Along the Jericho Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 49 "Sunkothai Moon, Part One"Murder Mystery
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Comment from Princesseunice
This is really good.
No grammatical errors or punctuation mistakes.
Good narrative and easy conversation between characters.
Kudos!
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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This is really good.
No grammatical errors or punctuation mistakes.
Good narrative and easy conversation between characters.
Kudos!
Comment Written 21-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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Thank you so much for taking time out to read my chapter, P. I appreciate both your effort and generosity. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from JW
This is a well written chapter and it does a good job at progressing the storyline.
One cannot help but wonder about what is about to happen.
One thing for sure is, getting enough with an ex is never a good thing.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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This is a well written chapter and it does a good job at progressing the storyline.
One cannot help but wonder about what is about to happen.
One thing for sure is, getting enough with an ex is never a good thing.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
Comment Written 21-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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Hi, Jonathon. Thank you, my friend, for your generosity and continued support. Means a lot to me. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from Dsteiner
Great use of descriptive words put me right in the story. The way you are setting this up leaves me waiting for my next installment to read. Wonderful work!
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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Great use of descriptive words put me right in the story. The way you are setting this up leaves me waiting for my next installment to read. Wonderful work!
Comment Written 21-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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Thank you so much, D. I really appreciate this awesome review! Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from chasennov
Along The Jericho Road. 'Sunkhotai Moon, Part One.' I have not reviewed any of your work for a while, but this chapter is as good as all the others. Well done. I have not quite returned to FS yet. Kind regards.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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Along The Jericho Road. 'Sunkhotai Moon, Part One.' I have not reviewed any of your work for a while, but this chapter is as good as all the others. Well done. I have not quite returned to FS yet. Kind regards.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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Hello, my friend. Good to hear from you. I hope you are coming along well -- although maybe not as fast as you might like. Thanks so much for taking time to review my chapter. Warmest regards, Bev
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Hi Bev. You are most welcome. It is taking a bit of time, but we'll get there. How are you keeping?
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I doing well, my friend. Hope you have a lovely Thanksgiving if that is something you celebrate. :0) Bev
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Sorry for the late reply Bev, it is not an occasion we celebrate, but I would not mind it.
Comment from AprilShower
I've been wondering who was at Father Brian's door. Was it the killer? Somehow the Detective Jana and the FBI profiler will in some way connect to what Father Brian experienced in the last writing. Will this show up in the next writing. I wanted to connect this with your last writing but couldn't. Will the connection show up in the next part?
When you put Part 1, Part 2, and Part 3, does that mean these are parts of one chapter?
What you have written here is setting us up for what ahead. Right?
Hugs,
April
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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I've been wondering who was at Father Brian's door. Was it the killer? Somehow the Detective Jana and the FBI profiler will in some way connect to what Father Brian experienced in the last writing. Will this show up in the next writing. I wanted to connect this with your last writing but couldn't. Will the connection show up in the next part?
When you put Part 1, Part 2, and Part 3, does that mean these are parts of one chapter?
What you have written here is setting us up for what ahead. Right?
Hugs,
April
Comment Written 21-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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This is part one of two parts for this chapter, April. And, yes I'm setting this up for who is at Father Brian's door. Which will be in another upcoming chapter.
Thanks so much for taking time to read and review. I really appreciate the support, my friend.
Hugs, Bev
Comment from MM lives on :)
I so wish I had a six star for you Bev.. I truly enjoy your talent you share with us. Thank you so very much for the previous and background I am truly going to have to catch up on these chapters.. Thank you for sharing always a pleasure
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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I so wish I had a six star for you Bev.. I truly enjoy your talent you share with us. Thank you so very much for the previous and background I am truly going to have to catch up on these chapters.. Thank you for sharing always a pleasure
Comment Written 21-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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Christopher, your support and encouragement mean so much to me. I appreciate the wish for a six and am honored by that. Thanks so much for taking time to read the chapter, my friend. :0) Bev
Comment from elchupakabra
I feel like this is the first part of this novel I'm reading, but it was rather easy to jump in thanks to the time you took in laying out your background and authors notes. I enjoyed the write, I thought your narrative was solid and your dialogue and characters feel believable. Great work on this chapter, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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I feel like this is the first part of this novel I'm reading, but it was rather easy to jump in thanks to the time you took in laying out your background and authors notes. I enjoyed the write, I thought your narrative was solid and your dialogue and characters feel believable. Great work on this chapter, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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Thanks so very much, E. I really appreciate you taking time to stop in and read my chapter. Your insights and support are very much appreciated. :0) Bev
Comment from Lynette Marie
This is well written and engaging. My interest was snagged immediately.
"A ripple of anxiety built to a roar the closer she got to the restaurant and the man waiting there for her." I could actually feel her tension rising.
"Like a physician aware of the little nasties circulating with impunity through the fluids of the human body, Jana was intimate with Dresden Stredwick's chezi okhizata (insincere) nature." I love the originality of this line! It is so effective in portraying Jana's view of Dresden.
Your words are descriptive; you definitely know how to set a scene. Well done!
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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This is well written and engaging. My interest was snagged immediately.
"A ripple of anxiety built to a roar the closer she got to the restaurant and the man waiting there for her." I could actually feel her tension rising.
"Like a physician aware of the little nasties circulating with impunity through the fluids of the human body, Jana was intimate with Dresden Stredwick's chezi okhizata (insincere) nature." I love the originality of this line! It is so effective in portraying Jana's view of Dresden.
Your words are descriptive; you definitely know how to set a scene. Well done!
Comment Written 21-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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Hi, Lynette. Thank you for noting those sections of the chapter in this very encouraging review. The latter was kind of my favorite, so I'm thrilled you liked it too. I really appreciate you taking time to stop in and read. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from lindalcreel
Excellent writing. I could feel the antipathy in Jana towards her previous boyfriend who really ran her over the coals. The question is, will she concentrate on the case and leave the good-looking profiler in the dust? The barkeep seems like a good guy. Maybe there will be love in her life after all. Great chapter. Thanks so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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Excellent writing. I could feel the antipathy in Jana towards her previous boyfriend who really ran her over the coals. The question is, will she concentrate on the case and leave the good-looking profiler in the dust? The barkeep seems like a good guy. Maybe there will be love in her life after all. Great chapter. Thanks so much for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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Thank you so very much, lindal. I really appreciate your taking time out to read my chapter. Your insights and encouragement are very helpful, and your generosity heart-warming. :0) Bev
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So welcome, and so deserved.
Comment from misscookie
As always I enjoyed this chapter. There was never a dull moment. I love how your story flows. I don't l
know how they can keep a straight head and mind on business when those feeling are still there I wonder how long before it breaks.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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As always I enjoyed this chapter. There was never a dull moment. I love how your story flows. I don't l
know how they can keep a straight head and mind on business when those feeling are still there I wonder how long before it breaks.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
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Hi, misscookie. Such gracious and generous reviews as yours is why I keep on chipping away at this novel. Thank you for staying with me and being so supportive. Warmest regards, Bev
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You're very welcome,
Have a bless Thanksgiving.
until next time
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You, as well, MissCookie. Love to you, Bev
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have a blessed day.
Until next time.