Over-the-Fence
a whimsical tale with a moral74 total reviews
Comment from AlvinTEthington
An interesting poem. This is certainly biting social criticism about gossip (and probably needs to be read on this site.) The poem flows well and the rhyme scheme works into the cadence. The multitude of characters serves to indicate how widespread gossip is. I do like the self-criticism at the end. A very good didactic poem.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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An interesting poem. This is certainly biting social criticism about gossip (and probably needs to be read on this site.) The poem flows well and the rhyme scheme works into the cadence. The multitude of characters serves to indicate how widespread gossip is. I do like the self-criticism at the end. A very good didactic poem.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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AlvinTEthington, sir thank you so much for your wonderful review and comments. I am going to get a big head..lol...you are aprreciated very much..jlsavell
Comment from Johnny Carwash
Thought-provoking, inspiring piece. You managed to express a very encouraging sentiment within a very well-written poem. Great job, my friend.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Thought-provoking, inspiring piece. You managed to express a very encouraging sentiment within a very well-written poem. Great job, my friend.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Johnny Carwash, hello. wow I do not know what to say. thank you so much. your time and review mean alot to me, for i admire your talent as a wonderful poet and author..again thank you jlsavell
Comment from sara-beth
This is really a great lesson, I love all the names you cam up with. Gossip sucks, and it can really hurt, but you have to consider the source, I guess. Very enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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This is really a great lesson, I love all the names you cam up with. Gossip sucks, and it can really hurt, but you have to consider the source, I guess. Very enjoyable read.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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sara-beth, thank you for reading and reviewing my work. I appreciate your time and your comments..jlsavell
Comment from chaswriter
jlsavell - What a wonderful tale of the gossip monger and the dog. And I like the way you tell the tale with good rhyme and flow. I enjoyed it. Charlie
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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jlsavell - What a wonderful tale of the gossip monger and the dog. And I like the way you tell the tale with good rhyme and flow. I enjoyed it. Charlie
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Charlie[chaswriter], thank you so very much for stopping by and reviewing my work. I am humbled. jlsavell
Comment from Roisin
Great poem. You've managed to tell a story and send out an important message in this fun poem. I like the names you've chosen - it adds a lot of fun and humour to the poem. Your rhymes are great and it all flowed well. Thank you too for your notes, I enjoyed reading them.
Warm regards.
Roisin
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Great poem. You've managed to tell a story and send out an important message in this fun poem. I like the names you've chosen - it adds a lot of fun and humour to the poem. Your rhymes are great and it all flowed well. Thank you too for your notes, I enjoyed reading them.
Warm regards.
Roisin
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Roisin. I am flattered that you enjoyed my little whimsical moral poem..thank you so much for a great review and wonderful comments.jlsavell
Comment from malachi1206
This was a very good write and a lesson much needed nowaday particularly in the times we live in your author's notes were right on and this was a real pleasure to review malachi1206
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This was a very good write and a lesson much needed nowaday particularly in the times we live in your author's notes were right on and this was a real pleasure to review malachi1206
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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malachi1206, thank you, thank you. You are appreciated more than words can express..jlsavell
Comment from Nescher Pyscher
An interesting piece!
I liked the names best, I think. You've got a couple of smaller SPAG issues, but it's such a fun poem that I don't have the heat to ding you for them.
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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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An interesting piece!
I liked the names best, I think. You've got a couple of smaller SPAG issues, but it's such a fun poem that I don't have the heat to ding you for them.
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Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Nescher Pyscher, oh thank you for not talking off for the spag. I try and try to edit, but I always miss something.Thank you so very much for stopping by. I appreciate your kind words and review..jlsavell
Comment from XR15
Hi There
This is a fun morality poem. Careless gossip... I liked how all the names of the characters were different words for that very thing - Clever!
Thanks for sharing
Cheers
Chris
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Hi There
This is a fun morality poem. Careless gossip... I liked how all the names of the characters were different words for that very thing - Clever!
Thanks for sharing
Cheers
Chris
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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XR15, thank you so very much. I am glad you enjoyed and I am appreciative of your time and review..jlsavell
Comment from Summer Falls
The lighthearted poem certainly turned into a butt-biter in the end, didn't it? This was well written and the rhymes were well done. The author notes were a bit long though. You are right though, gossip is a wounding issue in any environment.
summergirl
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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The lighthearted poem certainly turned into a butt-biter in the end, didn't it? This was well written and the rhymes were well done. The author notes were a bit long though. You are right though, gossip is a wounding issue in any environment.
summergirl
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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summergirl, sorry for the length. That being said, thank you so very much for taking your time to read and review my work. You are appreciated more than I can express...JLSAVELL
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You are very welcome.
Comment from GregoryC
'Good fences make good neighbors'. "Mending Wall," by Robert Frost. The neighbor's fence is under siege and is easily breached by a gossip.
How did the word ever get into the dictionary? One popular etymology connects the word "gossip" with "to sip": the tale tells how politicians would send assistants to bars to sit and listen to general public conversations. The assistants had instructions to sip a beer and listen to opinions; they responded to the command to "go sip", which allegedly turned into "gossip". A bit far-fetched I wonder?
But the real standard gossip can be found in the workplace right by the office water cooler: "Let's see. Who can we talk bad about today."
You have created the perfect gossip column with your colorful characters: from Ms.Tell-a-real-spin to Parrot Tattle and Bad-mouth Scandalmonger. The abab quatrains really sing a song about the foibles of the big mouths who love to slander anyone.
You remind us of that old Spanish Proverb: "Whoever gossips to you will gossip about you." So beware. You give us fair warning in a light-hearted, whimsical way.
Good work.
Gregory
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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'Good fences make good neighbors'. "Mending Wall," by Robert Frost. The neighbor's fence is under siege and is easily breached by a gossip.
How did the word ever get into the dictionary? One popular etymology connects the word "gossip" with "to sip": the tale tells how politicians would send assistants to bars to sit and listen to general public conversations. The assistants had instructions to sip a beer and listen to opinions; they responded to the command to "go sip", which allegedly turned into "gossip". A bit far-fetched I wonder?
But the real standard gossip can be found in the workplace right by the office water cooler: "Let's see. Who can we talk bad about today."
You have created the perfect gossip column with your colorful characters: from Ms.Tell-a-real-spin to Parrot Tattle and Bad-mouth Scandalmonger. The abab quatrains really sing a song about the foibles of the big mouths who love to slander anyone.
You remind us of that old Spanish Proverb: "Whoever gossips to you will gossip about you." So beware. You give us fair warning in a light-hearted, whimsical way.
Good work.
Gregory
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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GregoryC, HI, thank you so very much for stopping by. What a wonderful commentary in yuor review. Love it!!!1 You are appreciated very very much..jlsavell