Short Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Follow The Winding Road"A book of a mixture of stories
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Comment from Margaret Snowdon
What a melancholy, yet delightful
story, Carol - you are such a natural
with your story-telling - you pull the
reader in right away and keep hold of
their interest throughout.
I stretched lazily, and then like so many mornings,
I stretched lazily and then, like so many mornings, anniversaries, and, oh yeah
anniversaries and, oh yeah
(")Please, Katie
I pushed my body up(.)
Just lovely.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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What a melancholy, yet delightful
story, Carol - you are such a natural
with your story-telling - you pull the
reader in right away and keep hold of
their interest throughout.
I stretched lazily, and then like so many mornings,
I stretched lazily and then, like so many mornings, anniversaries, and, oh yeah
anniversaries and, oh yeah
(")Please, Katie
I pushed my body up(.)
Just lovely.
Margaret.
Comment Written 15-May-2010
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Margaret,
Thanks again for enjoying my story and for ctching my errors that these weary eyes so easily miss. Appreciate you stopping by. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Trybuck
A very well written story of hope, survival, strength and courage. I couldn't imagine having to deal with three children all alone so-to-speak. Grandparents can be a big help but they can only do so much.
Well done, Buck
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A very well written story of hope, survival, strength and courage. I couldn't imagine having to deal with three children all alone so-to-speak. Grandparents can be a big help but they can only do so much.
Well done, Buck
Comment Written 14-May-2010
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Buck,
Awesome...I am thrilled that you connected with this story. Thank you so much for your support and gracious words as well as the sprinkling of stars. Smiles, Carol
Comment from mtngalofnc
Hi Begin Again,
What a great story. Your story has a good flow and is easily read and understood and the ending with a twist of humor is a joy to read. I saw no spag. Best wishes with the contest and thank you for sharing.
Becky
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Hi Begin Again,
What a great story. Your story has a good flow and is easily read and understood and the ending with a twist of humor is a joy to read. I saw no spag. Best wishes with the contest and thank you for sharing.
Becky
Comment Written 14-May-2010
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Becky,
Thank you for the continued support and all your kindness. I truly appreciate it. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sasha
This is a marvelous beginning to what could be a terrific book. I enjoyed your delightful descriptions of the joy of being pregnant. You conveyed the sadness of her tragic loss very well. This is a great entry for the contest and I sincerely wish you all the best.
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This is a marvelous beginning to what could be a terrific book. I enjoyed your delightful descriptions of the joy of being pregnant. You conveyed the sadness of her tragic loss very well. This is a great entry for the contest and I sincerely wish you all the best.
Comment Written 13-May-2010
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Sasha,
Thank you so much as always...This was a fun one to write as well. Smiles, Carol
Comment from RobinWrites
This is simple marvelous. I felt like I was walking in her shoes, even having them on the wrong feet. Out of bad times can comes good ones, but how do we find those good ones. I think her children, and father, with help her. Great job.
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This is simple marvelous. I felt like I was walking in her shoes, even having them on the wrong feet. Out of bad times can comes good ones, but how do we find those good ones. I think her children, and father, with help her. Great job.
Comment Written 13-May-2010
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Robin,
Thanks for reading and enjoying. Your comments put a smile on my face. Thank you, Carol
Comment from Judian James
Oh, this one tugged at the heartstrings, Carol. As always, beautifully portrayed throughout. "anniversaries, and, oh yeah, the night I told you I didn't really have the flu. We celebrated with grape juice and crackers. We hoped I was carrying a son" I don't think the "oh yeah" as if an afterthought for her telling her beloved James she was pregnant, was believable. I think I might consider dropping the "yeah". just a thought excellent
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Oh, this one tugged at the heartstrings, Carol. As always, beautifully portrayed throughout. "anniversaries, and, oh yeah, the night I told you I didn't really have the flu. We celebrated with grape juice and crackers. We hoped I was carrying a son" I don't think the "oh yeah" as if an afterthought for her telling her beloved James she was pregnant, was believable. I think I might consider dropping the "yeah". just a thought excellent
Comment Written 13-May-2010
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Jude,
You are so right...I wrote what was coming from my head...as if I was talking...feeble brain, I guess. Thanks for reading...Carol
Comment from BethShelby
This is great story which I've read before so my review won't count but I glad you revived it.
This story reminded me of my grandmother who was left in just that situation. She had a little girl and her husband was killed just after she found out she was pregnant again. She was forced to move back near her parents as well. You've captured emotions that I'm sure are true to life. I enjoyed reading his.
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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This is great story which I've read before so my review won't count but I glad you revived it.
This story reminded me of my grandmother who was left in just that situation. She had a little girl and her husband was killed just after she found out she was pregnant again. She was forced to move back near her parents as well. You've captured emotions that I'm sure are true to life. I enjoyed reading his.
Comment Written 13-May-2010
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Beth,
Thank you for sharing and for connecting to my story. I appreciate it very much. Carol
Comment from eliz100
This was a great read. You described the pregnancy so well it brought up memories. The shoes on the wrong feet was a nice twist. With a big belly you cannot see your feet so it is very believable.
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This was a great read. You described the pregnancy so well it brought up memories. The shoes on the wrong feet was a nice twist. With a big belly you cannot see your feet so it is very believable.
Comment Written 13-May-2010
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Eliz,
Thank you for the continued support and all your kindness. I truly appreciate it. Smiles, Carol
Comment from hotstuff
This is a lovely story. Very sad of course, but also very sweet. It very cleverly emphasized the innocence of children and the way a simple message can affect our perceptions.
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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This is a lovely story. Very sad of course, but also very sweet. It very cleverly emphasized the innocence of children and the way a simple message can affect our perceptions.
Comment Written 13-May-2010
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Hotstuff,
thanks for connecting with my characters and for enjoying the story. Smiles, Carol
Comment from patwannabe
Hi Carol,
You certainly have a way with words. I was glued to your story. Your word pictures astound me with their clarity and direction. It's a delight to read your work as I never find mistakes and the flow is always right on. I've only run across one story that wasn't quite up to par and didn't comment on it, but I don't remember what it was.
Well done. pat
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Hi Carol,
You certainly have a way with words. I was glued to your story. Your word pictures astound me with their clarity and direction. It's a delight to read your work as I never find mistakes and the flow is always right on. I've only run across one story that wasn't quite up to par and didn't comment on it, but I don't remember what it was.
Well done. pat
Comment Written 12-May-2010
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Pat,
Awesome...I do my best to put my heart and soul into my writing, knowing that not everyone will connect or enjoy everything I do...Knowing that you have enjoyed so many touches me deeply. Thank you...Carol
