Writings From the Heart
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Comment from fairydancer
I really do like your writing style, and the messages you so well write and convey.
This poem shows a lot of thought and consideration (and possibly experience?)
Great poem about the doubt of trusting a potential lover.
Really good piece :)
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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I really do like your writing style, and the messages you so well write and convey.
This poem shows a lot of thought and consideration (and possibly experience?)
Great poem about the doubt of trusting a potential lover.
Really good piece :)
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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thanks Fairydancer
Comment from littlebearvt
Wow how powerful, great imageous. I wish you had of expanded just a little more on some sight, sound, smell, touch perhaps, make me feel like I was there next to you.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Wow how powerful, great imageous. I wish you had of expanded just a little more on some sight, sound, smell, touch perhaps, make me feel like I was there next to you.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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thanks and your welcome
Comment from kleblanc
Great poem. I would have to say my favorite parts are around the middle and to the end. I don't think I would have changed anything. Great job!
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Great poem. I would have to say my favorite parts are around the middle and to the end. I don't think I would have changed anything. Great job!
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thanks Kleblanc
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a poem that shows the fear in the heart of one who wishes to look before he leaps into the murky waters of love. It is well written with a good diction. kudos
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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This is a poem that shows the fear in the heart of one who wishes to look before he leaps into the murky waters of love. It is well written with a good diction. kudos
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thanks Perp
Comment from Ash Madox
This is an eloquent free form poem. I enjoyed the metaphors of love portrayed through ripples on still water and winds of change on earthy spirits to express how time can alter feelings. The insecurity was there, but with a juxtaposition of calmness about it all; a kind of resignation because the speaker didn't feel worthy of that love. It's a poem that makes me enjoy examining it.
One of the things I like about this site is that poets have the opportunity to enhance their work through the visual of pictures, and often poets are inspired directly through that picture, showcasing their prowess as good poets.
By the same token, I especially enjoy those unsupported because there's no distraction from the words. This way, the poem has to stand alone, through its own strength. It will resonate or it won't. This is one of those special poems, for me. There's a real honesty and beauty in it--very visual in its own right. Very well composed, I enjoyed it. Ash.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2010
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This is an eloquent free form poem. I enjoyed the metaphors of love portrayed through ripples on still water and winds of change on earthy spirits to express how time can alter feelings. The insecurity was there, but with a juxtaposition of calmness about it all; a kind of resignation because the speaker didn't feel worthy of that love. It's a poem that makes me enjoy examining it.
One of the things I like about this site is that poets have the opportunity to enhance their work through the visual of pictures, and often poets are inspired directly through that picture, showcasing their prowess as good poets.
By the same token, I especially enjoy those unsupported because there's no distraction from the words. This way, the poem has to stand alone, through its own strength. It will resonate or it won't. This is one of those special poems, for me. There's a real honesty and beauty in it--very visual in its own right. Very well composed, I enjoyed it. Ash.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2010
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Thank you Ash
Comment from artinprogress
I found this poem romantic. You painted a clear picture that seemed to fade as you doubted your worth, or the ability to withstand the changes in life. I wonder if this depicts a real relationship in peril, or of something more intangible.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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I found this poem romantic. You painted a clear picture that seemed to fade as you doubted your worth, or the ability to withstand the changes in life. I wonder if this depicts a real relationship in peril, or of something more intangible.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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Thank you it was one of my first
Comment from Connie P
Very nice poem which conveys the questions and search involved with a lost or damaged relationship.
My only suggestion would be to check the colon use. It's not widely used in poetry and general for listing only.
Two very nice lines:
*Like ripples betraying still waters, will you stay with me?
*When I fall will you extend your inner spirit to catch my worthlessness
Connie
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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Very nice poem which conveys the questions and search involved with a lost or damaged relationship.
My only suggestion would be to check the colon use. It's not widely used in poetry and general for listing only.
Two very nice lines:
*Like ripples betraying still waters, will you stay with me?
*When I fall will you extend your inner spirit to catch my worthlessness
Connie
Comment Written 26-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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Thank you i will change the seting
Comment from harleyangelbrat
This is a beautiful poem. It is very expressive which makes for an excellent read. You have written this love poem very well and described the mixed feelings of being in love. This is a wonderful poem. God bless you!
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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This is a beautiful poem. It is very expressive which makes for an excellent read. You have written this love poem very well and described the mixed feelings of being in love. This is a wonderful poem. God bless you!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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Thank you this was one of my first
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You are very welcome. Have a blessed day. Marilyn
Comment from Sharesy
This is a nicely written story/poem. It reads like prose. I understand that it's free verse, but the way it's worded, and the way it's formatted without an image at the top, and the starkness of the black font on white looks to me very much like newspaper print.
My personal preference would be that it be put in the story, or essay category, but that's just me. There were no spags, and it was thoughtfully and intelligently written, I just disagree with the format, that's all. It still an excellent piece, regardless. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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This is a nicely written story/poem. It reads like prose. I understand that it's free verse, but the way it's worded, and the way it's formatted without an image at the top, and the starkness of the black font on white looks to me very much like newspaper print.
My personal preference would be that it be put in the story, or essay category, but that's just me. There were no spags, and it was thoughtfully and intelligently written, I just disagree with the format, that's all. It still an excellent piece, regardless. Nicely done.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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Thank you i will make the change, and this was one of my first trys
Comment from anabelle
Very sad and full of doubt, for yourself and the person you are speaking of. There seems to be little trust there and there's likely a reason for it.
Thanks for sharing. It's very raw and beautiful.
Regards, anabelle
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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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Very sad and full of doubt, for yourself and the person you are speaking of. There seems to be little trust there and there's likely a reason for it.
Thanks for sharing. It's very raw and beautiful.
Regards, anabelle
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Comment Written 26-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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Thank you my first year to write
Gary
