A Visit to The Chiropractor
An adjustment of the funny bone.55 total reviews
Comment from Aussie
Well Paul, you sure made me smile. I was laughing at the antics of the bone cracker. I actually thought of those clever people that can make animals by twisting balloons together and back the front. We all need a smile and thank you for your cheeky poem. K xx
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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Well Paul, you sure made me smile. I was laughing at the antics of the bone cracker. I actually thought of those clever people that can make animals by twisting balloons together and back the front. We all need a smile and thank you for your cheeky poem. K xx
Comment Written 11-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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Thanks, Kay. I never thought of the balloon guy. I'll bet this chiropractor does that on the side.
Comment from Wendy G
Very humorous! What a fun one. I'm glad you came out in one piece and pain free, lol. I also enjoyed reading of his solution for your problem! Very witty, and cleverly written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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Very humorous! What a fun one. I'm glad you came out in one piece and pain free, lol. I also enjoyed reading of his solution for your problem! Very witty, and cleverly written.
Wendy
Comment Written 11-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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Thanks, Wendy. Hey, has my dog been writing to you? There's dog drool all over my keyboard.
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Lol! Well ? guilty. He actually wrote to Sunny, not me, but I read his review to Sunny, and he was VERY happy.
Wendy
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I'll have to keep an eye on him. By the way, his name is Sam. He is a golden retriever. He may write now and again.
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Sunny will count Sam as a good friend from now on. Did you know that Sam gave Sunny six stars for his writing?! That's what happens when you go off to take a nap!
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I thought I was missing a six star rating. I thought it was just my bad memory. I probably should change my password. I'll bet you can guess what it is.
Comment from lyenochka
Wonderful storytelling! And you certainly gave me a wince and the a smile and a nod of understanding. I hope the chiropractor was affordable! Best wishes in the contest!
Suggestion - only if you agree. There were three last lines which were only five syllables. Example:
I had found online. (suggest adding a syllable to keep the 8/6/8/6 Ballad rhythm here. Maybe: that I had found online)
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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Wonderful storytelling! And you certainly gave me a wince and the a smile and a nod of understanding. I hope the chiropractor was affordable! Best wishes in the contest!
Suggestion - only if you agree. There were three last lines which were only five syllables. Example:
I had found online. (suggest adding a syllable to keep the 8/6/8/6 Ballad rhythm here. Maybe: that I had found online)
Comment Written 11-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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Thanks, Helen. The poem is in iambic heptameter, and I don't like long lines, so the seven feet are spread over two lines. I have had the same comment about some of my other poems and debate whether or not to go with the long lines.
Comment from Melodie Michelle
Exceptional poem my friend! I only had five stars to give you but I give you a virtual six stars!
Thanks for sharing this well written piece with us and many blessings to you and your family!
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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Exceptional poem my friend! I only had five stars to give you but I give you a virtual six stars!
Thanks for sharing this well written piece with us and many blessings to you and your family!
Comment Written 10-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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Thanks, Melodie. I appreciate the virtual six stars. May your spine be ever straight.
Comment from Raul1
This poem did certainly make me smile but it was flat out funny and serious. I had enjoyed reading your poem. Excellent work! Thank you for sharing! Good luck!
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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This poem did certainly make me smile but it was flat out funny and serious. I had enjoyed reading your poem. Excellent work! Thank you for sharing! Good luck!
Comment Written 10-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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Thanks, Raul. I gave my chiropractor a framed copy of this poem.
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You're welcome!
Comment from royowen
Beautifully written and extremely funny, I could probably help out too,you can send some dollar bills, via the Aussie embassy in Washington DC, hang on, a friend of ours has settled their, working on behalf ofbthe Aussie government, I'll send him around, very sound rhythm, rhyme and narrative. Brilliantly so. Well done, blessings Roy
Suggestion, And I was happy being cured. 2: And that will do the trick.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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Beautifully written and extremely funny, I could probably help out too,you can send some dollar bills, via the Aussie embassy in Washington DC, hang on, a friend of ours has settled their, working on behalf ofbthe Aussie government, I'll send him around, very sound rhythm, rhyme and narrative. Brilliantly so. Well done, blessings Roy
Suggestion, And I was happy being cured. 2: And that will do the trick.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2022
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Thanks, Roy. Appreciate the suggestions.
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Well done
Comment from John Ciarmello
Ha! This is clever and made me laugh out loud at a few points throughout. What a fun piece, Paul. I have read it twice, simply to get another chuckle. I wish you much success with the contest. You have my vote. Refreshing, my friend.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2022
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Ha! This is clever and made me laugh out loud at a few points throughout. What a fun piece, Paul. I have read it twice, simply to get another chuckle. I wish you much success with the contest. You have my vote. Refreshing, my friend.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2022
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Thanks, John. I gave my chiropractor a framed copy of this poem.
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LOL. I'll bet he loved it!
Comment from Shirley McLain
I love your humorous chiropractic story. It made me laugh at the words creating pictures in my mind. You did a great job. Good luck in the contest, and have a wonderful afternoon. Shirley
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2022
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I love your humorous chiropractic story. It made me laugh at the words creating pictures in my mind. You did a great job. Good luck in the contest, and have a wonderful afternoon. Shirley
Comment Written 10-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2022
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Thanks, Shirley. I'll have a wonderful afternoon after I get rid of the kink in my back.
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I'm sorry, those things are painful. Try hot packs and then cold. It has helped my back, plus the pain meds of course. I hope you feel better fast.
Comment from LisaMay
Wonderful poem - well written and entertaining,,, a pleasure to read. I've been to see a chiropractor a couple of times (not because I'd been sitting on a thick wallet) and I do agree that the positions they put their patients in is somewhat uncomfortable.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2022
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Wonderful poem - well written and entertaining,,, a pleasure to read. I've been to see a chiropractor a couple of times (not because I'd been sitting on a thick wallet) and I do agree that the positions they put their patients in is somewhat uncomfortable.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2022
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Thanks, LisaMay. The first time I went to the chiropractor, I was very nervous, but things turned out okay.
Comment from Mickamus J
Thank you for sharing an amazing poem. It was funny yet not when he put your leg over your head? I was like really? That is really frightening and scary and hope you are still good.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2022
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Thank you for sharing an amazing poem. It was funny yet not when he put your leg over your head? I was like really? That is really frightening and scary and hope you are still good.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2022
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Thanks Mickamus. I'm pretty good, put when he untangled me, I got a cauliflower ear.