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Shoots Of Green

In the aftermath of the present Australian bushfires.

25 total reviews 
Comment from Mrs. KT
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Hello Lisa!
Such a poignant and moving poetic offering.
The devastation will take years to recover, but your poem ends on a hopeful note. Let us pray that youth and nature will work together.

Thank you for sharing!

Diane

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2020

Comment from Gail Denham
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And we must believe that God will see these folks through all this. It hurts to watch the devastation and the animals losses too - and to think around 200 people are arrested for arson. How awful. A good poem of hope.

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2020

Comment from jenintorre
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I simply love this poem, it is so poignant and well written and a wonderful entry for the faith competition. It has brought tears to my eyes. Good luck and best wishes. Jen. X

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2020

Comment from zanya
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Hope shines out here from these poetic lines amidst the horror of bushfires unfolding our planet - some very salient sentiments 'youth will find truth /I believe'

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2020

Comment from CrystieCookie999
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This poem sounds more poetic with internal rhyme and assonance, and the poetic technique of repetition going on with "I believe." I like the sense of hope inherent in the stanzas. I like the metaphor referred to in the last stanza, too. Nice share.

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2020

Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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It is amazing how life continues after such a devastating blow, but I reckon it will take many years for full recovery. Your words here are hopeful, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2020

Comment from Michele Harber
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What a lovely, faithful and optimistic poem, made that much more powerful by the fact that you're so close to the source. I love that every stanza starts (or ends) with the words "I believe," the surest sign of faith. Your words are lovely, honest and very moving, and I so hope they prove prophetic.

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2020

Comment from June Sargent
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Out of the ashes life will rise again. Your photo proved it. But meanwhile the devastation is real and painful to see! I just posted a piece on the koala. It's heart wrenching- our thoughts and prayers are with the land down under.

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2020

Comment from JudyE
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We have photos like yours - of new, tiny green shoots showing themselves and, within a few weeks, a whole forest of blackened trunks will be bearing these green growths the whole of their length.

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2020

Comment from Mackenzie Schmidt
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Your poem Shoots of Green was well written. I like you're use of repetition it makes the theme of forcing oneself to be hopeful even in time were cynicism is warranted more effective. I liked the picture you used it seems that the light in the photo and darkness shadowed from the trees was representative of the poem itself. Overall I enjoyed reading the poem and saw no visible mistakes.

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2020