Anger
Senyru about anger18 total reviews
Comment from Mark D. R.
I like the fiery colors felt from the verse and its accompanying illustration.
I need to wrap my head around the fact that your noted 'anger' is magnificent ...LOL
Minor recommendation: IMHO 'Reduced to ashes' has a slightly different meaning in the past tense.
Best wishes in this contest
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
I like the fiery colors felt from the verse and its accompanying illustration.
I need to wrap my head around the fact that your noted 'anger' is magnificent ...LOL
Minor recommendation: IMHO 'Reduced to ashes' has a slightly different meaning in the past tense.
Best wishes in this contest
Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work.
Best Regards
Comment from victor 66
Many years ago when I was younger I had issues with anger and acted out aggressively. It was just luck I didn't end up in jail. And, I do mean luck. I realize now that anger, being an emotion, will subside given time. Good words, good message, good luck.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
Many years ago when I was younger I had issues with anger and acted out aggressively. It was just luck I didn't end up in jail. And, I do mean luck. I realize now that anger, being an emotion, will subside given time. Good words, good message, good luck.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work.
Best Regards
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You are welcome, Bridge.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
I like your poem and it packs a lot of punch in just a few lines -- but it need s bit of editing. The first and third lines have six syllables instead of five. Thanks and good luck!
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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
Dear Mystery Writer,
I like your poem and it packs a lot of punch in just a few lines -- but it need s bit of editing. The first and third lines have six syllables instead of five. Thanks and good luck!
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Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work.
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Comment from dmt1967
I like the picture and the words as they are so true. Anger is like an anger. It smolders before it runs hot through ones veins, then it fizzles out, very apt. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
I like the picture and the words as they are so true. Anger is like an anger. It smolders before it runs hot through ones veins, then it fizzles out, very apt. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work.
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Comment from 24chas
This was a good read. The words are so true and you illustrated that with your descriptive words. The picture really completes the presentation. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
This was a good read. The words are so true and you illustrated that with your descriptive words. The picture really completes the presentation. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work.
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Comment from Sandra Elizabeth Williams
Oh, yes indeed, anger gets one fiery and riled up, spilling over, but soon is reduced to ashes and can cause destruction to either the angry person or the object of the anger, or both.
A well penned senyru about this negative human condition.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
Oh, yes indeed, anger gets one fiery and riled up, spilling over, but soon is reduced to ashes and can cause destruction to either the angry person or the object of the anger, or both.
A well penned senyru about this negative human condition.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work.
Best Regards
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You are most welcome.
Comment from LisaMay
Your poem portraying the human emotion of anger captures it very well... from the spewing of molten lava to the ashes left behind. The anger may cool but the damage has been done.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
Your poem portraying the human emotion of anger captures it very well... from the spewing of molten lava to the ashes left behind. The anger may cool but the damage has been done.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
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Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Contest Author,
Very well written piece, my friend and a great senryu contest entry. Nothing amiss to suggest reworking. Best of luck and thanks for sharing. Jan
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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
Hi Contest Author,
Very well written piece, my friend and a great senryu contest entry. Nothing amiss to suggest reworking. Best of luck and thanks for sharing. Jan
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Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work.
Best Regards