Haiku (golden eagle soars)
Haiku Contest67 total reviews
Comment from Ginger Banks
An excellent Haiku, with each one I read I learn more about them. This in particular is the third in its kind which appears to have a perfect picture to go with it. The words flow wonderfully without being awkward, and embodies the majestic eagle without the need for more words (as in a different kind of poem). Beautiful choice in picture and with words.
Thank you so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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An excellent Haiku, with each one I read I learn more about them. This in particular is the third in its kind which appears to have a perfect picture to go with it. The words flow wonderfully without being awkward, and embodies the majestic eagle without the need for more words (as in a different kind of poem). Beautiful choice in picture and with words.
Thank you so much for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much for this great review. I'm glad you liked it. All the best.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Liberty Justice
Five 5 stars. Eagle wants to attack lamb. It is so powerful eagle is predator. Seems animal in air has more advantage. View mine also. liberty justice
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Five 5 stars. Eagle wants to attack lamb. It is so powerful eagle is predator. Seems animal in air has more advantage. View mine also. liberty justice
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much. Much appreciated. All the best.
Comment from emjaihammond
This is a strong presentation, with a message one simply cannot miss. Loved the combination of this work with its art partner. Beautifully done.
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This is a strong presentation, with a message one simply cannot miss. Loved the combination of this work with its art partner. Beautifully done.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much for this great review. I'm glad you liked it. All the best.
Comment from mfowler
According to Ray's definition, this is a worthy entry into the haiku contest. Our definition of haikus on FS is well short of the traditional, beautiful Japanese form, but still works on a poetic level if you don't fuss too much. But, that has nothing to do with this. Your lovely poem captures the moment in nature that the prompt calls for. It is powerful in theme and in its rendering.The action of the eagle's reconnaissance is well chosen to set up the satori line. Yes, the lamb is in real danger. The lines have interlocking meaning and the imagery is strong in the mind of the reader. All the best in your voting.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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According to Ray's definition, this is a worthy entry into the haiku contest. Our definition of haikus on FS is well short of the traditional, beautiful Japanese form, but still works on a poetic level if you don't fuss too much. But, that has nothing to do with this. Your lovely poem captures the moment in nature that the prompt calls for. It is powerful in theme and in its rendering.The action of the eagle's reconnaissance is well chosen to set up the satori line. Yes, the lamb is in real danger. The lines have interlocking meaning and the imagery is strong in the mind of the reader. All the best in your voting.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Thanks a lot for this great review. I'm so pleased that you liked it. All the best.
Comment from Selina Stambi
I'm fascinated by eagles. This short piece has captured the essence of the majestic bird and what he's all about.
Lamb in trouble ... indeed! Love the last line.
Best wishes for the contest.
Sonali
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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I'm fascinated by eagles. This short piece has captured the essence of the majestic bird and what he's all about.
Lamb in trouble ... indeed! Love the last line.
Best wishes for the contest.
Sonali
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Sonali, Thank you so much for this great review and good wish. I'm pleased that you liked it. All the best.
Comment from Val Crisson
This is a wonderful haiku! I almost gave it a six, but I struggled with "sweeping" As I have the same problem, but had to think there could be a better word in the present tense. None the less, a fabulous satori line and a real rival for first place. Good luck
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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This is a wonderful haiku! I almost gave it a six, but I struggled with "sweeping" As I have the same problem, but had to think there could be a better word in the present tense. None the less, a fabulous satori line and a real rival for first place. Good luck
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Val, thank you so very much for a great review, and the very nearly six. I mulled it over as well, but couldn't come up with something that made it interconnect with the first line and keep it within the syllables. I am glad you liked my Haiku otherwise. All the best.
Comment from VaV-VOOM
Wow! One, after one of the worlds truly fierce poets have entered into some kind of a do-dad, or watch-a call, and the want this to be a winning day. Great poem my friend. Write On! VaV-VOOM!
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Wow! One, after one of the worlds truly fierce poets have entered into some kind of a do-dad, or watch-a call, and the want this to be a winning day. Great poem my friend. Write On! VaV-VOOM!
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Thank you very much for the great review. So glad you liked it. All the best.
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Comment from Kazzawin
Ooh yes!
Such clever imagery of this magnificent bird searching below for its prey.
I especially like the last line, it shocks one back to the natural order of things after reading and appreciating the sweeping beauty of this fine bird.
A great entry to the contest. Good luck : )
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Ooh yes!
Such clever imagery of this magnificent bird searching below for its prey.
I especially like the last line, it shocks one back to the natural order of things after reading and appreciating the sweeping beauty of this fine bird.
A great entry to the contest. Good luck : )
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Thanks ever so much for this great review. How pleased I am that you liked it. All the best.
Comment from c_lucas
An eagle is a large strong bird. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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An eagle is a large strong bird. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much and your best wishes. All the best.
Comment from --Turtle.
I read through this 5-7 -4 poem, it does a great job of painting the image of a bird with a keen eye coasting the sky, the end line does a nice job of redefining the deadly predator aspect of the scene. I get a spring feel, but only because I think of lambs with spring.
You utilize the short space the poem allows with a nice strong verb soars
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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I read through this 5-7 -4 poem, it does a great job of painting the image of a bird with a keen eye coasting the sky, the end line does a nice job of redefining the deadly predator aspect of the scene. I get a spring feel, but only because I think of lambs with spring.
You utilize the short space the poem allows with a nice strong verb soars
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much for this great review. I'm glad that you liked it. All the best.
