A Picture's Worth a Thousand Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "~Betrothed Remains~"A compilation of pictapoems from my portfolio
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Comment from write hand blue
Your graphics and sound are an excellent combination.
'IT' clamors from dank musty tomb. This is a most appropriate introduction to a Halloween poem. The poem advances with good descriptive content.
Author notes bring further interest, and as you remark truth is stranger than fiction.
:) mel.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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Your graphics and sound are an excellent combination.
'IT' clamors from dank musty tomb. This is a most appropriate introduction to a Halloween poem. The poem advances with good descriptive content.
Author notes bring further interest, and as you remark truth is stranger than fiction.
:) mel.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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Thanks so very much for the outstanding review, Mel. It's very much appreciated!
Comment from TKField
Hello K, this poem arrived just in time for Halloween and such is appropriately spooky and darkly unsettling in a Hammer Horror films kind of way. Or maybe Roger Corman. I just watched "The Masque Of The Red Death" with Vincent Price for the umpteenth time. That flick is mind blowing. The sadism and cruelty were ahead of their time and the saturated colors were beyond belief. Especially if you're stoned chukabone, knowhatImsayin? This, however is more like "The Tomb Of Ligea" also with VP. Check em out.
I especially liked the last stanza. Very evocative and creepy wordplay.
When I got past the bells and whistle distractions, I found a cleverly rhymed set of quads that was effectively unsettling and delightfully captured the joyful spirit of the holiday season.
No, I have never married a corpse, but my ex-wife was so passive in the sack, it was hard to tell the difference. Ha!
"Dank, musty tomb", yeah, well that stands to reason, I mean, you never hear about spiffy, well-lit tombs with twelve-foot ceilings, great views and a wine cellar, do you? No, they're all pretty much dank and musty.
"Pallid bones".. . I know, this is a fancy way to say white, and I would normally scream poetic pretentiousness, but as used here, it works. I had an egg-pallid omelet the other day.
"tarry there"...Yes tarry. I try never to tarry anywhere, except the time I tarried in Tarrytown with my friend Terry and bought a terry-cloth bathrobe.
You got a crypt of vaulted shame. I mean "O" vaulted shame. Shame on you...you cobwebbed vault, you. Add a "dost" a "neath" a "hath" a "hast" two "thy" a "thou" a "thee" a "doth" two "tis" two "midst" a "lo" a "harken" a"twixt", and things are gettin downright Shakespearian.
"Ripe, lustfull flesh lies rotten" I hate when perfectly good ripe, lustful flesh goes bad. If you don't use it in the first few days just wrap it in foil and put it in the freezer, then you can microwave it later.
Now, if you'll excuse me, I have a head in the oven.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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Hello K, this poem arrived just in time for Halloween and such is appropriately spooky and darkly unsettling in a Hammer Horror films kind of way. Or maybe Roger Corman. I just watched "The Masque Of The Red Death" with Vincent Price for the umpteenth time. That flick is mind blowing. The sadism and cruelty were ahead of their time and the saturated colors were beyond belief. Especially if you're stoned chukabone, knowhatImsayin? This, however is more like "The Tomb Of Ligea" also with VP. Check em out.
I especially liked the last stanza. Very evocative and creepy wordplay.
When I got past the bells and whistle distractions, I found a cleverly rhymed set of quads that was effectively unsettling and delightfully captured the joyful spirit of the holiday season.
No, I have never married a corpse, but my ex-wife was so passive in the sack, it was hard to tell the difference. Ha!
"Dank, musty tomb", yeah, well that stands to reason, I mean, you never hear about spiffy, well-lit tombs with twelve-foot ceilings, great views and a wine cellar, do you? No, they're all pretty much dank and musty.
"Pallid bones".. . I know, this is a fancy way to say white, and I would normally scream poetic pretentiousness, but as used here, it works. I had an egg-pallid omelet the other day.
"tarry there"...Yes tarry. I try never to tarry anywhere, except the time I tarried in Tarrytown with my friend Terry and bought a terry-cloth bathrobe.
You got a crypt of vaulted shame. I mean "O" vaulted shame. Shame on you...you cobwebbed vault, you. Add a "dost" a "neath" a "hath" a "hast" two "thy" a "thou" a "thee" a "doth" two "tis" two "midst" a "lo" a "harken" a"twixt", and things are gettin downright Shakespearian.
"Ripe, lustfull flesh lies rotten" I hate when perfectly good ripe, lustful flesh goes bad. If you don't use it in the first few days just wrap it in foil and put it in the freezer, then you can microwave it later.
Now, if you'll excuse me, I have a head in the oven.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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Hah ha, thanks for such a detailed and entertaining review TK, it was a hoot!
Yeah, I had an ex-wife just like yours, once. She was quite lively when having sex. The only problem was, It was my best friend and not me who she was having the sex with.
Second, as far as the Old-world vernacular goes, I can only say that the ghost of Edgar A. made me do it. That dude could scare the bumps off a goose!
And last, but not least, I never allow ripe young flesh to go fetid and spoiled. Everyone I slaughter and prepare for stew is treated equally across the board. I mean, that IS the right thing to do...
