Sink Or Swim Together!
We'll rise or fall together!64 total reviews
Comment from Bill Pinder
This is a great theme for the short poem. If everyone would work together to treat each other with more love and respect and work together for the collective good, this world would be a much better place with much less of the serious problems that wreak havoc. Bill
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2020
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This is a great theme for the short poem. If everyone would work together to treat each other with more love and respect and work together for the collective good, this world would be a much better place with much less of the serious problems that wreak havoc. Bill
Comment Written 29-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2020
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Hello Bill,
Thank you very much for your so uplifting, and morale boosting comments.
With best wishes
~ RP
Comment from Makahla J
I believe this pandemic has caused the world to come together in more ways than one. But I've also noticed the inaccuracies we are now seeing in government, healthcare, education, etc. But your poem is a reminder that we the people have a choice in wheater we sink or swim.
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I believe this pandemic has caused the world to come together in more ways than one. But I've also noticed the inaccuracies we are now seeing in government, healthcare, education, etc. But your poem is a reminder that we the people have a choice in wheater we sink or swim.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2020
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Hello Makahla. J,
As a reviewer, you are free to make your own decisions, but for your kind information and if you don't mind, the answer to your Question raised in the 2nd Sentence is HIDDEN in the 3rd Sentence because whether we admit or not, the root cause of all the visible evils or 'the described problems' ultimately lies in the people themselves, particularly in the democratic system which is prevalent almost throughout the world.
Moreover, the poem needs to be seen in wider perspective.
Thanks for reading and reviewing.
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a resounding message in clear and rhyming tone - a striking image in both verse and imagery, in complete compliance with the prompt. Best wishes in the contest...
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In my opinion, a resounding message in clear and rhyming tone - a striking image in both verse and imagery, in complete compliance with the prompt. Best wishes in the contest...
Comment Written 28-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2020
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Hello Evesayshi,
Thank you very much for your so uplifting, and morale boosting comments backed by 'Best Wishes'.
With best wishes
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You are very welcome, RP, and thank you for your best wishes, much appreciated, especially at present...Eve
Comment from Therese Caron
What a wonderful, meaningful, poem, with a great message in the limited number of syllables allowed. You are right, we are all in this together. The image you chose complements your poem beautifully. Good luck in the contest!
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What a wonderful, meaningful, poem, with a great message in the limited number of syllables allowed. You are right, we are all in this together. The image you chose complements your poem beautifully. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 28-Apr-2020
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Hello Therese Caron,
Thank you very much for your so uplifting, and morale boosting comments backed by 'Good Luck Wishes'.
With best wishes
Comment from The_Boy_Whodunnit
An effective and heartfelt message, or plea. I really like the way it is presented. I think the first two lines are really good and simply get the message across.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2020
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An effective and heartfelt message, or plea. I really like the way it is presented. I think the first two lines are really good and simply get the message across.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2020
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Hello The Boy Whodunnit,
Thank you very much for your so uplifting, and morale boosting comments.
With best wishes
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I like this think thrice, sounds better than twice and for sure adds more wisdom to the context. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
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I like this think thrice, sounds better than twice and for sure adds more wisdom to the context. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2020
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Hello Iza Deleanu,
Thank you very much for your so uplifting, and morale boosting comments backed by Good Luck Wishes.
With best wishes
Comment from sunnilicious
That is a nice poem. You thought it out well. I appears to be written in a monorhyme. I'm not sure, but seems to be... Good lyrical flow. I enjoyed your author notes making me go back to the poem and forming my own ideas. Nice direction. Excellent work.
Be careful. Stay safe and strong :)
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2020
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That is a nice poem. You thought it out well. I appears to be written in a monorhyme. I'm not sure, but seems to be... Good lyrical flow. I enjoyed your author notes making me go back to the poem and forming my own ideas. Nice direction. Excellent work.
Be careful. Stay safe and strong :)
Comment Written 27-Apr-2020
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Hello Sunnilicious,
Thank you very much for your so uplifting, and morale boosting comments.
With best wishes
Comment from DeboraDyess
Perfect 20 syllables and a rhymne, to boot!
I think this can apply to far more than the current state of virus in the world. How many of us regrt rash decisions? Think thrice is great advice. :)
Blessings,
Deb
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2020
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Perfect 20 syllables and a rhymne, to boot!
I think this can apply to far more than the current state of virus in the world. How many of us regrt rash decisions? Think thrice is great advice. :)
Blessings,
Deb
Comment Written 27-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2020
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Hello Deb,
Thank you very much for your so uplifting, and morale boosting comments.
With best wishes
Comment from Raul1
This is pretty good with a 20 words count limit of the poem. I like it. It is clear and concise. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. It meets the requirements for the contest! Good luck!
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This is pretty good with a 20 words count limit of the poem. I like it. It is clear and concise. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. It meets the requirements for the contest! Good luck!
Comment Written 27-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2020
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Hello Raul1,
Thank you very much for your so uplifting, and morale boosting comments backed by 'Good Luck!'
With best wishes
Comment from Lil' Mormon Boy
Very nice entry for the twenty syllable poem contest.
Your thoughts came together well using the proper amount of syllable allowed.
It was very easy to follow what was being said.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2020
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Very nice entry for the twenty syllable poem contest.
Your thoughts came together well using the proper amount of syllable allowed.
It was very easy to follow what was being said.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2020
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Hello Lil' Mormon Boy,
Thank you very much for your so uplifting, and morale boosting comments.
With best wishes