Sticks and Stones
Flash Fiction44 total reviews
Comment from mikemagine
Ah! VERY GOOD! So very clever. How many could've dreamed this up?? You went on a LONG trip...went hither and yon...Finally found a place rich with ore...!!
Thanks for sharing!
Mike
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Ah! VERY GOOD! So very clever. How many could've dreamed this up?? You went on a LONG trip...went hither and yon...Finally found a place rich with ore...!!
Thanks for sharing!
Mike
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Wow, thank you for the great review. It is much appreciated.
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My pleasure!!
Comment from AAud
Your writing is crisp and dives right in to the story, leaving no wasted words. I confess when I read this the first time through I made one of those scrunched up faces and said, "Huh?" But on the second read I caught on to what was going on. Just a little slow on my end I guess. LOL
I think I got it now; by deleting the pictures he's deleting the family from Frank's life. That's deep, dude!
I really liked this bit of description: "dissecting the sweet flavor of Frank Baker's favorite Drink."
Awesome job!
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Your writing is crisp and dives right in to the story, leaving no wasted words. I confess when I read this the first time through I made one of those scrunched up faces and said, "Huh?" But on the second read I caught on to what was going on. Just a little slow on my end I guess. LOL
I think I got it now; by deleting the pictures he's deleting the family from Frank's life. That's deep, dude!
I really liked this bit of description: "dissecting the sweet flavor of Frank Baker's favorite Drink."
Awesome job!
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Thank you soo much for taking the time to read, twice, lol. it is much appreciated.
Comment from Ric Myworld
What none of us realize is that things like this happen every day, and would be too easy to pull off without even being suspected, even with today's technology and cameras. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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What none of us realize is that things like this happen every day, and would be too easy to pull off without even being suspected, even with today's technology and cameras. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Ric, thanks for the great review.
Comment from nelliesellie
Charles has a special ability. He can get into other peoples heads and make them commit suicide. They seem to be good people if Frank was an example. He has committed the perfect murder. Great work. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Charles has a special ability. He can get into other peoples heads and make them commit suicide. They seem to be good people if Frank was an example. He has committed the perfect murder. Great work. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Yup. You got it. Thanks for the great review.
Comment from arnie47
I feel you did an excellent job within he parameters of this contest. You did use dissecting in consecutive sentences though in the beginning. I don't know if you're aware of that. But it was entertaining and kept me wondering until the end.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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I feel you did an excellent job within he parameters of this contest. You did use dissecting in consecutive sentences though in the beginning. I don't know if you're aware of that. But it was entertaining and kept me wondering until the end.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Arnie, thanks for the excellent review. It is much appreciated. Have a great day.
Comment from Dean Kuch
This story is very well written from a technical aspect, Mystery Author, but I sort of got lost there at the end. It's probably just me, and happens to me quite a bit with a lot of the flash fiction I read.
So, let me see if I've got this straight...
Charlie takes on the identities of those he murders, the ones of his victims, prior to murdering them? Does he suffer from Multiple Personality Disorder? The reason I ask is the end, where you've written that he slowly drifts back to his own identity. Or, has he murdered himself, and this is just ...no, that wouldn't be possible, because he's contemplating his next victim. Does he do this for pleasure, as a serial killer would, or are these targets he's been contracted to take out, as your beginning narrative suggests?
As I said, the grammar, the composition -- that all looks fine. It's the story itself, how things came to be the way they are for Charlie -- that I'm having some difficulty wrapping my mind around.
Anyhow, I wish you the best of luck, and I fully realize and understand that I am horrible with interpretation. LOL...
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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This story is very well written from a technical aspect, Mystery Author, but I sort of got lost there at the end. It's probably just me, and happens to me quite a bit with a lot of the flash fiction I read.
So, let me see if I've got this straight...
Charlie takes on the identities of those he murders, the ones of his victims, prior to murdering them? Does he suffer from Multiple Personality Disorder? The reason I ask is the end, where you've written that he slowly drifts back to his own identity. Or, has he murdered himself, and this is just ...no, that wouldn't be possible, because he's contemplating his next victim. Does he do this for pleasure, as a serial killer would, or are these targets he's been contracted to take out, as your beginning narrative suggests?
As I said, the grammar, the composition -- that all looks fine. It's the story itself, how things came to be the way they are for Charlie -- that I'm having some difficulty wrapping my mind around.
Anyhow, I wish you the best of luck, and I fully realize and understand that I am horrible with interpretation. LOL...
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Ok. I think sometimes I'm too smart for my own good (or at least try to be). I think I've clarified or at least made my intended meaning clearer if you want to take another look. If not I still appreciate the excellent review and thank you for taking the time.
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Well, you're welcome, just the same.:]
Comment from livelylinda
Author: six star worthy; virtual only today. This is very good. It makes the reader think about who is Charlie and who is Frank, etc. A bizarre and original idea which could easily win you this contest. livelylinda
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Author: six star worthy; virtual only today. This is very good. It makes the reader think about who is Charlie and who is Frank, etc. A bizarre and original idea which could easily win you this contest. livelylinda
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Thank you Linda, your kind comments are definitely appreciated. It seems people are having a tough time getting this one, so I appreciate your rating all the more. Have a great day
Comment from c_lucas
It's always a good thing to lead investigators astray. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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It's always a good thing to lead investigators astray. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Lucas, I appreciate your comments and kind review. I hope you have a great day.
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You're welcome.
Comment from JM
First paragraph got me in a Mission Impossible mode. very good start.
Second paragraph, the word "hundred's" does not need an apostrophe.
I like an assassin who is good at drama. Enjoyed your tale.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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First paragraph got me in a Mission Impossible mode. very good start.
Second paragraph, the word "hundred's" does not need an apostrophe.
I like an assassin who is good at drama. Enjoyed your tale.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Awesome, Thanks for the great review and catching that typo for me...it is much appreciated.
Comment from Acquired Taste
Very good flash fiction - hard to get an entire story with the word count, but this is done quite nicely. Just reading this and a couple of the others, I wonder how many deaths are really accidents or suicides. Best of luck in the contest. AT=/
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Very good flash fiction - hard to get an entire story with the word count, but this is done quite nicely. Just reading this and a couple of the others, I wonder how many deaths are really accidents or suicides. Best of luck in the contest. AT=/
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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AT, I'm glad you liked it and took the time to review. It is much appreciated. Have a great day.