Renewal
Home-Made Carpe Diem89 total reviews
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hello amada.
Your very good poem is full of very good ideas! It is so true that we need time for reflection without dishes or lists or the like. I enjoyed your poem very much.
Whizpurr ^-^
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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Hello amada.
Your very good poem is full of very good ideas! It is so true that we need time for reflection without dishes or lists or the like. I enjoyed your poem very much.
Whizpurr ^-^
Comment Written 14-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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Thank you for connecting with my poem, dear fellow writer whizpurr.
Comment from PUPA
Amada, I am so so sorry I have no sixer. This is absolutely stunning. What an insightful poem, written so well in free verse. We all need to do that every now and then, I should do soon! I loved the short lines and stanzas, made the reading easy and comfortable.
Thank for sharing this beautiful poem/
Love
Pupa
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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Amada, I am so so sorry I have no sixer. This is absolutely stunning. What an insightful poem, written so well in free verse. We all need to do that every now and then, I should do soon! I loved the short lines and stanzas, made the reading easy and comfortable.
Thank for sharing this beautiful poem/
Love
Pupa
Comment Written 14-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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Your comments make me feel as taking another day off; they are so invigorating. Thank you, Pupa.
Comment from EllieKaye
Hello, Amada,
I wish I had a higher available rating to offer. This is the most beautiful poem I've read all morning! What a sweet message it brings. Most of us are so hard on ourselves when we take such a day. You handled the subject with wisdom. Beautiful word choices as well.
Ellie
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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Hello, Amada,
I wish I had a higher available rating to offer. This is the most beautiful poem I've read all morning! What a sweet message it brings. Most of us are so hard on ourselves when we take such a day. You handled the subject with wisdom. Beautiful word choices as well.
Ellie
Comment Written 14-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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Thank you Ellie. I like that you enjoyed this poem, and this day as well.
Comment from GerryMacNeil
Amada, you have so beautifully captured the insight to cut yourself some slack! Lovely. I love the opening image: "checking in with my inner trunk"! That inner trunk is very hard to set aside, isn't it! Thanks for this gem. Gerry
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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Amada, you have so beautifully captured the insight to cut yourself some slack! Lovely. I love the opening image: "checking in with my inner trunk"! That inner trunk is very hard to set aside, isn't it! Thanks for this gem. Gerry
Comment Written 14-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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Oh yes, Gerry. Us women put so much in our plate, and then, it breaks down. Thank you for reading and connecting to my words.
Comment from Lynar
I could envision the refining process of ideas, with doing something that pleased you. It involved self-inspection within and working in the soil that awakened your true nature. God's divine wisdom helped you to rest and replace your grumpy scowl with a smile, in renewal. A complete turn around in the are of self Improvement. (A touch of divine intervention), in free flow. The artwork was very complimentary. I would recommend to my friends, Renewal. No adverse remarks. Excellent.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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I could envision the refining process of ideas, with doing something that pleased you. It involved self-inspection within and working in the soil that awakened your true nature. God's divine wisdom helped you to rest and replace your grumpy scowl with a smile, in renewal. A complete turn around in the are of self Improvement. (A touch of divine intervention), in free flow. The artwork was very complimentary. I would recommend to my friends, Renewal. No adverse remarks. Excellent.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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Thank you for the most delightful review, dear Lynar. As you said, it started with self-inspection. I rested and I put my mind to God, what he would say to me. I am so grateful that He gave me this poem to share with others.
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It was my pleasure, amada.
Comment from c_lucas
A very well written poem with a strong cadence that makes for a smooth read. It has very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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A very well written poem with a strong cadence that makes for a smooth read. It has very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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Thank you, c_lucas for the great comments.
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You're welcome, Amada. Charlie
Comment from unidian
A wonderful poem about accepting - and enjoying - your lot. Just letting go is never as easy as it seems. Not sure it is totally in line with the requirements of this contest - but I enjoyed it anyway! Tom
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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A wonderful poem about accepting - and enjoying - your lot. Just letting go is never as easy as it seems. Not sure it is totally in line with the requirements of this contest - but I enjoyed it anyway! Tom
Comment Written 14-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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Thank you, Tom.
Comment from dtimes3
Nice transitions from the leaves, to the branch, to the inner trunk, to the roots.
++ I'm getting rusty,
grumpy and cold.
++Morning finds my roots
curling in relaxed soil,
And it is always nice when we can turn a frown upside down. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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Nice transitions from the leaves, to the branch, to the inner trunk, to the roots.
++ I'm getting rusty,
grumpy and cold.
++Morning finds my roots
curling in relaxed soil,
And it is always nice when we can turn a frown upside down. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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Thank you dtimes3. I like the comparisons you made, it shows much forceful. Insightful.
Comment from Jendowoz
I liked the way these words flowed so well together, particularly when read aloud. A tree can permeate so much inspiration to write. I have just finished doing a poetry unit with my year 2 students and they came up with some wonderful different forms of poetry. I found no adjustments, but just one suggestion, I would use the advanced editing and bold your text so it shows stronger against the background.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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I liked the way these words flowed so well together, particularly when read aloud. A tree can permeate so much inspiration to write. I have just finished doing a poetry unit with my year 2 students and they came up with some wonderful different forms of poetry. I found no adjustments, but just one suggestion, I would use the advanced editing and bold your text so it shows stronger against the background.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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Thank you for the great review and comments. I want to follow the suggestion to make the text stronger. I will wait for my husband, every time I try to do this I mess it up... Oh well, I must accept my shortcomings as well.
Comment from bkrighter
This is a wonderful celebration aand call to let go, if only for a day, and take time to simply be. It is a call we would all do well to heed from time to time. Good work.
Steve
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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This is a wonderful celebration aand call to let go, if only for a day, and take time to simply be. It is a call we would all do well to heed from time to time. Good work.
Steve
Comment Written 14-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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Thank you Steve. Celebrate today and have a great day.
