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Comment from TrevorPenick
What an amazingly written piece. I'm going to have to check out the previous chapters. There's such a clear voice, here. You tastefully tackle the horror of the situation w/o going overboard. Great work! Cheers! T.
reply by the author on 23-May-2008
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What an amazingly written piece. I'm going to have to check out the previous chapters. There's such a clear voice, here. You tastefully tackle the horror of the situation w/o going overboard. Great work! Cheers! T.
Comment Written 23-May-2008
reply by the author on 23-May-2008
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Hi Trevor,
Thank you so much for your encouraging comments. I tried to keep this as nightmare-free as possible and still stay true to the genre. Seems like I'm pulling that off. What a wonderful review!
Hope to see you again,
Gayle
Comment from Korton
These two are in quite a jam, but at least now they are thinking. Fingernails in the eyeballs seems like a good choice if they can muster the courage. Undoubtedly, their clothes and shoes are around somewhere if they can just get out of the room. Very well done.
reply by the author on 23-May-2008
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These two are in quite a jam, but at least now they are thinking. Fingernails in the eyeballs seems like a good choice if they can muster the courage. Undoubtedly, their clothes and shoes are around somewhere if they can just get out of the room. Very well done.
Comment Written 23-May-2008
reply by the author on 23-May-2008
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Slowly but surely, Frank, we're closing in on this beast. The girls just have to get out of there!
Thanks so much for the great R&!
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from RenieReader
The poor things. This just breaks my heart for these frightened, abused girls. As far as Sam goes, I guess it's better to take it out on someone else than blame himself. Great character development, Gayle, and a superb story line. Keep up the good work.
He['s] impotent and it makes him madder than hell.
Hugs,
Renie
reply by the author on 23-May-2008
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The poor things. This just breaks my heart for these frightened, abused girls. As far as Sam goes, I guess it's better to take it out on someone else than blame himself. Great character development, Gayle, and a superb story line. Keep up the good work.
He['s] impotent and it makes him madder than hell.
Hugs,
Renie
Comment Written 23-May-2008
reply by the author on 23-May-2008
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Hi Renie,
It's a bleak outlook, for sure, but I get the feeling that things might just be changing.
I'll get the 's' in there, thanks for the eagle eye! Thanks for the help and the great R&R.
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from GentleCloud
Hi Showtimebook, great to catch this chapter, quite a change from the normal genre you write. This one is a compelling read.
Have a look at these, nothing major.
He'd barge through the open door (given that you'd mentioned that he had opened the door, perhaps avoid the repetition here by saying "H'd barge in and ...)
He('s) impotent and it makes
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reply by the author on 23-May-2008
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Hi Showtimebook, great to catch this chapter, quite a change from the normal genre you write. This one is a compelling read.
Have a look at these, nothing major.
He'd barge through the open door (given that you'd mentioned that he had opened the door, perhaps avoid the repetition here by saying "H'd barge in and ...)
He('s) impotent and it makes
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-May-2008
reply by the author on 23-May-2008
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Well, hi, Gentle Cloud,
It's been quite a while! So nice to see you again.
Yes, this is quite a departure from my fluffy kids stories, huh?
Started a couple of books back, mystery/thriller. Actually got the first one sold, so now I'm doing sequils!
I made the fixes and thank you for the edits and your wonderful comments,
Gayle