Willing Hearts
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Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, this was beautifully written. I so enjoy this story as you well know. I have a couple of suggestions about the Spanish:
"Todos hablamos espanol co fluidez" = "Todos hablamos espanol bastante bien." would sound more natural.
"Gracious por infomarme, Senor" would also sound more natural. A big hug, Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Hi Barbara, this was beautifully written. I so enjoy this story as you well know. I have a couple of suggestions about the Spanish:
"Todos hablamos espanol co fluidez" = "Todos hablamos espanol bastante bien." would sound more natural.
"Gracious por infomarme, Senor" would also sound more natural. A big hug, Ulla xcx
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Thank you. I've made the corrections.
Comment from GWHARGIS
I get the feeling that even though Noah is jealous of Mateo, he also respects him because of his devotion to Sami. I liked the addition of the Spanish conversation. It made it more realistic. I really enjoyed this. Gretchen
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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I get the feeling that even though Noah is jealous of Mateo, he also respects him because of his devotion to Sami. I liked the addition of the Spanish conversation. It made it more realistic. I really enjoyed this. Gretchen
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I love this chapter. It's getting so suspensful and interesting... I want more. I can't wait for the next chapter.
Your Spanish is very good. You used all the right words. The letters with accents do have that weird symbol. Don't worry about it, it's not that important.
BDSM = I would add the translation in your author notes, or just write, 'pornographic videos'.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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I love this chapter. It's getting so suspensful and interesting... I want more. I can't wait for the next chapter.
Your Spanish is very good. You used all the right words. The letters with accents do have that weird symbol. Don't worry about it, it's not that important.
BDSM = I would add the translation in your author notes, or just write, 'pornographic videos'.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I explained BDSM earlier. It's more than just videos. BDSM is a variety of often erotic practices or roleplaying involving bondage, discipline, dominance and submission, sadomasochism, and other related interpersonal dynamics.
Comment from nomi338
It appears to me that CHEN could be in much more trouble than he could possibly anticipate. With Mateo and his people not bound by legalities, they do not have to observe the niceties that an official police entity may be forced to observe. Resistance by CHEN and his group might not turn out so well, especially given Mateo's fondness for Sami. Oh boy, let's get it on!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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It appears to me that CHEN could be in much more trouble than he could possibly anticipate. With Mateo and his people not bound by legalities, they do not have to observe the niceties that an official police entity may be forced to observe. Resistance by CHEN and his group might not turn out so well, especially given Mateo's fondness for Sami. Oh boy, let's get it on!
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Thank you for this very encouraging review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I speak Spanish and understood it perfectly. This is a new kettle of fish that Noah has to face. Mateo is still keen on Sami, and seems to be determined to get her. But, now Sami is truly in love, and it isn't with him. I can't wait to read on. Well done, Barbara, Warm hugs, Sandra xx
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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I speak Spanish and understood it perfectly. This is a new kettle of fish that Noah has to face. Mateo is still keen on Sami, and seems to be determined to get her. But, now Sami is truly in love, and it isn't with him. I can't wait to read on. Well done, Barbara, Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate it.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
The action is well crafted in this chapter, but I find the character development is lagging behind a bit, perhaps because you are trying to juggle so many characters here. Noah should have let Sami have her say. That would have helped things and created stronger tension upon the meeting. kay
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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The action is well crafted in this chapter, but I find the character development is lagging behind a bit, perhaps because you are trying to juggle so many characters here. Noah should have let Sami have her say. That would have helped things and created stronger tension upon the meeting. kay
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Noah was too jealous. I think it will come out in next week's post. The bond will grow. This is all one long chapter. Please be patient. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jim vecchio
I took two years of Spanish at night school. I don't remember much, but your Spanish seems very good. Thanks for another very interesting chapter. I hope there will be a continued dynamic between Mateo and Noah. I'm pretty timid, but I wouldn't stand anyone else being in love with my wife.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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I took two years of Spanish at night school. I don't remember much, but your Spanish seems very good. Thanks for another very interesting chapter. I hope there will be a continued dynamic between Mateo and Noah. I'm pretty timid, but I wouldn't stand anyone else being in love with my wife.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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There will be in next weeks post. Thank you for the kind review.
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Thank for your fine writing. I will try with all my might to be there next week!
Comment from BethShelby
I think Noah is doing a slow burn. He is very uncomfortable with knowing
Mateo being in love with Sami. Sami really wanted to talk to him before they went. This should be interesting. I think Mateo will do what they team asks him to do.
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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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I think Noah is doing a slow burn. He is very uncomfortable with knowing
Mateo being in love with Sami. Sami really wanted to talk to him before they went. This should be interesting. I think Mateo will do what they team asks him to do.
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Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Yes, Noah is jealous.
Comment from estory
You complicate the love situation by introducing this rich Colombian heir into the mix. He seems completely gone on Sami. But I don't quite understand why Noah and his team really need this guy to take down Chen. And why would he cooperate? Wouldn't he be hell bent on taking down Noah? The dialogue was pretty crisp, but there were too many 'mi amors' in there. estory
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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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You complicate the love situation by introducing this rich Colombian heir into the mix. He seems completely gone on Sami. But I don't quite understand why Noah and his team really need this guy to take down Chen. And why would he cooperate? Wouldn't he be hell bent on taking down Noah? The dialogue was pretty crisp, but there were too many 'mi amors' in there. estory
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Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Noah needs him to get into the escort services. Mateo will do anything in hopes of marrying Sami. Let's see how it all works out. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
The narrative explores the complexities of Sami's relationships and the stakes involved in their mission to combat human trafficking. The chapter effectively blends suspense with character development, setting the stage for an intense confrontation with the villainous Chen. This mix of action, personal stakes, and moral dilemmas keeps readers engaged, eager to see how the characters navigate their dangerous mission.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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The narrative explores the complexities of Sami's relationships and the stakes involved in their mission to combat human trafficking. The chapter effectively blends suspense with character development, setting the stage for an intense confrontation with the villainous Chen. This mix of action, personal stakes, and moral dilemmas keeps readers engaged, eager to see how the characters navigate their dangerous mission.
Excellent.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.