Ode to the Urinal
Response to a challenge from Pantygynt51 total reviews
Comment from colleenk13
This is hilarious I love it especially using the word for urinal in other languages; that was a stroke of genius. Your descriptive language really brings the scene to life; the one that particularly amused me was "I staggered like a bloated toad", Great work.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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This is hilarious I love it especially using the word for urinal in other languages; that was a stroke of genius. Your descriptive language really brings the scene to life; the one that particularly amused me was "I staggered like a bloated toad", Great work.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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You do say the nicest things, Colleen! Six stars as well! Thank you very much! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from c_lucas
It beats pissing against the wall. This is very well written with a humorous flow of words, making for a very interesting read. Now you know what created the water table.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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It beats pissing against the wall. This is very well written with a humorous flow of words, making for a very interesting read. Now you know what created the water table.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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Thanks, Charlie. I appreciated your kind comments about this one. Glad you enjoyed it. Tony
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a charming, and yes, a humorous write - the verse was engaging and "fluid in movement," and I enjoyed the energy of the ode salutation...
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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In my opinion, a charming, and yes, a humorous write - the verse was engaging and "fluid in movement," and I enjoyed the energy of the ode salutation...
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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You do say the nicest things, Eve! Thank you very much! Best wishes, Tony
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You are very welcome, Tony - my pleasure...Eve
Comment from royowen
Well done with this one, very clever, do you realise the flasche in German is a bottle, there fore it was "pissbottle"! But I do realise it was a play on words, well done, it was most amusing, I was aware they had public urinals in France, (I'm not sure if they still do? Well done, Tony, blessings, Roy
Typo, a (sight) that. Site?
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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Well done with this one, very clever, do you realise the flasche in German is a bottle, there fore it was "pissbottle"! But I do realise it was a play on words, well done, it was most amusing, I was aware they had public urinals in France, (I'm not sure if they still do? Well done, Tony, blessings, Roy
Typo, a (sight) that. Site?
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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Thanks, Roy. I appreciated your kind comments about this one. Glad you enjoyed it. Yes, the pisspot is a bit out of context, but handy! Tony
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Well done
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Hahaha ... you did justice to Pantygynt's challenge, Tony, with this ode to a urinal!
Some clever phrasing ... "whist a pistle". Loved "urinflasche" ... flasche being German for 'bottle'. A fun ending "It's all zipped up! That's final!". The story told here is one that just about everyone can relate to, as most of us have imbibed a little too much in our youth.
A fun poem to read, Tony!
Connie
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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Hahaha ... you did justice to Pantygynt's challenge, Tony, with this ode to a urinal!
Some clever phrasing ... "whist a pistle". Loved "urinflasche" ... flasche being German for 'bottle'. A fun ending "It's all zipped up! That's final!". The story told here is one that just about everyone can relate to, as most of us have imbibed a little too much in our youth.
A fun poem to read, Tony!
Connie
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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You do say the nicest things, Connie! Thank you very much! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Really? Now I have seen it all! Tell me is that really a public urinal out in the open in front of God and everybody? Not a lot of privacy there, but I suppose it works.
I think you aced the challenge. Surprisingly creative! X Nancy
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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Really? Now I have seen it all! Tell me is that really a public urinal out in the open in front of God and everybody? Not a lot of privacy there, but I suppose it works.
I think you aced the challenge. Surprisingly creative! X Nancy
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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Thanks, Nancy. I appreciated your kind comments about this one. Glad you enjoyed it. These public urinals used to be commonplace in France but have largely disappeared now. Tony
Comment from Kooky Clown
Loved it Loved it Loved it and what a stunning subject it certainly deserves the awards honoured to your work. A really fun poem although I got really concerned on coming to the Pig and Whistle there was going to be a problem.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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Loved it Loved it Loved it and what a stunning subject it certainly deserves the awards honoured to your work. A really fun poem although I got really concerned on coming to the Pig and Whistle there was going to be a problem.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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Thanks, Kooky. I appreciated your kind comments about this one. Glad you enjoyed it. Tony
Comment from mvbrooks
Fun, whimsical poem in the tradition of Ogden Nash as you weave a consistent, unforced rhyme and images of well-known cities with the silliness of urinals. Pantgynt was correct -- you could "write a beautiful ode, even to a urinal."
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
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Fun, whimsical poem in the tradition of Ogden Nash as you weave a consistent, unforced rhyme and images of well-known cities with the silliness of urinals. Pantgynt was correct -- you could "write a beautiful ode, even to a urinal."
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
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Very many thanks for reviewing Ode to the Urinal, MVB. I much appreciated your kind comments and six stars! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from janalma
It is an ode to more than one urinal. Funny, too. I grinned as I read. Sounds so much like a young man out to prove what a he-man he is by drinking like a fish. And it's very important that he find a place to relieve himself, even if it is on the street. I'll bet tourists not only think that is great, when needed in Paris, but also I imagine it's astonishing, especially for Americans. Lol.
I'll bet you didn't read my story about septic tanks. Off the wall, too. Haha.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
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It is an ode to more than one urinal. Funny, too. I grinned as I read. Sounds so much like a young man out to prove what a he-man he is by drinking like a fish. And it's very important that he find a place to relieve himself, even if it is on the street. I'll bet tourists not only think that is great, when needed in Paris, but also I imagine it's astonishing, especially for Americans. Lol.
I'll bet you didn't read my story about septic tanks. Off the wall, too. Haha.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
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Very many thanks for reviewing Ode to the Urinal. Janalma. I appreciated your comments. As you say, such a public view is a concept that astonishes many Americans. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from rjuselius
haha. lol. this is an entertaining piece of peotry dear tony! i love the satirical humor and the metaphors are absolutely ingeniuos. nice one my friend!
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
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haha. lol. this is an entertaining piece of peotry dear tony! i love the satirical humor and the metaphors are absolutely ingeniuos. nice one my friend!
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
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Very many thanks for reviewing Ode to the Urinal. Rebekka. I appreciated your comments. Glad you enjoyed it! Best wishes, Tony