The Passing of the Fly
A Villanelle57 total reviews
Comment from Therese Caron
This poem was a lot of fun to read! I remember those Levis with the metal buttons, you don't see them around too much anymore. They were the true originals. Your poem has lots of fun stanzas and a lot of truth also! You chose the perfect image to complement your poem. Thanks for sharing this with us! We could all use a good laugh.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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This poem was a lot of fun to read! I remember those Levis with the metal buttons, you don't see them around too much anymore. They were the true originals. Your poem has lots of fun stanzas and a lot of truth also! You chose the perfect image to complement your poem. Thanks for sharing this with us! We could all use a good laugh.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Many thanks for your review, Therese. I'm delighted that my poem caused you a few moments of amusement. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from juliaSjames
This is the most entertaining villanelle I've read in some time. Zippers are convenient for either sex. But they can fail at the most inconvenient times.
Nicely written Tony.
Stay safe and healthy.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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This is the most entertaining villanelle I've read in some time. Zippers are convenient for either sex. But they can fail at the most inconvenient times.
Nicely written Tony.
Stay safe and healthy.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 04-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Many thanks for your review, Julia. I'm delighted that my poem caused you a few moments of amusement. You stay safe and healthy, too. All good wishes, Tony
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Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
This is a treat. You're paying me to read this! What a witty whimsical piece. Great title, flows well in good rhyme to boot. Thanks, I needed this. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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This is a treat. You're paying me to read this! What a witty whimsical piece. Great title, flows well in good rhyme to boot. Thanks, I needed this. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 04-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Many thanks for your review, Elizabeth. I'm delighted that my poem caused you a few moments of amusement. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from kiwisteveh
I think the Villanelle is well-suited for this kind of offbeat and humorous treatment. Here, you have chosen the sounds well to give you multiple possibilities for rhyming, as well as a great topic - not too serious.
I must admit I am somewhat split between the convenience of the zipper and the robustness of buttons where
"Four buttons out of five, and I'll get by;"
even though, like you, I have suffered nipping of the flesh and the occasional broken zipper. Not sure too many maidens blush these days. Titter perhaps at the old fool who can't even do his pants up properly.
Lots of fun, expertly constructed and well worth six stars.
Steve
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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I think the Villanelle is well-suited for this kind of offbeat and humorous treatment. Here, you have chosen the sounds well to give you multiple possibilities for rhyming, as well as a great topic - not too serious.
I must admit I am somewhat split between the convenience of the zipper and the robustness of buttons where
"Four buttons out of five, and I'll get by;"
even though, like you, I have suffered nipping of the flesh and the occasional broken zipper. Not sure too many maidens blush these days. Titter perhaps at the old fool who can't even do his pants up properly.
Lots of fun, expertly constructed and well worth six stars.
Steve
Comment Written 04-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Thanks for your review and comments, Steve. I appreciate the extra star. Glad that you enjoyed it and appreciated the humour. I hope all is well with you in these strange times.
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Thanks, Tony. yes, all good in our little rural retreat.
Comment from Adri7enne
Lol! Cute, Tony. It must be a damn nuisance to be fighting with a damn zippered fly. Lol! I had a jacket with a tricky zipper. Last time I wore it it was like wearing a straight jacket. Zipper let go altogether and I was stuck with the jacket on, in winter, having to take it off over my head. When one of the clerks finally freed me from that jacket I felt she had released me from jail. Almost got down and kissed her feet. Jacket didn't last past the first trash can. Lol! Loved your poem. Got a little thrown by the three lines rhymes. I'm more familiar with four lines, alternating rhymes. Nice distraction.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Lol! Cute, Tony. It must be a damn nuisance to be fighting with a damn zippered fly. Lol! I had a jacket with a tricky zipper. Last time I wore it it was like wearing a straight jacket. Zipper let go altogether and I was stuck with the jacket on, in winter, having to take it off over my head. When one of the clerks finally freed me from that jacket I felt she had released me from jail. Almost got down and kissed her feet. Jacket didn't last past the first trash can. Lol! Loved your poem. Got a little thrown by the three lines rhymes. I'm more familiar with four lines, alternating rhymes. Nice distraction.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Many thanks for your review, Adrienne. I've had jackets like that, too! Glad you got a bit of entertainment value out of the poem. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your villanelle is creatively and skillfully composed and dryly musing.
Yes, malfunctioning zippers have caused a great deal of consternation.
Unruly bra straps are also cause for alarm!
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Your villanelle is creatively and skillfully composed and dryly musing.
Yes, malfunctioning zippers have caused a great deal of consternation.
Unruly bra straps are also cause for alarm!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Thanks very much for your review, Janice. Much appreciated. Unruly bra straps ... now that's something I'm glad I don't have to deal with!
LOL
Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Cindy Warren
Yeah, I imagine a broken zipper is twice as bad for a man. It's embarrassing for me, and I don't have anything that can escape. LOL Yep, they should bring back the buttons.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Yeah, I imagine a broken zipper is twice as bad for a man. It's embarrassing for me, and I don't have anything that can escape. LOL Yep, they should bring back the buttons.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Thanks very much for your review, Cindy. Much appreciated. Reminds me of Winston Churchill's response when someone mentioned his fly was undone. "The nest is empty. The bird has flown." My situation, too, these days! LOL
LOL
Best wishes, Tony
Comment from rspoet
Hello Tony,
A gem of a villanelle, perhaps only a man can truly appreciate.
Excellent meter and rhyme and oh the painful imagery.
Please pull gently, lest I rage, rage
like a child crying in the night
to quick the zip will re-engage
that nip's worse than a serpent's bite
no salve can possibly assuage
Six painless buttons
Good to see you posting poetry again.
Robert
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Hello Tony,
A gem of a villanelle, perhaps only a man can truly appreciate.
Excellent meter and rhyme and oh the painful imagery.
Please pull gently, lest I rage, rage
like a child crying in the night
to quick the zip will re-engage
that nip's worse than a serpent's bite
no salve can possibly assuage
Six painless buttons
Good to see you posting poetry again.
Robert
Comment Written 04-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Thanks very much for your review, Robert, and the shiny buttons. Appreciated almost as much as your echo of Dylan Thomas!
Best wishes, Tony
Comment from lyenochka
Thank you for sharing this humorous villanelle poem which seems to be a eulogy for a zipper! I guess you're one who is loyal to one pair of pants? At our house, the fly would be removed and the denim re-purposed.
So much depends on the simple fly!
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Thank you for sharing this humorous villanelle poem which seems to be a eulogy for a zipper! I guess you're one who is loyal to one pair of pants? At our house, the fly would be removed and the denim re-purposed.
So much depends on the simple fly!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Thanks very much for your review, Helen. Much appreciated. Glad it brought you a moment of amusement.
Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Gail Denham
I don't see why men like those button jobs. My husband wears them and they seem cumbersome - a zipper's so much easier. Cute poem. I enjoyed it - wear long shirts would be one cure.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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I don't see why men like those button jobs. My husband wears them and they seem cumbersome - a zipper's so much easier. Cute poem. I enjoyed it - wear long shirts would be one cure.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Thanks very much for your entertaining review, Gail. Much appreciated.
Best wishes, Tony