Along the Jericho Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 65 "Sota Moon, Part 1"Murder Mystery
44 total reviews
Comment from Righteous Riter
The tone and the atmosphere is set by the opening lines. Good description of the scenery. Good transition between the events. Clear dialogue that express the emotions of the characters. Nice steady and intense pace leading to a conclusion that leaves me wanting to read more.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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The tone and the atmosphere is set by the opening lines. Good description of the scenery. Good transition between the events. Clear dialogue that express the emotions of the characters. Nice steady and intense pace leading to a conclusion that leaves me wanting to read more.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, RR. I really appreciate this kind and generous review. :) Bev
Comment from Connie C
You have such a knack, Bev, for building up the suspense and having your reader want more. As always, your excellent use of description and dialogue really helps to keep the reader engaged. I wish that, for once, I could offer some good constructive criticism, but what's to criticize? Nothing! Keep up the good work, my friend.
Hugs,
Connie
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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You have such a knack, Bev, for building up the suspense and having your reader want more. As always, your excellent use of description and dialogue really helps to keep the reader engaged. I wish that, for once, I could offer some good constructive criticism, but what's to criticize? Nothing! Keep up the good work, my friend.
Hugs,
Connie
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Connie, you have put a big smile on my face! Thank you, my friend, for your gracious and so-generous review. Your support and encouragement mean so much!
Hugs, Bev
Comment from Dawn Munro
Well, you've done it again, Bev - I honestly don't know how this could be any better. You've a cliff hanger ending to this chapter again, and it's full of rich description, authentic-sounding dialogue, lots of action and suspense and it moves along at a breath-taking pace - riveting.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Well, you've done it again, Bev - I honestly don't know how this could be any better. You've a cliff hanger ending to this chapter again, and it's full of rich description, authentic-sounding dialogue, lots of action and suspense and it moves along at a breath-taking pace - riveting.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Aw, thanks so much, Dawn. I am so honored by your lovely words of encouragement. Coming from a writer I admire, it's especially nice! Hugs, Bev
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You're welcome.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a most exceptional reading experience. It was completely engaging and moved along at a perfect pace in terms of action and dialog. You add some really wonderful touches in your writing like the dimensions of the hole being '666'. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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This is a most exceptional reading experience. It was completely engaging and moved along at a perfect pace in terms of action and dialog. You add some really wonderful touches in your writing like the dimensions of the hole being '666'. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Mystic Angel, for taking time to read my chapter. I sure appreciate your encouragement and support. And your special insights have made my day! Blessings, Bev
Comment from Max Edon
It has been a while since I had read from this book, but I enjoyed reading this chapter. It was very fast-paced and exciting.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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It has been a while since I had read from this book, but I enjoyed reading this chapter. It was very fast-paced and exciting.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, Max. I appreciate your stopping by and the great review. Warm regards, Bev
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You are welcome
Comment from boxergirl
Another gripping episode that keeps us reading intently to see what will happen next. Edward Pearce has been killed and now Jana much try to find the missing girl and Rick, her partner.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Another gripping episode that keeps us reading intently to see what will happen next. Edward Pearce has been killed and now Jana much try to find the missing girl and Rick, her partner.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, BD. I sure appreciate your support and encouragement! :) Bev
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Bev. As usual, this is such good writing. I have missed your good stuff, believe me.
"Edward Pearce grunted with every blow of his shovel blade (Excellent opening hook, Bev. Atta girl!
Your imagery and dialogue throughout are sparkling. I think you are ready, my friend. (If my opinion means anything) LOL
One suggestion:
"out of the half-dug hole." For some reason, this sounds a bit awkward...perhaps extra words would help here..like "out of the hole he'd been digging" or something like that. Know what I mean?
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Hi, Bev. As usual, this is such good writing. I have missed your good stuff, believe me.
"Edward Pearce grunted with every blow of his shovel blade (Excellent opening hook, Bev. Atta girl!
Your imagery and dialogue throughout are sparkling. I think you are ready, my friend. (If my opinion means anything) LOL
One suggestion:
"out of the half-dug hole." For some reason, this sounds a bit awkward...perhaps extra words would help here..like "out of the hole he'd been digging" or something like that. Know what I mean?
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, Bob. What a gracious and encouraging review. Your suggestion is a very good one, and I am off to make the changes. I've got the summer planned to work with Rama Devi to edit. The early chapters are rough, and as you know well, that's important when seeking publication.
Again, thanks so much, my friend.
Hugs, Bev
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I think you are going in the right direction for sure, Bev. I asked Rama to help me, by looking over a couple of chapters and my query letter. Little did I know she charges for such things. I wasn't aware it was a business with her. Please do not tell her I told you or vice versa that we discussed. Blessings. Bob
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Hi, Bob. I won't mention a thing about it. She does do it for a business, but I think she's very reasonable compared to those I've seen from other sources. Still, with a long novel like mine, I'm planning on it costing me several thousand dollars. That's not chump change! The good part is that she's got good insights and instincts. Brooke (adewpearl) also does editing. Charlie Lucas likes working with her. Just food for thought. I'm sure you are well in control of your situation. :)
XXO Bev
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Bev.
What an amazing chapter. I could feel the tension as Ty confronted Edward Pearce. Your imagery of the vision Edward saw of Billy is excellent. You tied up the reasons behind his murderous revenge and his hopes squashed in minutes.
Again you left me breathless waiting to read what comes next. What an exciting read!!!! Awesome chapter, my friend!
Bye
Hugs
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Hi, Bev.
What an amazing chapter. I could feel the tension as Ty confronted Edward Pearce. Your imagery of the vision Edward saw of Billy is excellent. You tied up the reasons behind his murderous revenge and his hopes squashed in minutes.
Again you left me breathless waiting to read what comes next. What an exciting read!!!! Awesome chapter, my friend!
Bye
Hugs
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Dear Rosalyne, thank you so much for this awesome review! Your support, generosity and encouragement mean so much, my friend.
Love and hugs,
Bev
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Bev,
Wowee, as fast as they catch up with one element of this trail of murder, the being behind it slips away again into the night. Pearce is dead, but the creature behind will, methinks, need a bit more than a sprinkle of Holy Water and some prayers to shift it.
Patrick
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Hi Bev,
Wowee, as fast as they catch up with one element of this trail of murder, the being behind it slips away again into the night. Pearce is dead, but the creature behind will, methinks, need a bit more than a sprinkle of Holy Water and some prayers to shift it.
Patrick
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Hi, Patrick
Thanks for, as usual, getting to the heart of the spiritual aspects of this novel. That means a lot to me as does your encouragement and generosity. Much appreciated!
Bev
Comment from chasennov
Along the Jericho Road 'Sota Moon, Part .1' This is another wonderful chapter you have created here. I try to find something I can correct, but am unable to fault your work. Well done.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Along the Jericho Road 'Sota Moon, Part .1' This is another wonderful chapter you have created here. I try to find something I can correct, but am unable to fault your work. Well done.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Hello, C. Thank you for taking time to read and review this latest. Your support and encouragement mean a lot to me. I can't thank you enough! :) Bev
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You are always welcome, Bev.
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So gracious! :)
