Poems By AnnieDawn
Viewing comments for Chapter 39 "DJ's Question"My book of poems and stories
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Comment from Thomas Bowling
Great commentary on "Out of the mouths of babes." My granddaughter's father died far to soon. When she was three she came for a visit. I was looking at a small depression where I had taken out a palm tre that had been killed by an unusual frost. I was thinking of something else and she must have noticed the expression on my face. She said, "grandpa, why are you so sad? Is it because your palm tree is gone?'
"Yes, I suppose so." I said.
"It's up in the sky with my daddy." was her answer.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016
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Great commentary on "Out of the mouths of babes." My granddaughter's father died far to soon. When she was three she came for a visit. I was looking at a small depression where I had taken out a palm tre that had been killed by an unusual frost. I was thinking of something else and she must have noticed the expression on my face. She said, "grandpa, why are you so sad? Is it because your palm tree is gone?'
"Yes, I suppose so." I said.
"It's up in the sky with my daddy." was her answer.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016
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I hope you can forgive me for the delay in attending to a thank you for your review, but I have been ill. I had always meant to do something with his cute comment. Smarter than we sometimes give them credit for. Have a good day.
Comment from Kate Tompkins
Well done! Not only does it rhyme perfectly, it scans as well.
That being said, if it was mine, I'd be tempted to delete the middle two verses. That's partly because I find the fourth verse a bit hard to follow, but mostly because I think it pushes the point a little too hard. Your mileage may vary.
Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016
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Well done! Not only does it rhyme perfectly, it scans as well.
That being said, if it was mine, I'd be tempted to delete the middle two verses. That's partly because I find the fourth verse a bit hard to follow, but mostly because I think it pushes the point a little too hard. Your mileage may vary.
Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016
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I hope you can forgive me for the delay in attending to a thank you for your review, but I have been ill. I had always meant to do something with his cute comment. Smarter than we sometimes give them credit for. You are right about the fourth verse but I thought it a bit too short without it. Have a good day.
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
Very lovely entry into the Memorable Moments poetry contest. Should fare well, I would guess. Good rhythm, rhyme and meter. Found nothing that needed to be changed to make this any better. Great job. Good luck in the contest. God bless and hugs, Susanne
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016
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Very lovely entry into the Memorable Moments poetry contest. Should fare well, I would guess. Good rhythm, rhyme and meter. Found nothing that needed to be changed to make this any better. Great job. Good luck in the contest. God bless and hugs, Susanne
Comment Written 10-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016
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I hope you can forgive me for the delay in attending to a thank you for your review, but I have been ill. I had always meant to do something with his cute comment. Smarter than we sometimes give them credit for. Have a good day.
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Hope you're feeling better? God bless and hugs, Susanne
Comment from William Ross
Cute, the things kids say and come up with. Nicely done and written good rhyming, nice read. good luck on this and have a wonderful day.
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Cute, the things kids say and come up with. Nicely done and written good rhyming, nice read. good luck on this and have a wonderful day.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2016
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I hope you can forgive me for the delay in attending to a thank you for your review, but I have been ill. I had always meant to do something with his cute comment. Smarter than we sometimes give them credit for. Have a good day.
Comment from rockinm76233
How beautiful. Out of the mouths of babes comes the truth. They are indeed far wiser than we give them credit for at times. The age of innocence. How absolutely wonderful that we get to catch a glimpse now and again of God in the eyes of a child.
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How beautiful. Out of the mouths of babes comes the truth. They are indeed far wiser than we give them credit for at times. The age of innocence. How absolutely wonderful that we get to catch a glimpse now and again of God in the eyes of a child.
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Comment Written 10-Aug-2016
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I hope you can forgive me for the delay in attending to a thank you for your review, but I have been ill. I had always meant to do something with his cute comment. Smarter than we sometimes give them credit for. Have a good day.
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Hope you're feeling better now.
Comment from WSpena07
I really liked this. It was sweet and really crawled into the mind of a child. Form and structure were clever. Wasn't overly detailed (which it didn't have to be) and you ended it at the perfect spot (the boy merely asking what he was contemplating). Well done.
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I really liked this. It was sweet and really crawled into the mind of a child. Form and structure were clever. Wasn't overly detailed (which it didn't have to be) and you ended it at the perfect spot (the boy merely asking what he was contemplating). Well done.
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Comment Written 10-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016
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I hope you can forgive me for the delay in attending to a thank you for your review, but I have been ill. I had always meant to do something with his cute comment. Smarter than we sometimes give them credit for. Have a good day.
Comment from jusylee72
Beautiful loving poem. I truly love it. Children say the sweetest things. My sister at the age of three said this prayer, Mom wrote it down. Good Night God. See you in the morning. I wish we all looked for God every morning like a child does. Loved your poem. I am stingy with my sixes, but you deserve it.
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Beautiful loving poem. I truly love it. Children say the sweetest things. My sister at the age of three said this prayer, Mom wrote it down. Good Night God. See you in the morning. I wish we all looked for God every morning like a child does. Loved your poem. I am stingy with my sixes, but you deserve it.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016
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I hope you can forgive me for the delay in attending to a thank you for your review, but I have been ill. I had always meant to do something with his cute comment. Smarter than we sometimes give them credit for. I do thank you for the six star rating. Have a good day.