George Carlin and Ivory Soap
practicing for the big leagues40 total reviews
Comment from Paradox Tremors
That's too funny. The sad truth is kids do pick up the wrong language from watching sports. If "Mr. Baseball" can say it what's wrong him saying it--sad, but true. A good write my friend and the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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That's too funny. The sad truth is kids do pick up the wrong language from watching sports. If "Mr. Baseball" can say it what's wrong him saying it--sad, but true. A good write my friend and the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Thank you, PT, for this great review and for taking the time to read and comment on my story. I really liked writing this little story and so glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Well done! You wrote a very entertaining little story which was hilariously funny. Children can get themselves into a world of confusion sometimes when adults take advantage.
Good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Well done! You wrote a very entertaining little story which was hilariously funny. Children can get themselves into a world of confusion sometimes when adults take advantage.
Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Oh, Giddy, it's so wonderful to hear from you and I thnk you for this kind review and your great comments for my story. I'm delighted you enjoyed it and liked the humor. :>)
Comment from Belinda
Ha-ha... kids. This is difficult for patents, right? The ending is sure hilarious, but you cannot blame the boy for asking ... :)
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Ha-ha... kids. This is difficult for patents, right? The ending is sure hilarious, but you cannot blame the boy for asking ... :)
Comment Written 07-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Thank you for this great review, Belinda, and for taking the time to read and comment on my little story. Thank you very much for your wonderful "Ha-ha"...my favorite part of your review. :>)
Comment from Mara del Mar
Hahaha! Kids! Absorb and learn everything quickly. I have really enjoyed this story of the big leagues. You have worked in the naive attitude of the child to perfection, as well as the reaction of the mother. I love the ending, I laughed heartily child's ingenuity. Congratulations and good luck!
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Hahaha! Kids! Absorb and learn everything quickly. I have really enjoyed this story of the big leagues. You have worked in the naive attitude of the child to perfection, as well as the reaction of the mother. I love the ending, I laughed heartily child's ingenuity. Congratulations and good luck!
Comment Written 06-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Thank you, Mara, for this wonderful review for my story. I appreciate all your kind comments and I'm glad you enjoyed the story. Thank you especially for your "Hahaha" and I'm thrilled it made you smile. :>)
Comment from Ekim777
If writing children's stories is a specialized genre, writing through the eyes of a child is an art form all of its own. It can never be simple. Children are never simple.
They see and hear too clearly, something they learn to lose as they grow older, as the adults impose themselves; as they learn to imitate those adults. You managed to paint a picture of your son, still unspoiled, still in touch with something of himself and he probably can inject more meaning into words, especially the suggestive words, than we adults can do. Nice, sensitive writing. He sounds like a good, intelligen boy. - Ekim
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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If writing children's stories is a specialized genre, writing through the eyes of a child is an art form all of its own. It can never be simple. Children are never simple.
They see and hear too clearly, something they learn to lose as they grow older, as the adults impose themselves; as they learn to imitate those adults. You managed to paint a picture of your son, still unspoiled, still in touch with something of himself and he probably can inject more meaning into words, especially the suggestive words, than we adults can do. Nice, sensitive writing. He sounds like a good, intelligen boy. - Ekim
Comment Written 06-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Thank you, Ekim, for this wonderful review for my little story. I appreciate your taking the time to read and comment. I'm delighted you enjoyed it. Thank you.
Comment from Connie C
Very cute! I love the dialogue here, and it is easy to see a little boy talking to his mom with perhaps even an innocence. He's just trying to be like the big boys who play ball and talk just like them. Excellent story that held my interest. And it just so happens I DID get my mouth washed out with Ivory soap but only once--once was enough. To this day, I have hated Ivory Soap. Connie
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Very cute! I love the dialogue here, and it is easy to see a little boy talking to his mom with perhaps even an innocence. He's just trying to be like the big boys who play ball and talk just like them. Excellent story that held my interest. And it just so happens I DID get my mouth washed out with Ivory soap but only once--once was enough. To this day, I have hated Ivory Soap. Connie
Comment Written 06-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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hank you, Connie, for this wonderful review for my story. I appreciate your taking the time to read and comment...and I especially loved your comment about your still hating Ivory!! LOL That wa such bad stuff. Thank you!
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, i love the idea of a child actually getting punished for talking that way, a lot of children these days are allowed too much freedom of expression, i wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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this is very well written, mystery writer, i love the idea of a child actually getting punished for talking that way, a lot of children these days are allowed too much freedom of expression, i wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 06-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Thank you, sweetwoodjax, for your great review and I appreciate such kind words and your best wishes for the contest. Thank you.
Comment from sasil
ANY soap with a fragrance was nasty stuff! Ivory, Irish Spring, Dawn, Palmolive....ok. Guess we know who had the potty-mouth in MY family, lol. This was so much fun to read--bet your a$$ I won't be letting my kids read this though! No confirmation on Ivory's ability to make things grow (I'm not a guy), but darned if I'm not still allergic to the "clean 99.44" (I still remember the commercial jingle). Thanks for the laugh and best wishes in the contest!
S.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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ANY soap with a fragrance was nasty stuff! Ivory, Irish Spring, Dawn, Palmolive....ok. Guess we know who had the potty-mouth in MY family, lol. This was so much fun to read--bet your a$$ I won't be letting my kids read this though! No confirmation on Ivory's ability to make things grow (I'm not a guy), but darned if I'm not still allergic to the "clean 99.44" (I still remember the commercial jingle). Thanks for the laugh and best wishes in the contest!
S.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Sasil, how thrilled I am to receive this wonderful rating and review from you for my story. Thank you for your comments...and thefact you remembered the commercial is great. I remember that it was so cool that the bar of soap could float in the bathtub. LOL Thank you so much!
Comment from kiwigirl2821
This is a delightful short story rich in imagery, substance, the language is effective, clever and clear. I loved the dialog and overall a great write. xoxo Kiwi
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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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This is a delightful short story rich in imagery, substance, the language is effective, clever and clear. I loved the dialog and overall a great write. xoxo Kiwi
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Comment Written 06-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Thank you, Kiwi, for this great review and for taking the time to read and comment on my story. I'm glad you liked the dialogue and I appreciate your kind words. :>)
Comment from Karen Stram
Hilarious. I can just see the kid sliding into home in the kitchen. Trying on new words is such a big thing with little things. George Carlin would be proud.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Hilarious. I can just see the kid sliding into home in the kitchen. Trying on new words is such a big thing with little things. George Carlin would be proud.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Oh, thank you, Karen, for your wonderful review, rating, and comments for my short story. I especially loved your comment that George carlin wou;ld be proud LOL I'm delighted you enjoyed it and thank you once again. :>)