Poems By AnnieDawn
Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "What Is My Love?"My book of poems and stories
58 total reviews
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
If he is for real. You are one lucky lady. Most women only dream of being treated with a little kindness. Much less getting what you have.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2013
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If he is for real. You are one lucky lady. Most women only dream of being treated with a little kindness. Much less getting what you have.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for your kind and generous review. I do appreciate it.
Comment from tfawcus
How lucky you are to have a love like that! May it last for ever, 'bringing forth laughter long supressed'. A man who 'smoothes away the marks of other travelers' and 'brings forth hope almost forgotten' is one worth hanging on to, I think! My spellchecker says 'smooths' and 'travellers' but I don't think it understands American English! :)
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2013
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How lucky you are to have a love like that! May it last for ever, 'bringing forth laughter long supressed'. A man who 'smoothes away the marks of other travelers' and 'brings forth hope almost forgotten' is one worth hanging on to, I think! My spellchecker says 'smooths' and 'travellers' but I don't think it understands American English! :)
Comment Written 19-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2013
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Thank you so very much for your welcome review. I do appreciate the time and effort you took to do my review.
Comment from michaelcahill
I so apologize for giving away all my sixes. this is one of the most difficult things that any of us ever try to write. we all write about it. how can one be original? how does one not just take those overwhelming feelings into some maudlin sideshow? like this! from that very first beautiful line: "He is a smile begetting a smile" wow! what a perfect line to grab our attention. and then every line that follows lives up to it. I bow to you as deep as these old bones allow. awesome poem. mike
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2013
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I so apologize for giving away all my sixes. this is one of the most difficult things that any of us ever try to write. we all write about it. how can one be original? how does one not just take those overwhelming feelings into some maudlin sideshow? like this! from that very first beautiful line: "He is a smile begetting a smile" wow! what a perfect line to grab our attention. and then every line that follows lives up to it. I bow to you as deep as these old bones allow. awesome poem. mike
Comment Written 19-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2013
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Thank you so very much for your welcome review. I do appreciate the time and effort you took to do my review.
Comment from tbacha58
He is a song without words creating
joy.
What is he?
He is my love.
Woa, a beautiful poem to that special person, you have an amazing pen, and a deep heart, a sincere poem, a love poem, very much did I enjoy reading it. Bless U Terry
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2013
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He is a song without words creating
joy.
What is he?
He is my love.
Woa, a beautiful poem to that special person, you have an amazing pen, and a deep heart, a sincere poem, a love poem, very much did I enjoy reading it. Bless U Terry
Comment Written 18-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2013
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Thank you so very much for your welcome review. I do appreciate the time and effort you took to do my review.
Comment from JendayaB
I really feel this poem, the depth and thought put into it is phenomenal. I can really relate to this feeling of true love and joy. The poem really speaks volumes. Keep Writing!
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2013
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I really feel this poem, the depth and thought put into it is phenomenal. I can really relate to this feeling of true love and joy. The poem really speaks volumes. Keep Writing!
Comment Written 18-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2013
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Thank you so very much for your welcome review. I do appreciate the time and effort you took to do my review.
Comment from Teresa Paul
So this is Free Verse. Well I enjoyed it but I really don't like love poems that much. I usually like poems that rhyme, however for a first time writer. Really not all that bad. Good luck in your contest. Teresa.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2013
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So this is Free Verse. Well I enjoyed it but I really don't like love poems that much. I usually like poems that rhyme, however for a first time writer. Really not all that bad. Good luck in your contest. Teresa.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your welcome review. I do appreciate it.
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I hope you frame this and you're able to give it to your love. I did this for his birthday and it was perfect. Great job with this and I wouldn't change a thing :)
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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I hope you frame this and you're able to give it to your love. I did this for his birthday and it was perfect. Great job with this and I wouldn't change a thing :)
Comment Written 18-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your very, very welcome review and what a wonderful idea framing it for his birthday.
Comment from Righteous Riter
The message is filled with emotion and passion. Good simile usage in Like the endless waves and softness like a summer breeze. Good assonance as well. Overall, good, solid passionate piece.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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The message is filled with emotion and passion. Good simile usage in Like the endless waves and softness like a summer breeze. Good assonance as well. Overall, good, solid passionate piece.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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Thanks so much for your very welcome review. This is my first submitted work so I do appreciate your input.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
He is a smile begetting a smile, LOVE 'begetting'
He is the freedom of the sparrow Great analogy
softness like a summer breeze that 's' allits
shore he smoothes SMOOTHS away the marks of
stirs my inner being and brings 'b' alliteration
forth hope almost forgotten. 'f' "
He is a (song without words) creating LOVE THIS
Well written, with a vertical sense of rushing to the inevitable conclusion.
Regards:
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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He is a smile begetting a smile, LOVE 'begetting'
He is the freedom of the sparrow Great analogy
softness like a summer breeze that 's' allits
shore he smoothes SMOOTHS away the marks of
stirs my inner being and brings 'b' alliteration
forth hope almost forgotten. 'f' "
He is a (song without words) creating LOVE THIS
Well written, with a vertical sense of rushing to the inevitable conclusion.
Regards:
Comment Written 18-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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Thank you so very much for your most welcome review. This is my first submitted work so I do appreciate your input.
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Dear Annie: Welcome to the wonderful world of FS. May you prosper as I and many others have. I got a 3 plus snide remarks on my first entry (Disregard a sniper-reviewer by the name of AVALON). I was crushed but persevered and have made many friends who really care about me. Good luck.
With Respect: Steve C
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
This is a beautiful love poem for the Free Verse Contest. Every line the writer has written shows how much she loves this person and has done so in a very poetic way. I like the third stanza '
He resembles the elements ..... Very well written. Good Luck in the Contest. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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This is a beautiful love poem for the Free Verse Contest. Every line the writer has written shows how much she loves this person and has done so in a very poetic way. I like the third stanza '
He resembles the elements ..... Very well written. Good Luck in the Contest. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 18-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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Thank you so very much for your most welcome review and I also wish you luck in your submissions.