Over-the-Fence
a whimsical tale with a moral74 total reviews
Comment from EdwardVal
Good structure and a fine picture to highlight your pice. I also found the message rewarding and true. You stated simply in a convo of gossip what it means to truely gossip and end with your moral which I enjoyed. Overall a fine read and no errors were found.
E'Val
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Good structure and a fine picture to highlight your pice. I also found the message rewarding and true. You stated simply in a convo of gossip what it means to truely gossip and end with your moral which I enjoyed. Overall a fine read and no errors were found.
E'Val
Comment Written 05-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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E'Val, hello. I do not believe we have met. Thank you so very much for stopping by and reading my poem. Your review and comments are appreciated so very much. jlsavell
Comment from Amicus
Oh what a good read this is. I just love the rhymes and cadence that carried me along through this delightful piece. Technically, everything works here and the characters with their witty and descriptive names are memorable.
Great job.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Oh what a good read this is. I just love the rhymes and cadence that carried me along through this delightful piece. Technically, everything works here and the characters with their witty and descriptive names are memorable.
Great job.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Amicus, thank you for such wonderful comments and review. I appreciate you..glad you enjoyed..jlsavell
Comment from justmade
I like the lessons in this poem and how it presented it in form of a story.
I reminded them that Ms.Tell-a-real-spin talked about all
One should never listen or contribute to groundless talk;
for idle words can damage and cause the guiltless to fall
I then realized that in my wise talk, I too, should walk
This is my favorite verse. She finally realized she needs to take her advice.
Much love,
Justmade.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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I like the lessons in this poem and how it presented it in form of a story.
I reminded them that Ms.Tell-a-real-spin talked about all
One should never listen or contribute to groundless talk;
for idle words can damage and cause the guiltless to fall
I then realized that in my wise talk, I too, should walk
This is my favorite verse. She finally realized she needs to take her advice.
Much love,
Justmade.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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justmade, thank you so much. yes I could never point a finger if I am just as guilty. lol...again thank you ..jlsavell
Comment from Brandenpaul
I loved reading this poetic story. It was fun, but oh so true. The message about gossiping came across very clear. I enjoyed the authors notes as well.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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I loved reading this poetic story. It was fun, but oh so true. The message about gossiping came across very clear. I enjoyed the authors notes as well.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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jboudeau, thank you for stopping by and reading my work. I am glad you enjoyed this little poem..jlsavell
Comment from Arkine
This was certainly an interesting poem. In our county there are five towns that run down the highway. It's common knowledge that if you get sick in town 4, by the time the news hits town 1 you are apparently dying in the hospital. I guess most people have nothing better to do around here. ~L~ Great poem!
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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This was certainly an interesting poem. In our county there are five towns that run down the highway. It's common knowledge that if you get sick in town 4, by the time the news hits town 1 you are apparently dying in the hospital. I guess most people have nothing better to do around here. ~L~ Great poem!
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Arkine, thank you so very much. I appreciate your stopping by and your excellent review and great comments..jlsavell
Comment from LOA7
Great work! Something that is fun and enlightening as well. It is a challenge sometimes not to gossip, especially when it is about a loved one. I have to remind myself that what is going on in someone's life is that person's business, and the best thing I can do is go on with my own.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Great work! Something that is fun and enlightening as well. It is a challenge sometimes not to gossip, especially when it is about a loved one. I have to remind myself that what is going on in someone's life is that person's business, and the best thing I can do is go on with my own.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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LOA7, Goodness I am just so taken aback by such wonderful reviews. thank you so very very much. jlsavell
Comment from sherrygreywolf
I'm sure we've all known people like this - maybe we even are one - or maybe we "change the names" and just write it all down LOL.
Great work - sherry
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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I'm sure we've all known people like this - maybe we even are one - or maybe we "change the names" and just write it all down LOL.
Great work - sherry
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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sherrygreywolf, than you so much. Love your comments girl.you are appreciated very much..jlsavell
Comment from Gramma Kathy
What a fun poem, but with an important message. I loved your story and the way you told it.
I had some trouble with the rhythm here and there, but the fun names and intrigue rode me through it.
Well done!
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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What a fun poem, but with an important message. I loved your story and the way you told it.
I had some trouble with the rhythm here and there, but the fun names and intrigue rode me through it.
Well done!
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Gramma Kathy, thank you so much for stopping by. Your comments and review are most welcomed. Again thank you..warmest regards..jlsavell
Comment from FredCollingwood
This is one of the most entertaining poems I've read for a long time. I really enjoy a traditional poem with steady rhyme and a balanced meter. Coupled with the clever characters, whose names are metaphors for their actions... very creative. I loved it.
Fred
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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This is one of the most entertaining poems I've read for a long time. I really enjoy a traditional poem with steady rhyme and a balanced meter. Coupled with the clever characters, whose names are metaphors for their actions... very creative. I loved it.
Fred
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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FredCollingwood, sir! Goodness I do not know what to say. You are too kind. I cannot express enough how I appreciate yuor time, your reviews and your support of my work..again thank you so very very much..jlsavell
Comment from Carol D Parker
This is a riot. I loved all the kooky names. But though it was funny it teaches a good lessomn. I like that. I was surprised to read that these are real people with their names changed, but I should know better. I used to entertain a ms Tell-a-real-spin everyday. "Gossip research is conducted in a blabatory." Wow! Wish I'd said that.
Delora
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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This is a riot. I loved all the kooky names. But though it was funny it teaches a good lessomn. I like that. I was surprised to read that these are real people with their names changed, but I should know better. I used to entertain a ms Tell-a-real-spin everyday. "Gossip research is conducted in a blabatory." Wow! Wish I'd said that.
Delora
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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deloralock, hello nice to meet you. I am so very glad you enjoyed this poem. I can be funny soemtimes, but not often..thank you so much for stopping by aand for such a wonderful review. jlsavell