;D
Comment from Darkhorse555
oh i liked the cobwebbed crypt and that coffin really done the trick in the moonlit gloom deaths sting excellent piece of writing dear friend i tip my hat smiling
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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oh i liked the cobwebbed crypt and that coffin really done the trick in the moonlit gloom deaths sting excellent piece of writing dear friend i tip my hat smiling
Comment Written 01-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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Hah, thank you so much, Oh Dark One! I'm really glad that you liked this one!
Comment from ElegantButler
There was once a man named Edgar who wrote of similar things. And were it possible for him to escape his earthly resting place, then he would emerge to shake your hand. It is so good that the craft of the morbid love poem has not been lost.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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There was once a man named Edgar who wrote of similar things. And were it possible for him to escape his earthly resting place, then he would emerge to shake your hand. It is so good that the craft of the morbid love poem has not been lost.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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Ah, thank you, ElegantButler! You, sir, have recognized Poe's obvious style and usage of morbid imagery in this, and that is exactly what I had intended. I appreciate the fact that you focused less on the ghastliness of the context, i.e.; wedded corpses and the like, and more on the theme overall. You have restored my faith in poetic reviewing, LOL...
Thank you so much, my friend. An excellent review!
Comment from ravenblack
Now this is pure Poe...not that Poe was a necrophiliac, but his obsession with death and his fear of being buried alive. I think this is one of your creepiest poems. I just hope the guy from your notes did not plan a honeymoon.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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Now this is pure Poe...not that Poe was a necrophiliac, but his obsession with death and his fear of being buried alive. I think this is one of your creepiest poems. I just hope the guy from your notes did not plan a honeymoon.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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Hah, me either, ravenblack. I also hope he didn't consummate the marriage. That could get rather ugly.
Thanks for the fantastic review and for noticing Poe's obvious style techniques. I truly appreciate it.
Comment from Treischel
You never cease to amaze with your clever creepy poetry. Love how you use old English to add a wizened dusting to the verse. Enjoyed you alliteration in: cool cobwebbed crypt, And: ripe lustful flesh lies rotten. As usual you imagery is most creative both visually and in prose.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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You never cease to amaze with your clever creepy poetry. Love how you use old English to add a wizened dusting to the verse. Enjoyed you alliteration in: cool cobwebbed crypt, And: ripe lustful flesh lies rotten. As usual you imagery is most creative both visually and in prose.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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Thanks so much, Mr. 'T', I am truly glad you weighed in on this one for me, and that you enjoyed it.
Thanks again for such a spectacular review, my friend!
Comment from tfawcus
It is refreshing to find some fresh and thought-provoking imagery in this poem. So many in this genre are stuffed full of cliche! 'Vaulted shame' and 'anchored ancients' struck home, as did 'Tis morose here midst these walls'
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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It is refreshing to find some fresh and thought-provoking imagery in this poem. So many in this genre are stuffed full of cliche! 'Vaulted shame' and 'anchored ancients' struck home, as did 'Tis morose here midst these walls'
Comment Written 01-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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Thanks, Tony, and believe me, I struggled to keep from falling into that all-too-familiar trap. After an initial review which garnered me a four star review, I went back and made several revisions. I have to agree with that first reviewer, I feel it's much better now.
Thanks for the great feed back, and the fantastic review...
Comment from Spitfire
Love the picture with the hand creeping out. Also the grusome story in author's notes. You've painted with words the atmosphere of a crypt. This makes me think so much of Poe, particularly the House of Usher.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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Love the picture with the hand creeping out. Also the grusome story in author's notes. You've painted with words the atmosphere of a crypt. This makes me think so much of Poe, particularly the House of Usher.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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Oh, thank you Spit! I love it when someone says my writing is reminiscent of Poe, because he is my poetic hero! Stephen King and Robert Bloch for prose, Edgar Allen Poe and Emily Dickinson for poetry. Thanks for the compliment, I truly appreciate that...
Comment from Ric Myworld
Another great poem and explanation. I'm sure there are many who would find marrying a dead girlfriend romantic, but I wonder how many will feel the same way about consummating the marriage? Now, that was a strange thought.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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Another great poem and explanation. I'm sure there are many who would find marrying a dead girlfriend romantic, but I wonder how many will feel the same way about consummating the marriage? Now, that was a strange thought.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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Ah-h-h-h-h-h-h-h! Perish the thought, UGH! It's weird enough that they even marry the dead, much less...well, you know, LOL...
Thanks for the great review, Ric!
Comment from Gert sherwood
Your perfect rhymed poem is a poem that stirred my curiosity Dean.
So I took time to do some searching. I was surprised by the number of people who do marry their loved one when dead.
One thing I noticed that drew my attention is that -
Mormons even marry the dead by proxy.
My question is how can this wedding be wondrous when they are not filed with tomorrows?
Gert
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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Your perfect rhymed poem is a poem that stirred my curiosity Dean.
So I took time to do some searching. I was surprised by the number of people who do marry their loved one when dead.
One thing I noticed that drew my attention is that -
Mormons even marry the dead by proxy.
My question is how can this wedding be wondrous when they are not filed with tomorrows?
Gert
Comment Written 01-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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Thanks so much, Gert. It is quite a shocking phenomena, isn't it? I was unaware that the Mormons practiced such a bizarre tradition. Very weird!
I really appreciate the info, and the great review.
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You are welcome
Smiles
Gert