Don't play on the Ice
Laugh and laugh often you will feel better!27 total reviews
Comment from mermaids
You have a delicious use of words that makes your poem fun to read out loud. I like the word "thrice", it is not used very often. This is a poem that is funny and brings a smile to the reader's face.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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You have a delicious use of words that makes your poem fun to read out loud. I like the word "thrice", it is not used very often. This is a poem that is funny and brings a smile to the reader's face.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Smiling back, mermaids, Thank you!
Comment from Suzanna1979
Ha! And Perfect photo for those words - Love! I do not really see a need for improvement, myself. The use of your language actually reminds me of Dr. Seuss and I could vividly see this in a children's book. Thanks for the smile!
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Ha! And Perfect photo for those words - Love! I do not really see a need for improvement, myself. The use of your language actually reminds me of Dr. Seuss and I could vividly see this in a children's book. Thanks for the smile!
Comment Written 11-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Smiling back, Suzanna, Thank you!
Comment from Hopeful2
You've offered your readers a good 5-7-5 humorous poem to fulfill the contest challenge. It's fun to follow your compact little story about the making the same dumb, unpleasant mistake of falling through the ice three times. Good luck in your FanStory writing.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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You've offered your readers a good 5-7-5 humorous poem to fulfill the contest challenge. It's fun to follow your compact little story about the making the same dumb, unpleasant mistake of falling through the ice three times. Good luck in your FanStory writing.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Smiling back, Hopeful2, Thank you!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Laugh and laugh often you will feel better!
Don't play on the Ice
Hello anonymous
He he... Pretty funny entry for the
Humorous 5-7-5 writing prompt contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Poor fishermen...icy water is no fun. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021
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Laugh and laugh often you will feel better!
Don't play on the Ice
Hello anonymous
He he... Pretty funny entry for the
Humorous 5-7-5 writing prompt contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Poor fishermen...icy water is no fun. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021
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Brrrrrrrrrrrr
Comment from royowen
I'd have to count myself among those frumpy peasants my friend. This is a great hilarious post dear people, I guess you're all under the ruling snow there, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021
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I'd have to count myself among those frumpy peasants my friend. This is a great hilarious post dear people, I guess you're all under the ruling snow there, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021
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Thanks, Brrrrrrrr it is snowing!
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Heh heh it?s been 100 deg here
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
I'm guessing the third just sat back and laughed at them! Cute poem, very catchy. The artwork made me shiver, haha. It was a good compliment to your poem.
Take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021
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I'm guessing the third just sat back and laughed at them! Cute poem, very catchy. The artwork made me shiver, haha. It was a good compliment to your poem.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 11-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021
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Thanks.
Comment from Anne Johnston
Neat little humour poem. The ice in the picture doesn't look very safe for ice fishing. Like your rhyming words, ice and thrice. Hope you do well in the contest.
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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021
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Neat little humour poem. The ice in the picture doesn't look very safe for ice fishing. Like your rhyming words, ice and thrice. Hope you do well in the contest.
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Comment Written 11-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021
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Thanks Anne, tough to tell the whole story in 17 syllables.
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You are welcome.