Manic Depression
this is a haikuru haiku/senyru combo47 total reviews
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
Being depressed is no fun. You did a wonderful job with your picture and the wording of your poem. I think that a lot of people can relate to this
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2008
Being depressed is no fun. You did a wonderful job with your picture and the wording of your poem. I think that a lot of people can relate to this
Comment Written 09-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2008
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thank you
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Earthwriter,
You hit the nail right on the head with this one.
Good description. I particularly liked the following line:
Flying high out of control
(after the above ... you know the next line is coming ... )
Darkness is coming
(A vicious cycle)
Great Haiki - it's count is accurate. Good imagery - the
photo "complements" and "compliments" your writing.
I like the half white and half black face ... if only life could be as simple as black and white for those who suffer from this disease. This is a good write about a difficult subject matter.
Thanks for sharing this with us. Regards, LateBloomer
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2008
Hello Earthwriter,
You hit the nail right on the head with this one.
Good description. I particularly liked the following line:
Flying high out of control
(after the above ... you know the next line is coming ... )
Darkness is coming
(A vicious cycle)
Great Haiki - it's count is accurate. Good imagery - the
photo "complements" and "compliments" your writing.
I like the half white and half black face ... if only life could be as simple as black and white for those who suffer from this disease. This is a good write about a difficult subject matter.
Thanks for sharing this with us. Regards, LateBloomer
Comment Written 09-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2008
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thank you
Comment from dportwood
Earthwriter,
A haiku with form, content and language that evokes an image in the mind of the reader. Describes the mental condition in few words. Good work.
dportwood
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2008
Earthwriter,
A haiku with form, content and language that evokes an image in the mind of the reader. Describes the mental condition in few words. Good work.
dportwood
Comment Written 08-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2008
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thank you so much
Comment from FrankieT
E,W, I had an old friend from my youth who became manic depressive or had it recognized when he was in this thirties or forties. The 3 lines above described him perfectly. :o)
FrankieT
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2008
E,W, I had an old friend from my youth who became manic depressive or had it recognized when he was in this thirties or forties. The 3 lines above described him perfectly. :o)
FrankieT
Comment Written 08-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2008
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thank you so much
Comment from mmichelle97219
A frenzy of light, A fight in the night
Who gets control this time?
The one who makes me manic who brings about the panic?
Or the one who tells me to leave it all behind?
No matter who wins I lose each time they battle
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I thought this was a very well done poem. Short to the point yet very powerfull. Nice post.
Michelle
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2008
A frenzy of light, A fight in the night
Who gets control this time?
The one who makes me manic who brings about the panic?
Or the one who tells me to leave it all behind?
No matter who wins I lose each time they battle
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I thought this was a very well done poem. Short to the point yet very powerfull. Nice post.
Michelle
Comment Written 08-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2008
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thank you so much
Comment from S.Yocom
From what I have read, your senryu accurately describes the feelings of a manic depressive, Monte. The person thinks that he or she can accomplish much while in the high phase, but knows that the low time is coming. The disease must be very hard on that person as well as on the family. Well done.
Sally
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2008
From what I have read, your senryu accurately describes the feelings of a manic depressive, Monte. The person thinks that he or she can accomplish much while in the high phase, but knows that the low time is coming. The disease must be very hard on that person as well as on the family. Well done.
Sally
Comment Written 08-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2008
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thank you so much
Comment from starman
I think the pictue and your words of wisdom perfectly illustrate the extremes of bi-polar states of mind. I hope others can relate to this..
:)s.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2008
I think the pictue and your words of wisdom perfectly illustrate the extremes of bi-polar states of mind. I hope others can relate to this..
:)s.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2008
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thank you so much
Comment from steevie
I don't think that one could sum up manic so well in fewer words! The essence of this disease, you have captured and tied it to the ground where we can all have a look to see exactly what it is
super write
steve
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2008
I don't think that one could sum up manic so well in fewer words! The essence of this disease, you have captured and tied it to the ground where we can all have a look to see exactly what it is
super write
steve
Comment Written 08-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2008
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thank you my friend
Comment from bard owl
The minds flight from excitability to severe depression is so hard on the heart and soul and senses of the afflicted. Your poem says this with few words quite well. The picture accompanying the haiku also effectively shows the the light and dark - high and low of bipolar disorder. Excellent. Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2008
The minds flight from excitability to severe depression is so hard on the heart and soul and senses of the afflicted. Your poem says this with few words quite well. The picture accompanying the haiku also effectively shows the the light and dark - high and low of bipolar disorder. Excellent. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 08-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2008
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thank you linda
Comment from PoesyPoet
I don't know what a manic depressive is exactly, but I think it must be quite scary! This looks like a scene from an old Batman episode so I am hard pressed to make the relationship with the two. I guess it's because the Riddler was always playing jokes and seemed to have two personalities. Can that be it?
Interesting haiku.
PP
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2008
I don't know what a manic depressive is exactly, but I think it must be quite scary! This looks like a scene from an old Batman episode so I am hard pressed to make the relationship with the two. I guess it's because the Riddler was always playing jokes and seemed to have two personalities. Can that be it?
Interesting haiku.
PP
Comment Written 08-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2008
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it represents light and darknessit is actually a pic from an old star trek