A Prize Shot (Once In A Lifetime)
a 208 wd vignette for the Potlatch Prose challenge Aug.20/1623 total reviews
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a lovely piece ad you certainly met the imagery requirements with flying colors - or should that be feathers? I found it to be wonderfully serene and recalled countless times (like this morning when a baby deer came up to greet me) when nature was close enough to touch it. Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2016
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This is a lovely piece ad you certainly met the imagery requirements with flying colors - or should that be feathers? I found it to be wonderfully serene and recalled countless times (like this morning when a baby deer came up to greet me) when nature was close enough to touch it. Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2016
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Thank YOU for your wonderful review. I'm so pleased you liked it. :)
Comment from Sasha
This is a lovely vignette and made me think of my dear friend Juan who is a photographer. He can sit in a spot for hours waiting for that special shot. Once he caught a pelican dive into the water and catch a fish. This is beautiful and so soothing to read too. I enjoyed it very much.
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This is a lovely vignette and made me think of my dear friend Juan who is a photographer. He can sit in a spot for hours waiting for that special shot. Once he caught a pelican dive into the water and catch a fish. This is beautiful and so soothing to read too. I enjoyed it very much.
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Comment Written 23-Aug-2016
Comment from I am Cat
A beautiful vignette, Dawn! Wonderfully inspiring, it almost sends me running after Jimmy, who just left for the lake and his kayak! lol
I love the imagery in this, and it makes me want to lean slightly over the edge, and dip my fingers in the water, creating ripples... the great egret, yes... i love them too!
some thoughts:
In front of my canoe a trout leaps, the splash it makes (is) a sweet sound, like music to my city-jangled nerves.
Back-lit by the brilliant sun is his mate, and her glorious wings(,) as she takes flight(,) steal my breath away.
(this seems to need some punctuation?)
I loved this, the entire thing, (and I'm trying NOT to hold it against you that you use a Nikon instead of a CAnon ) LOLOL ;)
Well done, I loved it!
Cat
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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2016
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A beautiful vignette, Dawn! Wonderfully inspiring, it almost sends me running after Jimmy, who just left for the lake and his kayak! lol
I love the imagery in this, and it makes me want to lean slightly over the edge, and dip my fingers in the water, creating ripples... the great egret, yes... i love them too!
some thoughts:
In front of my canoe a trout leaps, the splash it makes (is) a sweet sound, like music to my city-jangled nerves.
Back-lit by the brilliant sun is his mate, and her glorious wings(,) as she takes flight(,) steal my breath away.
(this seems to need some punctuation?)
I loved this, the entire thing, (and I'm trying NOT to hold it against you that you use a Nikon instead of a CAnon ) LOLOL ;)
Well done, I loved it!
Cat
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Comment Written 23-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2016
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LOL - actually, I don't - I LOVE Canon. But Nikon has a beauty I've lusted after for sometime...
Thanks a million, Cat. Glad you liked it. :)
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p.s. My lovely Cat - I haven't made your suggested changes - for example, using "is" in that sentence would then make it two independent clauses, requiring a semi-colon or double dash in between. But you KNOW I love that you have my back! (Likewise for the commas - they're not needed and would make the sentence 'comma-heavy', but thank you!)
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lol, silly me, I forget who I am reviewing... duh! ;) lol mwah! I've always got your back ;)
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Oh, you're a doll, but perhaps a little too sure of my abilities! Hahahaha - I can mess up in a blink!
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yeah, well... I should know better about punctuation... unless you spelled it wrong, yeah... LOL ;)