Comment from Eigle Rull

Excellent

My friend, I couldn't agree more with your statements. And your poem is very good in my opinion. It is hard to state a thought in just three lines. But you have done it. You chose your subject, and homed right in on it. I found no mistakes in it. I thought it to be excellent.

Always with respect,

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013

Your words are valuable and cheering!thanks for your view
with due respect and affection:-)
as

Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart

Excellent

This is really a very powerful poem. I'm not a poet so I can't review on if they style is done perfect but I can review from my heart and tell the poem shares a very important thought and is very true. Welcome to the site. God loves you and so do I.

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013

Thanks a lot!your words will keep me enthusiastic for writing more.
With affection:-)
as

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Cocooned is a good image. I don't want to go back there . I want to do the cocooning. Every time I hear the train whistle in our town I pray for the children I teach . I pray for their protection and for them too be loved.
Thanks for this poem I liked it a lot
God bless

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013

Thanks for reading it and sharing your views:-)

Comment from PoesyPoet

Excellent

I think the haiku is very well laid out. You have an excellent chance of winning the contest. I wish you the very best of luck. PP

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013

I am amazed that you really think so.your words have filled me with confidence.thanks for your valuable comment:-)

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

Very good 5-7-5 poem, the right amount of syllables in each sentence.
I loved the metaphor. What a wonderful image, Well done, keep writing .

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013

Thanks for your significant words:-)

Comment from Rondeno

Excellent

I like this haiku very much. The translucent skin of the cocoon protects the creature inside, allowing him a limited (and idealised) glimpse of the harsh outer world. Excellent poetic metaphor.

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013

Thank you for your encouraging words:-)

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

great pairing of photo and poem, which is in excellent 5/7/5 form
you deliver a thoughtful message and I like the visual of the shining full moon :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013

Thanks for the cheerful words.i am happy for you enjoyed it:-)

Comment from Cookie333

Excellent

Hello there! So many struggles right? You have a good message here,
Your syllable count is correct, I have learned a few things about haiku since I joined--- no punctuation is used, the title is the first line of your haiku
Hope this helps
K

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013

Thanks for your views.it will help me in improving for sure

reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013

A very hearty thanks for becoming a fan:-).its a really sweet gesture

reply by Cookie333 on 19-Jun-2013

When you become a "fan" you get dibs on all new releases by that poet.
When you post something I will get a message and will be able to read your piece straight away, feel free to do the same,
k

Comment from barkingdog

Excellent

I too remember those sheltered days when things seemed all bright and cozy, safe and fairy tale like.

We grow up.


Your 5/7/5 with perfect syllable count and lovely imagery takes us back to the early years.

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013

Thanks for the praise:-).i am happy that you liked it so much.still learning

Comment from INtity

Excellent

Well written haiku! If only life was as carefree and we were as innocent as we were in the beginning. What we imagined and dreamed has become a complete 360 since the beginning. Sweetness intertwined with bitterness but anyways great job!

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013

Glad you liked it!thanks for your words:-)