Poems By AnnieDawn
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "Summer Days"My book of poems and stories
28 total reviews
Comment from frierajac
Thank you for the clarification of the Nove Otto form. i like the innocent take
along with a mention of a mermaid's veil. I am guessing a sheet of spray. It
wonderful how youth can just dive in without a trace of fear.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the clarification of the Nove Otto form. i like the innocent take
along with a mention of a mermaid's veil. I am guessing a sheet of spray. It
wonderful how youth can just dive in without a trace of fear.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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This poem came from the heart as I grew up on the ocean and the beach was my playground. The wind was always blowing, and the salty mist off of the waves would coat each strand of our hair til at the end of the day it would be stiff and almost white like bridal veil Therefore the mermaid veil was created as we wound strands of seaweed around our heads. What memories we create, eh? Thanks for your kind review.
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blessings
Comment from Bichon
Lovely short poem. I could clearly visualise the words in my head, especially the ocean's raging roar. The photo is perfect for the poem too, as well as the blue background.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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Lovely short poem. I could clearly visualise the words in my head, especially the ocean's raging roar. The photo is perfect for the poem too, as well as the blue background.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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This poem came from the heart as I grew up on the ocean and the beach was my playground. Thanks for your kind review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I enjoyed this Nove Otto style poem, it's pacy and fun to read. I love to sit by the sea and listen to the waves crashing on the rocks. And all that fresh air. You can't beat it. Well done, this was lovely. Good luck! :) Sandra
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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I enjoyed this Nove Otto style poem, it's pacy and fun to read. I love to sit by the sea and listen to the waves crashing on the rocks. And all that fresh air. You can't beat it. Well done, this was lovely. Good luck! :) Sandra
Comment Written 30-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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This poem came from the heart as I grew up on the ocean and the beach was my playground. Thanks for your kind review.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
You make me want to go to the beach. That's right, I live on the beach. You describe it very well. Salt spray is a constant. It wreaks havoc on my car's paint finish.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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You make me want to go to the beach. That's right, I live on the beach. You describe it very well. Salt spray is a constant. It wreaks havoc on my car's paint finish.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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This poem came from the heart as I grew up on the ocean and the beach was my playground. Thanks for your kind review. (Yup things rust faster too.)
Comment from Mary Wakeford
A wonderful expression of one's youth, so fleeting when we look back. A mermaid's veil fit for a bride...outstanding visual. Well done and I wish you a win in the contest .
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A wonderful expression of one's youth, so fleeting when we look back. A mermaid's veil fit for a bride...outstanding visual. Well done and I wish you a win in the contest .
Comment Written 30-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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This poem came from the heart as I grew up on the ocean and the beach was my playground. Thanks for your kind review.
Comment from nbonner
I love the ocean. The breeze, the sand, and finding seashells. That's the only place I can find peace of mind. Nice nove otto poem. Thank you for sharing and best wishes in the contest
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I love the ocean. The breeze, the sand, and finding seashells. That's the only place I can find peace of mind. Nice nove otto poem. Thank you for sharing and best wishes in the contest
Comment Written 30-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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This poem came from the heart as I grew up on the ocean and the beach was my playground. Thanks for your kind review.
Comment from Heather Knight
This is a really cute poem. I like the rhythm and the content, but most of all I like the last two lines:
Would sprinkle salt spray in my hair.
A mermaid's veil fit for a bride.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2017
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This is a really cute poem. I like the rhythm and the content, but most of all I like the last two lines:
Would sprinkle salt spray in my hair.
A mermaid's veil fit for a bride.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2017
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I really am happy that you like it. Thank you so much for reviewing my poem. Blessings to you.
Comment from Pullmanspb
Wow. (You want me to say more?)
Double wow.
Usually I avoid rhymed poems and this one was well-worth the reading. The rhythm is fun; the rhyming pattern is very solid and believable; and the story within the poem is thought-provoking.
Steven
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2017
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Wow. (You want me to say more?)
Double wow.
Usually I avoid rhymed poems and this one was well-worth the reading. The rhythm is fun; the rhyming pattern is very solid and believable; and the story within the poem is thought-provoking.
Steven
Comment Written 30-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2017
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I am happy that You liked it. I appreciate reviews as I always question how valid my work is to someone else. I know I like it but does it go over well. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from rama devi
Superb descriptive eloquence. Great rhyme choices. Fantastic phonetics and flow.
Loved reading these two lines aloud:
Where once the ocean's raging roar
Stirred foamy flecks which rode the tide.
one suggestion--to change WHICH to THAT
Nice alliteration of O, S & G and consonance of V and P and rhyme pairs here:
On summer days I spent in awe
Observing oddities I saw
While overhead gray gulls would glide.
And each and every breath of air
Would sprinkle salt spray in my hair.
A mermaid's veil fit for a bride.
Wistful. Well penned. Enjoyed. Imaginative closing line, too.
Finely presented too.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2017
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Superb descriptive eloquence. Great rhyme choices. Fantastic phonetics and flow.
Loved reading these two lines aloud:
Where once the ocean's raging roar
Stirred foamy flecks which rode the tide.
one suggestion--to change WHICH to THAT
Nice alliteration of O, S & G and consonance of V and P and rhyme pairs here:
On summer days I spent in awe
Observing oddities I saw
While overhead gray gulls would glide.
And each and every breath of air
Would sprinkle salt spray in my hair.
A mermaid's veil fit for a bride.
Wistful. Well penned. Enjoyed. Imaginative closing line, too.
Finely presented too.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 29-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2017
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I am so overwhelmed with your rating and kind review. I do think your suggestion is valid and I plan on using it. I thank you for the rating and suggestion. Blessings to you.
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Blessings to you too! Yay! Love and Light, r d
Comment from marybell1
Enjoyed reading your nove otto poem "Summer Days". You followed all the rules for this genre and you chose an appropriate photo.
All the best.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2017
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Enjoyed reading your nove otto poem "Summer Days". You followed all the rules for this genre and you chose an appropriate photo.
All the best.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2017
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Thanks so much for your kind review. Have a great day.
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1