The Common Bond
A 5-7-5 style.Talk is cheap. Are you also walking the walk?45 total reviews
Comment from tfawcus
You draw a good parallel here. There's much truth both in your poem and your quotation.
It's a pity there isn't a good two-syllable alternative for religion or writing so you could join them with a conjugation. 'Belief' might almost do it.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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You draw a good parallel here. There's much truth both in your poem and your quotation.
It's a pity there isn't a good two-syllable alternative for religion or writing so you could join them with a conjugation. 'Belief' might almost do it.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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I knowww!! That was really galling me last night, but I finally decided that I'd have to settle for a damn slash mark. Thanks for the "belief" alternative, but the impact isn't quite enough. I appreciate your offer, though. I honestly do. xo
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Well, you are absolutely right - showing, not telling, is the true test of both. You have a real understanding of how to make these short poems work for you; 17 syllables say more than even 17 words here.
And I love the Booker quote. I wonder where we'd be if he had stood up and offered again to run for president this cycle; God knows we wouldn't be facing two old, white, clueless individuals. But that's another story.
I had hoped for a short story from you this morning, but I'll take what scraps you throw us:-)
xoxo
Pam (Sicko)
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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Well, you are absolutely right - showing, not telling, is the true test of both. You have a real understanding of how to make these short poems work for you; 17 syllables say more than even 17 words here.
And I love the Booker quote. I wonder where we'd be if he had stood up and offered again to run for president this cycle; God knows we wouldn't be facing two old, white, clueless individuals. But that's another story.
I had hoped for a short story from you this morning, but I'll take what scraps you throw us:-)
xoxo
Pam (Sicko)
Comment Written 16-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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Oh, man! It's never enough for your sicko self, is it? Nag, nag, nag; push, push, push!! But, as a Jew, I appreciate the torment, so thank you.
xoxox
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LOL! Yes, you're "people" are used to the persecution. I was thrilled to see not one but two pieces from you this morning. Do you feel better now, princess?
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HAHAHAHAHAHA. Yes, knave.
Comment from LJbutterfly
My mother used to say, "Love is something you Do, not something you say." What you see a person do is more profound than what they say they are going to do. You poem expresses it so well. In exceptional writing, the author will SHOW rather then merely TELL.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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My mother used to say, "Love is something you Do, not something you say." What you see a person do is more profound than what they say they are going to do. You poem expresses it so well. In exceptional writing, the author will SHOW rather then merely TELL.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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You get me, LJbutterfly; thank you for that. It's the BEST feeling a writer gets to have. xoxo
Comment from Neonewman
No truer words have been spoken. I fall short daily but never fail to pray often. Thank you for sharing this, my friend.
Hope your day was awesome.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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No truer words have been spoken. I fall short daily but never fail to pray often. Thank you for sharing this, my friend.
Hope your day was awesome.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 16-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Steve. This is a lovely review, and I appreciate it immensely. xo
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your 5/7/5 poem and quote from Cory Booker - excellent picture presentation - the message in my opinion is spot on - experience tells me that this is not always what it might seem - the internal workings of some religious organizations espouse these values while, at the same time are very viscous to those who don't see eye to eye with their interpretation - my brother is a minister... in his early days was on a short leash. Normal I suppose. Good Message - Bless Alan
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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I like your 5/7/5 poem and quote from Cory Booker - excellent picture presentation - the message in my opinion is spot on - experience tells me that this is not always what it might seem - the internal workings of some religious organizations espouse these values while, at the same time are very viscous to those who don't see eye to eye with their interpretation - my brother is a minister... in his early days was on a short leash. Normal I suppose. Good Message - Bless Alan
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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What a fantastic, affirming, deep and cogent review this is. Thank you, Alan. xoxo
Comment from Spitfire
You should have entered this in a contest. I'm sure the judges would have loved it. I do. Since I live in the bible belt I hear this preaching a lot from people who don't practice what they preach.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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You should have entered this in a contest. I'm sure the judges would have loved it. I do. Since I live in the bible belt I hear this preaching a lot from people who don't practice what they preach.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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It's everywhere, believe me, not just in the bible belt. People everywhere say something in the name of the Almighty and then turn around and do the exact opposite. Thanks for the wonderful review. xo
Comment from Mark D. R.
Rachel,
I do like the sentiment expressed in your 5-7-5 poem. And I like Cory Booker and what he says (in the quotation) and how he represents what is good in our country - citizenship and civility in his legislative actions.
It is not what you say, but what you DO in life (that makes his approach so valuable).
Mark
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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Rachel,
I do like the sentiment expressed in your 5-7-5 poem. And I like Cory Booker and what he says (in the quotation) and how he represents what is good in our country - citizenship and civility in his legislative actions.
It is not what you say, but what you DO in life (that makes his approach so valuable).
Mark
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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It so totally is. Thank you for "getting" me this morning. It's every writer's purpose for writing, after all!! xoxo
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
How I wish I still had a 6 for this wonderful poem. Talk is cheap and so is writing. In the world today, more than I can remember in my lifetime, the hypocrisy is open, alive and shoved in our faces. Just a great use of words in the 5-7-5. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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How I wish I still had a 6 for this wonderful poem. Talk is cheap and so is writing. In the world today, more than I can remember in my lifetime, the hypocrisy is open, alive and shoved in our faces. Just a great use of words in the 5-7-5. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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Oh, are you ever singing my song, Marilyn. Thank you for this terrific review. xo
Comment from Wendy G
The quote is an excellent one. The two must go together, words and deeds. Your 5-7-5 expressed well the common thread between religion and writing. Writers are always being exhorted to show rather than tell and allow the reader to deduce and think. Same with one's faith. No one has ever been forced into God's kingdom by logical argument. Walk the walk. Then if people show interest one can talk the talk. I do like the link. Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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The quote is an excellent one. The two must go together, words and deeds. Your 5-7-5 expressed well the common thread between religion and writing. Writers are always being exhorted to show rather than tell and allow the reader to deduce and think. Same with one's faith. No one has ever been forced into God's kingdom by logical argument. Walk the walk. Then if people show interest one can talk the talk. I do like the link. Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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And Wendy, NO ONE does that walking better than you. It is, in fact, my favorite quality of yours. You always "show."
Thank you for this terrific review. xo
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I agree with the concept of walk what you preach. Actions are louder the words.
Good syllables count. Good connection between lines. Nice presentation.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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I agree with the concept of walk what you preach. Actions are louder the words.
Good syllables count. Good connection between lines. Nice presentation.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Gypsy. I appreciate your affirmation here very much. xo