Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Winds of Change"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
I said Wow! after I finished reading this.
Nice image.
Good universal questions that we all ask. You presented it well here in your poem.
I like your first part that ends with moonlight.
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your last 5 lines.
One suggestion: you might want to break this up into stanzas by putting empty lines in between. It would make it look more like a poem on the page. And it would be easier to read. (just a thought, you know best, it's your work.)
Kathryn
reply by the author on 04-May-2010
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I said Wow! after I finished reading this.
Nice image.
Good universal questions that we all ask. You presented it well here in your poem.
I like your first part that ends with moonlight.
And
your last 5 lines.
One suggestion: you might want to break this up into stanzas by putting empty lines in between. It would make it look more like a poem on the page. And it would be easier to read. (just a thought, you know best, it's your work.)
Kathryn
Comment Written 04-May-2010
reply by the author on 04-May-2010
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thank you Kathryn and thank for the comment
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You're welcome.
kathryn
Comment from percival86jack
A plaintiff wish for answers to some burning questions! The reader hopes that love will be found to ease the pain. Well written again my friend... cheers Jack
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A plaintiff wish for answers to some burning questions! The reader hopes that love will be found to ease the pain. Well written again my friend... cheers Jack
Comment Written 04-May-2010
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thank you Jack for reading
Comment from geoniasha
The winds of change blow within, around and through everything, even relationships. Doubt and sincere questions develop and ride the currents with every gust of wind. This is a very poignant write. I especially liked the last three lines ---
'When I fall will you extend your inner spirit to catch my worthlessness,
Or cast me aside to be forgotten,
Only to replenish yourself with the next winds of change'
Thank you for sharing. geo
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The winds of change blow within, around and through everything, even relationships. Doubt and sincere questions develop and ride the currents with every gust of wind. This is a very poignant write. I especially liked the last three lines ---
'When I fall will you extend your inner spirit to catch my worthlessness,
Or cast me aside to be forgotten,
Only to replenish yourself with the next winds of change'
Thank you for sharing. geo
Comment Written 04-May-2010
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thank you
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You're welcome. geo
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
I like the image you present of your prospective soul mate as a reflection in the waters, with her possible characteristics indicated by the ripples caused by the wind. A nice, dreamy love poem. Best wishes, Jeanie Mercer
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I like the image you present of your prospective soul mate as a reflection in the waters, with her possible characteristics indicated by the ripples caused by the wind. A nice, dreamy love poem. Best wishes, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 04-May-2010
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thank you
Comment from Janine Ellis-Fynn
This is a beautiful, heartfelt and emotive love poem written with honesty and passion. I enjoyed reading it, well done and thanks for sharing.
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This is a beautiful, heartfelt and emotive love poem written with honesty and passion. I enjoyed reading it, well done and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-May-2010
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thank you
Comment from rudywalsh
Well done buddie, well written, it's a very beautiful free verse poem, this comes from your heart I can tell.
I read something of your work yesterday I think, and this little number stands up better, so it looks like you are learning my friend take care and keep fighting and writing Rudywalsh.
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Well done buddie, well written, it's a very beautiful free verse poem, this comes from your heart I can tell.
I read something of your work yesterday I think, and this little number stands up better, so it looks like you are learning my friend take care and keep fighting and writing Rudywalsh.
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thank you
Comment from spiceydog
Good work you put into these romantic poem, expressing your love for your one. Great structure that is will round and flows together. spiceydog
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Good work you put into these romantic poem, expressing your love for your one. Great structure that is will round and flows together. spiceydog
Comment Written 03-May-2010
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thank you spiceydog
Comment from dportwood
deepwater,
'Winds of Change' has the tenor of one who is uncertain of his ability to maintain a loving relationship. The winds of change have the capacity to destroy.
Duane
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deepwater,
'Winds of Change' has the tenor of one who is uncertain of his ability to maintain a loving relationship. The winds of change have the capacity to destroy.
Duane
Comment Written 03-May-2010
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thanks for reading
Comment from seewhatimwritingnow
A beautifully written poem telling the uncertainty and doubt of true love. We always take a chance- never knowing. Just a lovely writing that will hold much meaning for many. Thanks for sharing this- VERY well presented. Betty
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A beautifully written poem telling the uncertainty and doubt of true love. We always take a chance- never knowing. Just a lovely writing that will hold much meaning for many. Thanks for sharing this- VERY well presented. Betty
Comment Written 03-May-2010
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thank you Betty
Comment from jwlee211
great poem. I love the images this poem presents. I also like the hope that she will make the decision to stand. Great work.
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great poem. I love the images this poem presents. I also like the hope that she will make the decision to stand. Great work.
Comment Written 03-May-2010
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Thank you for your review
