
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You're welcome