The Trollop
Illegal but lucrative.41 total reviews
Comment from Raul1
Yes, you are right that man was sure fooled by the woman's charm and in result she stole his wallet. Exceptional work! No mistakes found in your poem. Nice! Thank you for sharing!
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Yes, you are right that man was sure fooled by the woman's charm and in result she stole his wallet. Exceptional work! No mistakes found in your poem. Nice! Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Nice of you to make yourself renown again. It's been a while since seeing something new. Have I been wrong and overlooked some pieces? This is brilliant and humorous. Well done.
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Nice of you to make yourself renown again. It's been a while since seeing something new. Have I been wrong and overlooked some pieces? This is brilliant and humorous. Well done.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Willie,
I like the humor in this one.
You tell a story with a deft pen. I like all your poems on the Wild West.
Good luck with this one.
Blessings,
Cindy.
I hope this note finds you well.
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Willie,
I like the humor in this one.
You tell a story with a deft pen. I like all your poems on the Wild West.
Good luck with this one.
Blessings,
Cindy.
I hope this note finds you well.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
Comment from GWHARGIS
Lol. Now that was funny. A crime, a patsy, a trollop and a lesson to be learned. This was a fun read. I loved the bawdy feel of it. Your rhymes were good and not forced. Great job. I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. Gretchen
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Lol. Now that was funny. A crime, a patsy, a trollop and a lesson to be learned. This was a fun read. I loved the bawdy feel of it. Your rhymes were good and not forced. Great job. I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. Gretchen
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
Comment from Cindy Warren
He was lucky. I've heard you should never carry your wallet in your back pocket. Everyone can see it there. Thanks for the fun read. Glad she didn't get away with it.
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He was lucky. I've heard you should never carry your wallet in your back pocket. Everyone can see it there. Thanks for the fun read. Glad she didn't get away with it.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
Comment from Brandon Clark
I like this. Your rhyming and pace were very good, and I liked the overall presentation. Can't be getting rolled and stay wealthy, or worse, alive...unfortunately Sam Cooke found that out the hard way. Thanks for posting this, it was very entertaining, and I enjoyed reading it!
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I like this. Your rhyming and pace were very good, and I liked the overall presentation. Can't be getting rolled and stay wealthy, or worse, alive...unfortunately Sam Cooke found that out the hard way. Thanks for posting this, it was very entertaining, and I enjoyed reading it!
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
Comment from lancellot
This is a fun little tale. The rhyme scheme does falter near the middle and trouble is misspelled.
how about this:
Jill Star was her name,
Working the bar was her game.
She welcomed cowboys, as they came in
And that's where our story begins
An old prospector came into the bar.
Quite parched, as he had ridden far.
Claimed in the mountains, he struck gold.
A fact he should have never told.
"Drinks are on me," he said out loud.
Jill heard him through the noisy crowd.
To pay for the drinks, he pulled out his wallet.
It was so stuffed with cash it bulged his pocket.
Jill slid beside him and gave him a kiss.
While below her sticky fingers didn't miss
Not only was whoring her profession,
She could pick a pocket with perfection.
Reaching for his wallet to buy another round,
His pocket was empty, he sadly found.
A deputy saw what Jill had done.
He recovered the wallet before she could run.
The moral of this story is easy to see
If you're rich, be as quiet as can be
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This is a fun little tale. The rhyme scheme does falter near the middle and trouble is misspelled.
how about this:
Jill Star was her name,
Working the bar was her game.
She welcomed cowboys, as they came in
And that's where our story begins
An old prospector came into the bar.
Quite parched, as he had ridden far.
Claimed in the mountains, he struck gold.
A fact he should have never told.
"Drinks are on me," he said out loud.
Jill heard him through the noisy crowd.
To pay for the drinks, he pulled out his wallet.
It was so stuffed with cash it bulged his pocket.
Jill slid beside him and gave him a kiss.
While below her sticky fingers didn't miss
Not only was whoring her profession,
She could pick a pocket with perfection.
Reaching for his wallet to buy another round,
His pocket was empty, he sadly found.
A deputy saw what Jill had done.
He recovered the wallet before she could run.
The moral of this story is easy to see
If you're rich, be as quiet as can be
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
Comment from Mary Vigasin
I found this to be quite delightful and fun. "trollup!" I have not heard this term for quite sometime. It was one of my grandmother's favorite words.
Best wishes
Mary
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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I found this to be quite delightful and fun. "trollup!" I have not heard this term for quite sometime. It was one of my grandmother's favorite words.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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Thank you, Mary. I suppose some of the younger generation will have to look up the meaning of trollop.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job, Willie, with your poem about the
stealing of the wallet. Your work had smooth flow, good
rhymes, and a fun message. I'm glad this one got caught--
wonder how many did not. I believe this is your artwork--
if so, great job.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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You did a great job, Willie, with your poem about the
stealing of the wallet. Your work had smooth flow, good
rhymes, and a fun message. I'm glad this one got caught--
wonder how many did not. I believe this is your artwork--
if so, great job.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
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Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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I drew that in 93. I don't draw much anymore; my hands shake too much. I really enjoy sketching. I did a whole series of actor drawings. Getting old takes away a lot of things, you just have to find something else. Thanks, Jan for the review and kudos.
Comment from SLMorrical
A very cute poem. I loved reading it. I like that you had a moral to the poem. The flow was wonderful and had me intrigued wanting to get to the end. Well done.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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A very cute poem. I loved reading it. I like that you had a moral to the poem. The flow was wonderful and had me intrigued wanting to get to the end. Well done.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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Your review and six stars are very appreciated. Glad you enjoyed the poem. Willie