The Ring
Does she say yes in the state of confusion?22 total reviews
Comment from Bichon
A great poem. The rhyming scheme was consistent and flowed lovely, really complimented the topic itself and made for a very enjoyable read! Best of luck
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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A great poem. The rhyming scheme was consistent and flowed lovely, really complimented the topic itself and made for a very enjoyable read! Best of luck
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from Brenda Elizabeth Rose
The first thing I noticed is your Picasso style of image. You met all the requirements of the contest perfectly. Your rhyme and rhythm worked well with this piece. Thank you for sharing your lovely poem. Blessings. ~Brenda
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The first thing I noticed is your Picasso style of image. You met all the requirements of the contest perfectly. Your rhyme and rhythm worked well with this piece. Thank you for sharing your lovely poem. Blessings. ~Brenda
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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Brenda, thank you good eyes....
Comment from Elaine Chiodi
A well expressed moment of anxiety, in which no one can be truly sure of the outcome. The stanzas follow the syllable count, but I'm not sure that the last two lines adhere to the rhyming scheme of "cc." If the phrase "his pleas are won," is placed before "Upon a bended knee" I think works better; then "glee" would rhyme with "knee." Just a thought... ...ec
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A well expressed moment of anxiety, in which no one can be truly sure of the outcome. The stanzas follow the syllable count, but I'm not sure that the last two lines adhere to the rhyming scheme of "cc." If the phrase "his pleas are won," is placed before "Upon a bended knee" I think works better; then "glee" would rhyme with "knee." Just a thought... ...ec
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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So correct! Thank you.
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You're welcome... ...ec
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Ottava rima about accepting the ring from the man of your dreams are a special occasion that we don't
Forget for the rest of our lives.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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A very well-written Ottava rima about accepting the ring from the man of your dreams are a special occasion that we don't
Forget for the rest of our lives.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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Sandra, thank you so much! My request of betrothal has lasted 36 plus years and going strong. So grateful and so thankful!
Comment from royowen
A well written Ottava rima, written in articulate language, although I was left in wonder of the incredible ring, the beautifully ardorned circle, and who received it was very fortunate. But beautifully written, in highly descriptive language, the rhyming was great, well structured imagery, well done, blessings, Roy
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A well written Ottava rima, written in articulate language, although I was left in wonder of the incredible ring, the beautifully ardorned circle, and who received it was very fortunate. But beautifully written, in highly descriptive language, the rhyming was great, well structured imagery, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 05-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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Roy, thank you very much!
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Most welcome
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork.
-A well written poem
with good form and topic.
-You create a vivid
word picture of this
special occasion.
-The ring sounds beautiful,
but I am sure the surprise
and the meaning behind it
meant much more.
-A good entry; good luck.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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-Nice artwork.
-A well written poem
with good form and topic.
-You create a vivid
word picture of this
special occasion.
-The ring sounds beautiful,
but I am sure the surprise
and the meaning behind it
meant much more.
-A good entry; good luck.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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Pam, thanks!
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You are very welcome.
Comment from June Sargent
This is a well crafted ottava rima that portrays the depth of emotions when one pops the question. The confusion is mutual, but it works out in the end as love conquers all fears. Interesting artwork to go with these sentiments.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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This is a well crafted ottava rima that portrays the depth of emotions when one pops the question. The confusion is mutual, but it works out in the end as love conquers all fears. Interesting artwork to go with these sentiments.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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June, thanks!
Comment from Karl Speth
Cool! Very interesting, moving and inspirational. An interesting description of the picture that came with it. Although a little spell checking would help, it's not bad.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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Cool! Very interesting, moving and inspirational. An interesting description of the picture that came with it. Although a little spell checking would help, it's not bad.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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perhaps you are correct...I did miss that
Comment from oliver818
Nice poem, I enjoyed it. It flows well and has good imagery. It's easy to read and has a clear message. Thanks for sharing this and have a really great day
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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Nice poem, I enjoyed it. It flows well and has good imagery. It's easy to read and has a clear message. Thanks for sharing this and have a really great day
Comment Written 05-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Your contest offering depicting that emotional proposal scene is very well phrased for the contest. Thank you for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;) :)
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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Your contest offering depicting that emotional proposal scene is very well phrased for the contest. Thank you for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;) :)
Comment Written 05-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2019
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thank you.