When Horses Come
A CUBE16 Poem26 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed your powerful poem Robert and the form helped to deliver this message here. War consumes and destroys and the chaos is deadly just now, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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I enjoyed your powerful poem Robert and the form helped to deliver this message here. War consumes and destroys and the chaos is deadly just now, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Dolly. I appreciate your meaningful comments and thank you for the positive words about the form of this poem.
Robert
Comment from ESOSTINE
The poem is a deep expression of fear and hopelessness and confusion in a troubled world. Yet, the poem ends with a glimmer of redemption shining through as you rely on the healing and saving power of God. Well done, dear Robert. I did enjoy the work, and pray that your fears and worries 'rush away'. Regards.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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The poem is a deep expression of fear and hopelessness and confusion in a troubled world. Yet, the poem ends with a glimmer of redemption shining through as you rely on the healing and saving power of God. Well done, dear Robert. I did enjoy the work, and pray that your fears and worries 'rush away'. Regards.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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I am very grateful for your positive review and the beautiful six-star award. Thank you for your encouraging words and thoughts. I can say I am confident in the power of God.
Robert
Comment from judiverse
I always thought your Cube was for lighter subjects, but you put it to spectacular use in tackling this serious subject of the chaos and turmoil we're experiencing now. I believing part of the problem is turning away from religion. When they do, they don't have anything to put their trust in. there's no sense of direction. You did a marvelous job of expressing you concerns in lines of four syllables, and you did it more eloquently than some who take need ten syllables a line. Here's hoping for better days ahead. We're really at a breaking point now. judi
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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I always thought your Cube was for lighter subjects, but you put it to spectacular use in tackling this serious subject of the chaos and turmoil we're experiencing now. I believing part of the problem is turning away from religion. When they do, they don't have anything to put their trust in. there's no sense of direction. You did a marvelous job of expressing you concerns in lines of four syllables, and you did it more eloquently than some who take need ten syllables a line. Here's hoping for better days ahead. We're really at a breaking point now. judi
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Thank you Judi. I have dozens of CUBE16 poems. I use it to write silly poems to comments about Biblical prophecy. The reason I like it is it forces me to select the RIGHT words and keep the meter steady. The length requirement makes me get the massage of the poem clear.
Robert
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You're welcome. It is a great form, and you should publish a book of your Robert's Cube poems. judi
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I published a chapbook of poetry last year that was 33 poems from the pandemic. It sold out except for some author copies I have. I fought with the prospective publisher and finally self published. They told me no one buys my kind of poetry anymore. They were wrong.
Robert
I have a few hundred poems of the CUBE16 style. It requires an "economy of words." I like that.
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Maybe I will.
Comment from Julie Helms
This is an interesting poetic form and on a timely, yet timeless topic. Things may have changed considerably in the 3000 years since your reference, and yet the emotions read exactly the same.
I don't know why I did it, but I read your poem from bottom up, too, and it mostly makes sense that way too!
Thanks for sharing!
Julie
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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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This is an interesting poetic form and on a timely, yet timeless topic. Things may have changed considerably in the 3000 years since your reference, and yet the emotions read exactly the same.
I don't know why I did it, but I read your poem from bottom up, too, and it mostly makes sense that way too!
Thanks for sharing!
Julie
:-)
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your positive review and comments. I created the CUBE16 form several years ago, and the "rules" are posted on my profile page. It is relatively restrictive in syllable and stanza construction. Reading it backwards is an interesting idea. I will try that. It is written sourced by the powerful verse I quoted. Thank you again.
Robert
Comment from royowen
What an interesting dilemma? How can we outrun a horse if we can't outrun a human athlete? No way is the answer, peace I think is something we can't possibly gain of our volition, only in the apprehension of God's forgiveness, beautifully written Robert, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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What an interesting dilemma? How can we outrun a horse if we can't outrun a human athlete? No way is the answer, peace I think is something we can't possibly gain of our volition, only in the apprehension of God's forgiveness, beautifully written Robert, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Roy. I have found this verse in Jeremiah very powerful. It applied not only to the time of Jeremiah, but it applies to our world today. Thank you for your positive comments.
Robert
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Well done
Comment from Ang Tang
This poem really captures the emotional struggle we face in challenging times. It effectively conveys a sense of fear and the search for comfort amidst chaos. The rhyme scheme gives it a nice flow, but some lines could use a bit more variety in word choice to enhance their impact, especially in phrases like "fears and doubts." Overall, it powerfully expresses vulnerability while still clinging to hope.
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This poem really captures the emotional struggle we face in challenging times. It effectively conveys a sense of fear and the search for comfort amidst chaos. The rhyme scheme gives it a nice flow, but some lines could use a bit more variety in word choice to enhance their impact, especially in phrases like "fears and doubts." Overall, it powerfully expresses vulnerability while still clinging to hope.
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Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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This style requires 4 syllables per line with fixed meter. Thanks for your review.