I Survived
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "How Are You Still Alive?"A book for people to share stories of survival.
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Comment from Mike Stevens
A harrowing ordeal, we're all just a freak accident away from bad or worse. She sounds determined to get better, and that determination is the key, It's hard to feel that way sometimes, but you have two choices, you can give up or you can fight. To me, there's only one choice, and it's NOT giving up
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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A harrowing ordeal, we're all just a freak accident away from bad or worse. She sounds determined to get better, and that determination is the key, It's hard to feel that way sometimes, but you have two choices, you can give up or you can fight. To me, there's only one choice, and it's NOT giving up
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Hi Mike!!
I remember when my accident occurred, you shared a bit of your own struggles, which you've addressed since in this book. I was lucky in that mine wasn't as extensive as yours, but a head injury is a head injury, eeeek!!!
Thanks for the six, my friend!!
Comment from SimianSavant
An intense story. Glad you are still here to tell it. Here a few proofreading suggestions:
They sent him to another, then another. <= another operator? Try instead: they transferred him again, and again
At the risk of sounding cliche, <= you can omit this
My husband and I had gone to church <= add comma
Wayne and I <= who is Wayne? If your husband, then introduce him in the previous paragraph: "My husband Wayne"
Good for him, he was pretty tame <= millennial comma. Replace with a period.
I heard the call to 911, his cry to the dispatcher <= add a comma here, unless you're British
Thanks for the read! Best regards,
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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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An intense story. Glad you are still here to tell it. Here a few proofreading suggestions:
They sent him to another, then another. <= another operator? Try instead: they transferred him again, and again
At the risk of sounding cliche, <= you can omit this
My husband and I had gone to church <= add comma
Wayne and I <= who is Wayne? If your husband, then introduce him in the previous paragraph: "My husband Wayne"
Good for him, he was pretty tame <= millennial comma. Replace with a period.
I heard the call to 911, his cry to the dispatcher <= add a comma here, unless you're British
Thanks for the read! Best regards,
🦍
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Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Simian, my friend, thank you so much for the very helpful review. I made the corrections you suggested and they were spot on!! I really appreciate the extra set of discerning eyes.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Jacob1395
I can only imagine the fear and the pain you experienced here, Rhonda. You can sense how powerful a bull is just by looking at one, I would've been terrified if one near me had escaped. You described what happened really well in your piece, particularly in the dialogue which to me felt really intense as I was reading it. An excellent piece.
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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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I can only imagine the fear and the pain you experienced here, Rhonda. You can sense how powerful a bull is just by looking at one, I would've been terrified if one near me had escaped. You described what happened really well in your piece, particularly in the dialogue which to me felt really intense as I was reading it. An excellent piece.
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Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much, Jacob. I was just reading your post, lol. Very intense. I'll write a review as soon as I can.