Poems By AnnieDawn
Viewing comments for Chapter 89 "The Promised Kiss"My book of poems and stories
33 total reviews
Comment from barkingdog
Your rhyming quatrains have a nice even tempo.
I felt sorry for the girl, but maybe it was for the best. If he was only teasing, she shouldn't kiss him anyway. He'd hurt her even more since she has such a crush on him already.
Nice 'l' consonance in your final quatrain add to it's melody.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Your rhyming quatrains have a nice even tempo.
I felt sorry for the girl, but maybe it was for the best. If he was only teasing, she shouldn't kiss him anyway. He'd hurt her even more since she has such a crush on him already.
Nice 'l' consonance in your final quatrain add to it's melody.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Thank you so very much for your much appreciated review and comments.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Promises, promises, throughout our lives, that bring sadness and longing for a reason to smile. Yet, hope keeps us waiting, and hopefully our wishes will finally come. Thanks for the nice read.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Promises, promises, throughout our lives, that bring sadness and longing for a reason to smile. Yet, hope keeps us waiting, and hopefully our wishes will finally come. Thanks for the nice read.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Thank you so very much for your much appreciated review and comments.
Comment from Smoothiecool
a sweet fresh love poem of teenage passion and how unfulfilled words can cause anxiety waiting
your three stanzas and your rhyme work with the images you have taken the reader through
the last stanza has a bit of a jar on the last line
maybe put "never to" instead of "to never"
Cheers SC
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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a sweet fresh love poem of teenage passion and how unfulfilled words can cause anxiety waiting
your three stanzas and your rhyme work with the images you have taken the reader through
the last stanza has a bit of a jar on the last line
maybe put "never to" instead of "to never"
Cheers SC
Comment Written 12-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Thank you very much for your review and comments. I appreciate them and I will review your suggestion. It is so nice to have feed back and suggestions. Thanks again.
Comment from dmt1967
This is such a sad wistful poem I like the black and white photograph very retro I hope you do well in this contest and thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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This is such a sad wistful poem I like the black and white photograph very retro I hope you do well in this contest and thank you for sharing
Comment Written 12-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Thank you very much for your review and comments. I appreciate them.
Comment from phoenix13447
Oh dear, the cad. We are all waiting with you and if he does finally come around we'll give him a piece of our mind! LOL Great pictorial....my heart goes out to the author. Wishing you all the best for the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Oh dear, the cad. We are all waiting with you and if he does finally come around we'll give him a piece of our mind! LOL Great pictorial....my heart goes out to the author. Wishing you all the best for the contest.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Thank you very much for your review and comments.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This seems like it would appeal to young female readers. I see you listed it under Romance poetry. Maybe we need another category like Romance poetry for young readers. I think the poem would benefit from punctuation, but it definitely has a universal feel to it.
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This seems like it would appeal to young female readers. I see you listed it under Romance poetry. Maybe we need another category like Romance poetry for young readers. I think the poem would benefit from punctuation, but it definitely has a universal feel to it.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2013
Comment from allborn66
This is a lovely poem. It speaks well to young love, and more. The word choice is strong. The rhyming scheme enhances the piece.
Barbara
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This is a lovely poem. It speaks well to young love, and more. The word choice is strong. The rhyming scheme enhances the piece.
Barbara
Comment Written 09-Nov-2013
Comment from Gungalo
Such a bitter disappointment girl. I would have me going crazy too. So many don't realize what teasing like this can do. Sigh, they have to learn not to put much stock in these kinds of promises.
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Such a bitter disappointment girl. I would have me going crazy too. So many don't realize what teasing like this can do. Sigh, they have to learn not to put much stock in these kinds of promises.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2013
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Cute, cute, cute, and so true form.
Little boys don't understand and don't grow up enough to know how they hurt till they are 98 and one foot in the grave. Good job
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Cute, cute, cute, and so true form.
Little boys don't understand and don't grow up enough to know how they hurt till they are 98 and one foot in the grave. Good job
Comment Written 09-Nov-2013
Comment from Frankeddy
Very nice poetic verse, you have the gift of rhyming.
Lovely descriptive picture presented in clear and bright setting.
The suspense of waiting and longing projects from the caption.
Well done. Good luck. Frankeddy
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Very nice poetic verse, you have the gift of rhyming.
Lovely descriptive picture presented in clear and bright setting.
The suspense of waiting and longing projects from the caption.
Well done. Good luck. Frankeddy
Comment Written 09-Nov-2013