Comment from Eternal Muse

Excellent

You described the inner emotions and the mind set of an impostor. The horrors to live a lie, to pretend, to fake the truth. Great descriptive imagery throughout.

An interesting ending.

I noticed a couple of errors you would need to fix:

"I am so scared that everybody will learn the true."

I think you meant "the truth."

And in the paragraph before last you say:

"Life goes one, you will go to when your time comes."

Two edits are needed here. Here is my suggestion:

"Life oes on, you will go when your time comes."

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 Comment Written 17-Jul-2020

Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.

Excellent

This is a great little story!

Typos:
I am so scared that everybody will learn the true: (truth:)

Live without being afraid that I might wake up and have no job to go to or not (no) roof to cover my head.

But then my dad passed away, and for the first time death hit so close to home,(.) then (Then) my baby cat died and my grand mother (grandmother) and grand father (grandfather). Death is scary,(.) she (She) does't (doesn't) ask(.) she (She) just comes and takes, and no payments is required.

Life goes one, (on) you will go to when your time comes.

Just life (live) to honor his wish and discover places he wanted to visit before...




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 Comment Written 17-Jul-2020