Wilderness Way
Wandering through the woods47 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh! Much is alluded to in this tiny story, although I honestly feel there could have been a bit less ambiguity. What was in the stew that came from a blood-speckled stove? What is at the door, and why (if it is a demon beast)?
All in all, though, this was entertaining, if not fully complete. with respect, it's extremely difficult to relate a full tale in only 100 words, but any story must always have a beginning, middle, and end that satisfies the questions in a reader's mind.
I do hope this is a help. I mean no offense. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Oh! Much is alluded to in this tiny story, although I honestly feel there could have been a bit less ambiguity. What was in the stew that came from a blood-speckled stove? What is at the door, and why (if it is a demon beast)?
All in all, though, this was entertaining, if not fully complete. with respect, it's extremely difficult to relate a full tale in only 100 words, but any story must always have a beginning, middle, and end that satisfies the questions in a reader's mind.
I do hope this is a help. I mean no offense. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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No offense taken. I appreciate your comments. I intentionally left a lot to the the readers own conclusions. The blood from the stew in the skillet would have been browned, and wouldn't have looked like blood at all. Severed legs hit the door, and the story ended, as did his life, when he heard the growls and saw the glowing eyes. He couldn't write from the belly of the beast. LOL! Personally, I don't always like to spell everything out in a story. I like to let the reader use their imagination, especially in endings. Thanks for taking time to read my story. Your suggestions, and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
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You're very welcome.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi
= In a flash, a lot happened. It should teach the person NOT to fall asleep.
= Apparently things go bump in day and night at that place. (*>*)
= Good luck in the contest with your entry.
<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings <> Jax
<> Published as <> Jacqueline M Franklin
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Hi
= In a flash, a lot happened. It should teach the person NOT to fall asleep.
= Apparently things go bump in day and night at that place. (*>*)
= Good luck in the contest with your entry.
<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings <> Jax
<> Published as <> Jacqueline M Franklin
Comment Written 13-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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LOL! Thanks for making me smile. I've taken a little bit of a bashing on this one because I leave so much to the readers imagination. It's just a personal preference sometimes to let the reader decide what really happens to suit themselves. LOL! Thank you so much for taking time to read my story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
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I agree with you. Sometimes letting the reader draw their own conclusion is great! (*<*)
Comment from heyjude
Mystery Author, how gruesome and scary. The mention of the blood
on the stove was enough for me. I'd be out of there. I think you did
well at giving us a scary scene here.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Mystery Author, how gruesome and scary. The mention of the blood
on the stove was enough for me. I'd be out of there. I think you did
well at giving us a scary scene here.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Thank you so much, HeyJude, for taking time to read my story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
You paint a good scene in this piece but I think that is where the problem lies. These things are notoriously difficult - to tell a whole story in 100 words but this feels cut off as if there should be a lot more rather than a self-contained piece. What's here is good, but just feels unfinished.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Hi there,
You paint a good scene in this piece but I think that is where the problem lies. These things are notoriously difficult - to tell a whole story in 100 words but this feels cut off as if there should be a lot more rather than a self-contained piece. What's here is good, but just feels unfinished.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 13-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Yes, I understand what you are saying. It definitely does leave the read wanting sorta like old time movies, which is what I was trying to achieve. I had hoped readers could easily realize what was coming next. Thanks for taking time to read my story. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from Alex Rosel
This is a story that grabbed and kept my attention throughout.
I entered the spotless chalet - It's a shame this isn't foreshadowing a twist. I'm a big fan of foreshadowing.
Finally, I gave up waiting for approval, ate their food, and fell fast asleep. - I read this that you fell asleep on the swing on the porch. But, then you write, Something slammed against the door, startling me from bed. Outside the cracked door... It's a little disjointed for me.
Unfortunately, I was expecting a twist at the end, and you didn't really deliver. Nevertheless, I enjoyed reading this. Good luck with the competition.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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This is a story that grabbed and kept my attention throughout.
I entered the spotless chalet - It's a shame this isn't foreshadowing a twist. I'm a big fan of foreshadowing.
Finally, I gave up waiting for approval, ate their food, and fell fast asleep. - I read this that you fell asleep on the swing on the porch. But, then you write, Something slammed against the door, startling me from bed. Outside the cracked door... It's a little disjointed for me.
Unfortunately, I was expecting a twist at the end, and you didn't really deliver. Nevertheless, I enjoyed reading this. Good luck with the competition.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Yes, this was one of those eleven minute writes when I looked up and noticed the entry window was about to close. Thanks for taking time to read my story. You kind words, suggestions, and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from Judy Couch
The story held my interest. The plot is good. I would have liked to read more of what happened but I know you had a word limit.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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The story held my interest. The plot is good. I would have liked to read more of what happened but I know you had a word limit.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Thank you so much, Judy Couch, for taking time to read my story. I'm glad you would have liked to read more, and I promise, I wish I could have told you more. There is just so much that I can do with 100 words. LOL! Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from F. Wehr3
Nice work in a hundred words. The only critique I would give is to avoid looked, saw, heard, and walked. Instead I would recommend stronger more descriptive words. Very difficult to do in such a short piece, but I thought this was well done. Best of luck.
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Nice work in a hundred words. The only critique I would give is to avoid looked, saw, heard, and walked. Instead I would recommend stronger more descriptive words. Very difficult to do in such a short piece, but I thought this was well done. Best of luck.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 13-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Thank you so much, F.Wehr3, for taking time to read my story. This is one of those eleven minute writes for a last minute entry on the wire, which I have a habit of doing lately. LOL! Your kind words, suggestions, and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements splendidly. Certainly not the happy ending Goldie Locks experienced LOL. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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This meets the contest requirements splendidly. Certainly not the happy ending Goldie Locks experienced LOL. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Thank you so much, Mystic Angel 7777, for taking time to read my story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from William Ross
Nice, good job on the 100 word prompt, I'm not counting the words i'm just taking it for what's there, the ending was very surprising, best of luck on this and have a great day.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Nice, good job on the 100 word prompt, I'm not counting the words i'm just taking it for what's there, the ending was very surprising, best of luck on this and have a great day.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Thank you so much, William Ross, for taking time to read my story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from winnona
a well- written contest entry. I think you did well completing the challenge of the contest. You managed to write a story with the word count you were allowed. well done.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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a well- written contest entry. I think you did well completing the challenge of the contest. You managed to write a story with the word count you were allowed. well done.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Thank you so much, Winnona, for taking time to read my story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)