Comment from Genya

Exceptional

Brilliant from start to finish. What a fantastic story about an assassin told in so few words. Well scripted story set perfectly. The characters were so true to life. Every word in this piece was needed and used well. Straight to the point. Good luck in the contest. Genya

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2014

Comment from Pyrrho

Excellent

A fun read with excellent narrative and dialog and the ending telegraphed from way up front, but that is fine. I just wondered how she would do it.

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2014

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

nice twist in the end! i can imagine a daughter who would kill for he sake of their parents and get bittersweet revenge. i'm totally on the girl's side:)
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!

rebekka x

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2014

Comment from DerivedBetter

Excellent

I liked this. Very strong story and nice character development in such a small space. You've got a very good chance with this one. Thanks for sharing and keep on writing.

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 Comment Written 26-Aug-2014