Love Your Suit
42331 total reviews
Comment from gypsycaravan
Oh man, I'm with the sheep who loves his delicious family. I'm all about following your guts, not the herd. He may not win, but always writes the story he's proud of. Can't please those literary wolves most of the time. LOL
Definitely a "six-pack" rating for both the content, creativity, format and all-around enjoyment for the reader. Great job.
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Oh man, I'm with the sheep who loves his delicious family. I'm all about following your guts, not the herd. He may not win, but always writes the story he's proud of. Can't please those literary wolves most of the time. LOL
Definitely a "six-pack" rating for both the content, creativity, format and all-around enjoyment for the reader. Great job.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
This prose and poetry looks sensational. I see your word count, 423, you followed the mandatory guidelines. You followed the rules as always. No SPAG. tHIS IS CHARMING. So you are a sheep, Mikey. Don't ever let anyone pull the wool over you. I bet Dean is a wolf or Jackal, LOL! I would probably be a Jackass -- if I would had entered this? i love the poems. I know it's reduced to generic form, black & white. Watch out for farmer Bob? There may be a pedophile hiding behind a bush? This was really cute. Bahh -- bahh --
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This prose and poetry looks sensational. I see your word count, 423, you followed the mandatory guidelines. You followed the rules as always. No SPAG. tHIS IS CHARMING. So you are a sheep, Mikey. Don't ever let anyone pull the wool over you. I bet Dean is a wolf or Jackal, LOL! I would probably be a Jackass -- if I would had entered this? i love the poems. I know it's reduced to generic form, black & white. Watch out for farmer Bob? There may be a pedophile hiding behind a bush? This was really cute. Bahh -- bahh --
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
Comment from barkingdog
We are sort of like sheep. When we don't stay in line, the reviewer is ready to sink his teeth in. Ouch.
Some though do rebel. The few black sheep keep the site interesting.
Good entry. Great dialogue. Fine character depiction. Very visual.
Best of luck in the contest.
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We are sort of like sheep. When we don't stay in line, the reviewer is ready to sink his teeth in. Ouch.
Some though do rebel. The few black sheep keep the site interesting.
Good entry. Great dialogue. Fine character depiction. Very visual.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Mikey
OMG!!! He's done it AGAIN!! Brilliant as usual, funny ... hysterical in a bleating non-sensical-but-makes-sense way. I always fall for a great satire ..... out-spoken for sure ... is that a 'wolf in sheeps clothing' I spot, or just you wearing a beautiful hand-cut Merino pure wool suit??? (Aussie wool of course ... it's the best).
" ... if I made a stew then their nearby presence would be, aarrrooooo, propitious." ... Hahaha!
"... captured in twinkling lights
that arrive with the silver orb that bids our eyes to close
through squinted lids, I see single lights escape
I know that these are dreams come true
one day, if I am clever enough, I will capture one ..." ..... brilliant.
"The reviewer bites her on the head again, killing her." ...... thank Heavens I haven't had much experience with one of these.
A poet-bites-back-ending. Watch out for the wolves. Mikey's own personal style of rant, extremely well executed. hahahahahugs - Lovi xoxo
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Hi Mikey
OMG!!! He's done it AGAIN!! Brilliant as usual, funny ... hysterical in a bleating non-sensical-but-makes-sense way. I always fall for a great satire ..... out-spoken for sure ... is that a 'wolf in sheeps clothing' I spot, or just you wearing a beautiful hand-cut Merino pure wool suit??? (Aussie wool of course ... it's the best).
" ... if I made a stew then their nearby presence would be, aarrrooooo, propitious." ... Hahaha!
"... captured in twinkling lights
that arrive with the silver orb that bids our eyes to close
through squinted lids, I see single lights escape
I know that these are dreams come true
one day, if I am clever enough, I will capture one ..." ..... brilliant.
"The reviewer bites her on the head again, killing her." ...... thank Heavens I haven't had much experience with one of these.
A poet-bites-back-ending. Watch out for the wolves. Mikey's own personal style of rant, extremely well executed. hahahahahugs - Lovi xoxo
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
Comment from mikemagine
Funny stuff! I don't think I've ever preferred eating my family as opposed to loving them, but maybe there've been times I might not have cared if someone else ate them? :) Sick, I know.
I've written a lot of funny poetry. Funny because it's so baaahhhd!
peace,
Mike
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Funny stuff! I don't think I've ever preferred eating my family as opposed to loving them, but maybe there've been times I might not have cared if someone else ate them? :) Sick, I know.
I've written a lot of funny poetry. Funny because it's so baaahhhd!
peace,
Mike
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
Comment from Twilightspire
Heh heh. Ouch. You make reviewers out to be rather vicious. No way they could be from this site. :D
I like the poems-in-the-story angle, it's a lot of fun to see both prose and poetry ... like ebony and ivory.
Ick.
Don't know where that came from, but hopefully it made sense.
Overall, I loved the humor you injected into the story and the theme. Very clever, my friend.
Good luck in the contest.
-T.J.
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Heh heh. Ouch. You make reviewers out to be rather vicious. No way they could be from this site. :D
I like the poems-in-the-story angle, it's a lot of fun to see both prose and poetry ... like ebony and ivory.
Ick.
Don't know where that came from, but hopefully it made sense.
Overall, I loved the humor you injected into the story and the theme. Very clever, my friend.
Good luck in the contest.
-T.J.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
Comment from Sankey
haha what a weird one this is mate. Send you a photo in a moment forget where I got it but would go with your story here for sure. Funny mate!
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haha what a weird one this is mate. Send you a photo in a moment forget where I got it but would go with your story here for sure. Funny mate!
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
Comment from rama devi
Hey Mikey!
Hilarious satire, my friend. Made me giggle. Very unique and original. The sheep metaphor is deftly explored.
This is clever:
"It's a metaphorical personification. I'm replacing boiling flesh for the warm glow I get seeing my family. See, it's about love. Love of my delicious family."
LOL-
The constant smiling and drooling are bad enough.
Great closing line for an effective message.
Good pacing and dialog. Reads fast and easy.
Good luck in the contest.
Love,
rd
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Hey Mikey!
Hilarious satire, my friend. Made me giggle. Very unique and original. The sheep metaphor is deftly explored.
This is clever:
"It's a metaphorical personification. I'm replacing boiling flesh for the warm glow I get seeing my family. See, it's about love. Love of my delicious family."
LOL-
The constant smiling and drooling are bad enough.
Great closing line for an effective message.
Good pacing and dialog. Reads fast and easy.
Good luck in the contest.
Love,
rd
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
Comment from Pyrrho
So far this prompt has triggered less than first-class responses. Yours is in the top fifty percent but if things do not improve it is the first competition that should have no winner.
Sorry for the downer review but it is the prompt that is tough to overcome.
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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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So far this prompt has triggered less than first-class responses. Yours is in the top fifty percent but if things do not improve it is the first competition that should have no winner.
Sorry for the downer review but it is the prompt that is tough to overcome.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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The funny thing is, I entered without reading the premise closely. I actually wrote an entirely different piece. Then I read the rules about two animals entering a prompt and having a reviewer involved. Hahaha. Still, I think this is a pretty good metaphor for Fanstory without being too obvious. You are correct though, it was tough!! mikey
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, you have creatively fulfilled the requirements of this FANSTORIAN ANIMALS writing prompt entry. It is completely original with some sarcasm to enjoy. Creatively done. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, you have creatively fulfilled the requirements of this FANSTORIAN ANIMALS writing prompt entry. It is completely original with some sarcasm to enjoy. Creatively done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014